A Second Chance at Love (GL)

I think it's quite interesting. Chapter 9 is a little bit wicked. I like this.

Ennnnnnnnnnn I feel... Mu is a bit stingy in this part. I have been holding back things that can be explained in one sentence. And I always feel that she and Zhao have no sense of proportion (???_??) Don't criticize Ou. Sisters.

A few suggestions (assuming there is no story of fighting the boss with great hatred): 1. If the heroine has a reason for doing this, then at least give some foreshadowing. This is very important to the plot, unless it is a series. You don't need to foreshadow it, just patch it later. It is difficult to patch up independent works. It is better to add foreshadowing at the beginning. Even if the plot is foreshadowed and the audience guesses it, it is better than being stubborn and not telling it at all. Because there is nothing worth guessing, and there is no boss to fight. 2. If there is no reason, it will be even worse. The characters will collapse. There is no plot in this kind of text, and the characters are the most important. In order to distort the plot, the character and the heroine were ruined, and the Ferrari was replaced with a tractor. 3. The two supporting characters can be ridiculous, which is a bonus if the plot is reasonable. But now the plot point is, in this atmosphere, the two protagonists are very awkward, and they are inexplicably awkward. The supporting characters are looking for a sense of presence again, and they are still there to fall in love with each other at first sight, which is a bit ironic. The protagonist is always the core. Otherwise, this plus point will become a minus point. The supporting roles are "the icing on the cake", not "the icing on the cake". Even if it is a heartless and happy ending, the story is extremely sweet. Both the supporting cast and the lead cast are laughing and joking, but the supporting cast has more scenes and steals the scene. Even this kind of plot is not as detracting as [while the protagonist group is still inexplicably awkward, the supporting cast is laughing and joking, almost like a taunt]. 4. The relationship between the heroine and her roommate was discussed below, but I think it is the least problematic. Before the heroine said "xxx doesn't like me anymore", I didn't think there was anything unpleasant about the heroine and her roommate. It's different when I hear this sentence. It feels like my roommate is already qualified to compete with another heroine, but my roommate doesn't like me anymore. What we want to see is that in the field of [love], the heroine should at least put the other heroine first, and preferably everything else. Let others have no qualifications to compare.

If she doesn't understand this operation, if there is something involving the main plot that she can't tell the whole story, forget it, at least give a foreshadowing. Now I feel that this article is not too painful. The main plot of the boss is about to be defeated. I can't think of a reason why I have to hold it back and not talk about it. Don't do it, it's a test. But looking at it is not a test. That would be strange. Water purple sweet potato?

You ask me how deeply I love you, it means

Why not two and a half years?

Hahahaha, I feel sorry for Asheng for three seconds, but it's okay to be targeted again, dangerous, dangerous, dangerous

Help, this He Wen is really Baga

The name in the copywriting is "Mu Zhiyun"

Why do you still have to pretend that you have a "girlfriend" after you have returned to China?