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Yun Jian, sect master of the Demon Sect, successfully worked his way into the top cultivation sect in the immortal realm and became its Venerable Immortal, revered by all.
Yun Jian smiled. "Nothing special."
·
Bored, he casually picked up a little disciple to amuse himself.
The little disciple had a tragic background and a painful past. Born with red eyes, he was bullied relentlessly. At first glance, he was a perfect candidate for demonic cultivation.
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Wearing the secret identity of a radiant, noble Venerable Immortal, Yun Jian began raising his disciple. He tested him with greed, anger, delusion, resentment, love, hatred, and desire, trying to nurture a heart demon.
Luring him with rare treasures, cultivation manuals, and immortal weapons, Yun Jian said, "Everything you want can be yours."
Zi Yang turned around in alarm. "I don't want any of that!"
·
Yun Jian whispered temptingly in Zi Yang's ear, "Your spiritual roots are ruined and your meridians are severed. Aren't you resentful? Don't you want revenge?"
Zi Yang suddenly clapped his hands over his ears and jumped away, vanishing in a flash.
·
Yun Jian took Zi Yang to experience the power of strength.
Zi Yang's whole body stiffened, and he didn't make a sound the entire time.
Yun Jian flew into a rage. "Even that couldn't move you? You're the very hope of the righteous path!"
He turned around and discarded both his secret identity and his disciple.
·
But when he returned to the Demon Sect, he discovered that his disciple had been waiting for him at the gate for ages.
Zi Yang smiled faintly and trapped him in his arms. "Master, you tempted and bewitched me. Wasn't this exactly what you wanted?"
·
Yun Jian: ? Maybe it was, maybe it wasn't.
But why is the entire cultivation world saying I seduced him and abandoned him?
"Greed, anger, delusion, resentment, love, hatred, and desire. I only have one of them." Zi Yang touched Yun Jian's lips and pressed his advantage. "But you have all of them, Master."
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[Reading Guide]
1. A bewitching, wicked beauty who flirts without realizing it, shou x a restrained, obsessive younger gong. 1v1, HE.
2. A rule of the community: Please don't bring up other works under this novel, and don't mention this novel under other works (heart).
3. If you don't like it, please exit using the top-left corner. Don't scold the characters. If the silly author simply didn't write it well... give me a chance to improve, okay? QAQ
---- Upcoming Historical Danmei ----
"After Faking My Death and Losing My Memory, My Mortal Enemy Took Advantage of Me"
Shen Mu transmigrated into a book, a serious political intrigue novel with no romance whatsoever. He was unexpectedly swept into court conflicts and dragged through one crisis after another.
At last, the story ended. Shen Mu faked his death and fled overnight, only to accidentally lose his memory with a poof.
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He stared blankly at the man who had surrounded him with troops, sensing murderous intent. The other man turned around and accused him of seducing him, playing with his feelings, then running away.
Shen Mu: ?
Am I that kind of person?
·
Shen Mu saw traces of himself everywhere in the other man's prince's residence, and an inexplicable wave of guilt washed over him.
M-Maybe he really was that kind of person...
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Shen Mu immediately said he would take responsibility.
Yan Zhaoxuan pushed his luck. "Then give me a kiss."
Shen Mu, who had never been in a relationship, froze, at a loss.
Yan Zhaoxuan: "You're in the chase-your-husband-to-the-crematorium stage now, you know!"
Shen Mu, who had remembered some of it: ?
Is this the kind of book I transmigrated into?
·
When he finally remembered the entire plot, it was too late to change anything. Shen Mu lay flat on the bed and pondered: Perhaps... he was filling in the extra chapters?
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Reading Guide:
Sweet everyday romance, no crematorium plot whatsoever. 1v1, HE.
A beautiful, proper, old-fashioned strategist with a history degree, shou
VS
A big-doggy prince, infamous for his fearsome reputation and skilled at taking every inch he's given, gong
Theme: No hardship lasts forever. When you're stuck in the mud, someone will pull you out of this desperate situation. When you're walking alone in the dark, someone will bring the sunshine to your side.
Because I like Feijiu... I thought the chapter with the bird in the palm was too cute and I couldn't get enough of it. After reading this one, I felt that it was a bit stiff in some places, but it was just a small flaw. The teacher is very thoughtful and the article is very interesting. I hope the author can write more articles and remind me of new articles (woo)
Seven gourd baby apprentices, their master who loves to pick up children, and the jealous 'stepmother'! ! ! Hahaha.
