The third installment in the Sky: Children of the Light series: The Story of the Twin Ancestors
Inspired by the Valley of Triumph map, various elements from the game, and a little hearsay about the game's lore, this story adds a touch of imagination to piece together the tale of the Valley of Triumph's ancestors as I envision it.
The city of the Valley of Triumph hosts a sliding race that is famous across the continent. Its origins can be traced back to a fierce struggle, long ago, between a group of people from the foothills known as the "Sliders" and the temple atop the mountain.
In those days, the people of the Valley were plagued by a strange illness. Only the holy water supplied by the temple could cure it, but the miserly temple gave the water only to believers who paid tribute. Everyone else could do nothing but wait to die.
Still, a small number of people refused to submit to the temple. They secretly slipped into the tribute caravans, fought hard to seize holy water from the guards, and sold it to the desperate people at the foot of the mountain.
People watched them make their stylish descents down the mountain and, grateful, called them the "Sliders." That was how the name came about.
Alef is an ordinary person who accidentally steps into the world of the Sliders in place of his older brother, Dales. To his astonishment, he discovers that the brother he sees every day is one of the strongest people in the group.
Inspired, he works tirelessly to grow stronger and catch up to his brother. But little by little, he discovers a hidden side to the city and its Sliders, and is plunged into anguish.
Betrayal and schemes close in on the two brothers. Forced to part from his younger brother, Dales agonizes over their futures even as he realizes he must change.
The whirlpool swirling around the two brothers gradually draws the entire city into its depths. In the end, even the lofty temple can no longer ignore them, and decides to wipe out these troublesome people once and for all.
[Notes]
1. The characters in the prologue carry over from the first two installments. The actual story begins in Chapter Two and has two points of view.
2. I'm thick-skinned, so feel free to share your opinions, criticism, and writing advice. You can even tell me if you're dropping the story. I'd appreciate it if you included your reasons, and I'll take everything to heart.
Theme: Freedom and equality
Wuwuwuwu, Mrs. Wu is written by a fairy! It's great! It's hard not to love the character creation, plot setting and dual perspective! Although the plot will be slow at the beginning, be patient, friends, this treasure article is worth it! The writing style is a little bit esoteric, and it looks a little bit like a Riddler in some places, but this is also a characteristic. (I don't mean to say it in a bad way!) The mystery of the article comes up immediately, and the color sense of fantasy adventure is really delicious! It is a piece of light encounter fandom that is different but also has a fantasy and magnificent color. Readers and friends who are not children of light can also read it as a fantasy novel) Don't miss it if you pass by! (Eat my Amway!) Next is my reading comprehension style of (color) praise (rainbow) praise (fart): 1. The beginning is full of suspense, and the protagonist is introduced by the memories of future generations. It is fascinating, praise! 2. Thank you for your hard work. I have carefully revised the article for each chapter. Although I am sorry that I haven't read it for so long and I have forgotten what it was like before. But from the newly revised chapters, I can clearly feel that my wife has made better progress in paragraphs and writing. Applause! 3. Da Da's literary talent has always been excellent! The action, psychological environment and other details are described in detail, giving people a strong sense of picture. Each description has the characteristics of the character's image, making the characters flesh and blood and making the plot full and vivid. 4. The plot design has ups and downs! From the "fu" of the twin family background at the beginning to the "rising" of Dai Lesi becoming an excellent skater, from the "rising" of Aleph showing his amazing talent in skating for the first time to the "fu" of Dai being executed in the square, (I can't say more, because it would be a spoiler, curious friends, please open it and take a look~) The plot setting is gripping and makes people want to stop! 5. The double-line structure is cleverly handled. Different from the pas de deux in which the two protagonists are in the same situation, this article is unfolded from the two perspectives of Aleph and Dai Lesi. It is like writing two articles. The two perspectives are independent, but they closely cooperate with each other in the plot, and the processing and conception are very clever. 6. The suspense at the end paved the way for the next part, but it really left a hole in this one. (Personally: I hope Gu Gugu is okay qwq) There are still many doubts that have not been solved. It makes people look forward to the next plot even more. Next, I will briefly give you some small opinions here. I hope you don't find me verbose. Of course, there is no malice. It is purely a personal opinion. I am neither a black man nor an expert. I will save my life. First, the schedule should not be too dense. In fact, I have noticed this problem myself, but there are still a lot of long paragraphs in the article, which makes the article (if you turn the pages with your phone while reading) a bit draggy. Although the overall length is no problem, on the online article platform, it is best not to make each paragraph of the article too long. It's okay to have the same length, but it's best not to suddenly have a long paragraph that takes up more than half a page, a page, or even more than one page among several short paragraphs that only have one or two lines. It's a bit abrupt; or there are several paragraphs that take up more than half a page. To be honest, it's a little tiring to read. Usually after I finish writing, I use my mobile phone to adjust the font size to a larger one, and try reading the article in different font sizes to see if I may have new ideas for arranging paragraph lengths. Second, pay a little attention to the details. It is understandable that Dada wanted to describe the picture in detail, and Dada's detailed description is indeed a highlight of the article. However, in some places, the excessive accumulation of details has led to a sense of cumbersomeness. As for the later articles, I can also understand that most people may think that it is not necessary to write the details that have been written before, so they are written more briefly, but this creates another sense of emptiness. Proper detailing is still very important. In fact, in the last part of the chapter, this problem has been almost solved, but the previous chapter does feel a bit cumbersome. However, this is indeed affected by the background and setting of Hongdae. I hope you can find your own optimal solution! Come on! I'm really sorry that I haven't responded to Dada for so long in preparation for the college entrance examination. You wrote it very well. I look forward to Dada's next novel! Compare your heart~ (Final PS: It's purely Amway, don't mess with me. Thank you mua for seeing me at the end)
Wow ah ah ah fairy lady!!! Woo woo woo, the writing is so good!!! I love it so much!!! Looking forward to the next one www
Finished the chase in one go?????????? It's hard to get rid of good intentions oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
The writing is really good, please work hard!
It's so awesome? Come on, come on!
Heart ~ written in big letters is great!!!! Come on?!!!!! Love you!
Come on, come on! I really like Dada's writing, Dada is so awesome! Come on?
I want to see the follow-up. Come on big
The writing style is also great! Personally, I feel that this article is suitable for watching "Lonely Warrior" (the name of the music), no matter the plot or anything else! The author is great! Come on come on!!
I can't keep writing anymore, so I'll stop updating for a while and write a short story next door to change things up.