I mean, author, you all know that your plot is not very good, so can you correct the wrong words and sentences of yours? I understand that you need to overhaul it, but you have too many typos and wrong sentences, which makes people speechless. I have read the comment area, and there are people who catch the mistakes in basically every chapter, but they still don't change it even after leaving it for such a long time...
The writing is really messy in many places. I have written a lot, but I don't know what the plot is. The emotional line and plot line twists are very stiff and really need to be improved. There are too many bugs in the plot line. Many of them feel like they were written in the past and forgotten later. At the end of the extra chapter, there is no explanation of how the injured eye was injured and cannot be seen.
The writing style cannot be said to be bad, but it is better than Xiaobai. Some of the words and sentences in the article should not be too modern. It is really dramatic. This is a fantasy fairy tale. In some parts of the dialogue, I thought it was a modern novel.
I won't give examples of some specific illogical logic in the article. I can only say that the plot direction of this book makes people want to continue reading, but it is not boring. I have read the book of Emperor Mushrooms. In comparison, the plot narrative has improved. The writing style really needs more polish. With favorite characters and a good plot, the writing style has to keep up. I wish the author will write better and better. After all, I am very interested in most of the columns, and the character copywriting can attract people.
It still feels like a pity. The writing of this article is very attractive, and the rhythm in the early stage is also very good. The pace inexplicably speeds up from the 30th to 40th chapter, and the connection catches people off guard, but the overall emotional line is still very good, but the logic of the master's sudden departure, especially the logic of Shou, is a bit unclear. Whether it is stabbing the apprentice for half his life or walking away in five years, including the reasons and complications of the plot, all the grievances and grudges are basically explained in one stroke. You only know that Shou has been taking revenge and doing things. It jumps around without a heart but with delicate thoughts, and then Gong kneels and licks, and the detailed psychological description is basically skipped. The reason given is that they know each other too well, and after losing the vest a few chapters ago, Gong discovered that he did not understand his master at all. Then after these few chapters, the two of them had not had any contact for several years, and suddenly they understood each other so well that they didn't need to ask any questions because they knew it all (what the hell). Moreover, Gong is really good at licking. He is full of emotions but exaggerated. After being ignored for many years and then meeting him once, he can let Gong be his chess piece by hooking his fingers. He is completely manipulated and helps him to do things and act. From my personal point of view, I feel that the character creation is too one-sided and flat, not three-dimensional and not like a real person, and too paper-like. Moreover, the blackening is also very nonsensical. According to a series of indifferent operations by the target, the attacker does not want to subvert the chessboard and guide the target to come to him or wait to achieve the love and possessiveness in his heart. Instead, it turns into some kind of greed, hatred, and infatuation, where love and possessiveness are getting stronger and stronger. Then the solution is to wait. When Shou shows up, he will chase him. Including Gong's emotional changes, the article also mentions that many people can't figure out the relationship between the two people, and drawing books are flying all over the place. Yes, that's no problem, but the key is that it's not just the background panels that can't be figured out, but also the readers. I strongly recommend you to re-read this article yourself (the work from a year ago really has a lot of room for improvement, but, because I didn't read many comments on this book, they were all good). Review, I haven't written many articles, so I'm a newcomer, and I look forward to better Gudan works. There is still a big difference between urban and Gudan. A dozen Gudans with a revenue of 3,000 are evenly divided, and less than 50 people rated the Gudan with a revenue of 30,000. It's normal, but the copywriting and writing style deserve better data. Of course, I didn't read the urban article, just for this one), understand the emotional line, what is this thing, you can understand it yourself. It makes sense that Shou hopes that Gong will follow him and train him to be a "devil heretic", but the question of him wanting to follow him is so sudden. You just want to make things happen, but you don't tell Gong to leave him alone for five years. You finally meet him and ignore him several times. When he finally reveals the truth about his past, he doesn't give him a chance to respond. He even asks, "You lied to me about my feelings." You went from being the master who I admired and saved the world to this deviant, cruel and merciless demon who ignored me several times and I didn't even have time to complain. I didn't even have the chance to wait until I stabbed half of my life. (It's okay to explain it from the perspective of Shou, because he wants Gong to choose himself, and this is why he was trained. He doesn't care about whether Gong Shou is injured, but he can't just ignore the angle of Gong.) Then he gave Gong a subordinate, He went down the mountain, went around treating diseases and rescuing people, and then forgot about all the past grudges. Look at his attitude towards Shou. It's not a black man. It's just to put some distance between him and create some ambiguity, and to add a buff like the inner demons specially added in the article. Not to mention, there are too many details, the emotional connection is not connected with the plot, and the introduction is unclear. Then, you can explain Gong's indifference by saying that he doesn't have a heart, but he has to be consistent. He has no heart. He knows that Gong likes her and takes it for granted. Then what happens? He lets Gong continue to like him and then does cool work for him. What is his emotional logic, whether to love or not to love, to use or not to use, and his ambiguous attitude. It's very confusing.
To sum up, I strongly recommend that you read it again (the details and the logic behind the protagonist's behavior can fool the background of the book but not the readers). After all, after a year, you may have new experiences and insights. But of course, if you feel that writing articles is your business route and you plan to reuse articles of a similar level to cater to the market and make money in the future, then please treat all of the above as nonsense, but the increase in new platforms in the recession of JJ also needs to be considered. But after all, it doesn't sound good to tell these truths, and it's also offensive. My original intention was just to feel sorry for this article. If you don't like it, don't get angry because it's not good for your health. I'm not just idle to check on you or give you life guidance. Small details such as the structure of the worldview is somewhat unclear, the introduction is not concrete, and it is similar to the combination of entropy, hell, and the ordinary world of cultivation. I will not mention it. These are minor problems in comparison.
Ah? When did I order it all? (Amnesia)
Congratulations on finishing DaDa, looking forward to new posts! Love you! (≧?≦)/
Haha, Young Master Fox is very capable~
Master is so good, I like it so much
I have a friend who...
Hahahaha
Woohoo, by the way, does Yunjian know that the sword spirit is Ah Yu?
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Because I like Feijiu... I thought the chapter with the bird in the palm was too cute and I couldn't get enough of it. After reading this one, I felt that it was a bit stiff in some places, but it was just a small flaw. The teacher is very thoughtful and the article is very interesting. I hope the author can write more articles and remind me of new articles (woo)
Seven gourd baby apprentices, their master who loves to pick up children, and the jealous 'stepmother'! ! ! Hahaha.
I mean, author, you all know that your plot is not very good, so can you correct the wrong words and sentences of yours? I understand that you need to overhaul it, but you have too many typos and wrong sentences, which makes people speechless. I have read the comment area, and there are people who catch the mistakes in basically every chapter, but they still don't change it even after leaving it for such a long time... The writing is really messy in many places. I have written a lot, but I don't know what the plot is. The emotional line and plot line twists are very stiff and really need to be improved. There are too many bugs in the plot line. Many of them feel like they were written in the past and forgotten later. At the end of the extra chapter, there is no explanation of how the injured eye was injured and cannot be seen. The writing style cannot be said to be bad, but it is better than Xiaobai. Some of the words and sentences in the article should not be too modern. It is really dramatic. This is a fantasy fairy tale. In some parts of the dialogue, I thought it was a modern novel. I won't give examples of some specific illogical logic in the article. I can only say that the plot direction of this book makes people want to continue reading, but it is not boring. I have read the book of Emperor Mushrooms. In comparison, the plot narrative has improved. The writing style really needs more polish. With favorite characters and a good plot, the writing style has to keep up. I wish the author will write better and better. After all, I am very interested in most of the columns, and the character copywriting can attract people.
It still feels like a pity. The writing of this article is very attractive, and the rhythm in the early stage is also very good. The pace inexplicably speeds up from the 30th to 40th chapter, and the connection catches people off guard, but the overall emotional line is still very good, but the logic of the master's sudden departure, especially the logic of Shou, is a bit unclear. Whether it is stabbing the apprentice for half his life or walking away in five years, including the reasons and complications of the plot, all the grievances and grudges are basically explained in one stroke. You only know that Shou has been taking revenge and doing things. It jumps around without a heart but with delicate thoughts, and then Gong kneels and licks, and the detailed psychological description is basically skipped. The reason given is that they know each other too well, and after losing the vest a few chapters ago, Gong discovered that he did not understand his master at all. Then after these few chapters, the two of them had not had any contact for several years, and suddenly they understood each other so well that they didn't need to ask any questions because they knew it all (what the hell). Moreover, Gong is really good at licking. He is full of emotions but exaggerated. After being ignored for many years and then meeting him once, he can let Gong be his chess piece by hooking his fingers. He is completely manipulated and helps him to do things and act. From my personal point of view, I feel that the character creation is too one-sided and flat, not three-dimensional and not like a real person, and too paper-like. Moreover, the blackening is also very nonsensical. According to a series of indifferent operations by the target, the attacker does not want to subvert the chessboard and guide the target to come to him or wait to achieve the love and possessiveness in his heart. Instead, it turns into some kind of greed, hatred, and infatuation, where love and possessiveness are getting stronger and stronger. Then the solution is to wait. When Shou shows up, he will chase him. Including Gong's emotional changes, the article also mentions that many people can't figure out the relationship between the two people, and drawing books are flying all over the place. Yes, that's no problem, but the key is that it's not just the background panels that can't be figured out, but also the readers. I strongly recommend you to re-read this article yourself (the work from a year ago really has a lot of room for improvement, but, because I didn't read many comments on this book, they were all good). Review, I haven't written many articles, so I'm a newcomer, and I look forward to better Gudan works. There is still a big difference between urban and Gudan. A dozen Gudans with a revenue of 3,000 are evenly divided, and less than 50 people rated the Gudan with a revenue of 30,000. It's normal, but the copywriting and writing style deserve better data. Of course, I didn't read the urban article, just for this one), understand the emotional line, what is this thing, you can understand it yourself. It makes sense that Shou hopes that Gong will follow him and train him to be a "devil heretic", but the question of him wanting to follow him is so sudden. You just want to make things happen, but you don't tell Gong to leave him alone for five years. You finally meet him and ignore him several times. When he finally reveals the truth about his past, he doesn't give him a chance to respond. He even asks, "You lied to me about my feelings." You went from being the master who I admired and saved the world to this deviant, cruel and merciless demon who ignored me several times and I didn't even have time to complain. I didn't even have the chance to wait until I stabbed half of my life. (It's okay to explain it from the perspective of Shou, because he wants Gong to choose himself, and this is why he was trained. He doesn't care about whether Gong Shou is injured, but he can't just ignore the angle of Gong.) Then he gave Gong a subordinate, He went down the mountain, went around treating diseases and rescuing people, and then forgot about all the past grudges. Look at his attitude towards Shou. It's not a black man. It's just to put some distance between him and create some ambiguity, and to add a buff like the inner demons specially added in the article. Not to mention, there are too many details, the emotional connection is not connected with the plot, and the introduction is unclear. Then, you can explain Gong's indifference by saying that he doesn't have a heart, but he has to be consistent. He has no heart. He knows that Gong likes her and takes it for granted. Then what happens? He lets Gong continue to like him and then does cool work for him. What is his emotional logic, whether to love or not to love, to use or not to use, and his ambiguous attitude. It's very confusing. To sum up, I strongly recommend that you read it again (the details and the logic behind the protagonist's behavior can fool the background of the book but not the readers). After all, after a year, you may have new experiences and insights. But of course, if you feel that writing articles is your business route and you plan to reuse articles of a similar level to cater to the market and make money in the future, then please treat all of the above as nonsense, but the increase in new platforms in the recession of JJ also needs to be considered. But after all, it doesn't sound good to tell these truths, and it's also offensive. My original intention was just to feel sorry for this article. If you don't like it, don't get angry because it's not good for your health. I'm not just idle to check on you or give you life guidance. Small details such as the structure of the worldview is somewhat unclear, the introduction is not concrete, and it is similar to the combination of entropy, hell, and the ordinary world of cultivation. I will not mention it. These are minor problems in comparison.
Ah? When did I order it all? (Amnesia)
Congratulations on finishing DaDa, looking forward to new posts! Love you! (≧?≦)/
Haha, Young Master Fox is very capable~
Master is so good, I like it so much
I have a friend who... Hahahaha
Woohoo, by the way, does Yunjian know that the sword spirit is Ah Yu?