Perhaps We Once Met

It's pretty good, but I think the ghost story is a bit boring. Please keep writing.

It seems that Xiao Su's character has changed a bit after the change, which is good.

Didn't you expect that Brother Song could also see ghosts? It's a surprising plot. Next, the author's theme can be expressed through the different reactions of these two people when facing various supernatural events. But it's okay if you don't read this chapter carefully. If you read it carefully, you will find that some emotions are quite sudden, such as why you can be so calm even after your sister is dead. Indeed, it is not easy to explain it clearly in just a few thousand words, right? Xiaoyao, don't be in a hurry. Take your time and outline the characters one by one. I think it will be much better this way. But it's very good. It grasped the basic image, which is amazing ^_^ Very much looking forward to it, come on!

Can it be scored repeatedly? To be conservative, I won't rate this yet. How to write the article next depends on Xiaoyao's conception, whether it is a sketch type or a light novel type. It depends on what you want to express, Xiaoyao. As long as you unpack the baggage in a hurry, straighten out everything, put more effort into the character design, and if you want to write a longer story, you can use Xiao Shou's ability to add more characters, add some organization and so on, occasionally mix in some Natsume-style touching weird stories, and add a little hype, a handful of black and a black, and some CP, etc., This article will not be far away from becoming popular. Anyway, the development of the plot depends on the author, so work hard!

It's very atmospheric, especially the end of the last chapter...

Very good, 90 points GET! But let's be honest, why can you inexplicably hit my cuteness>< Who is that brother? Very much looking forward to it. What is Xiao Shou planning to do? Could it be... Recruiting, summoning spirits?! ←←←Cute and cute

Sofa, man in long gown, broken hand fan? Who?

First of all, let me say that I can't speak because I hit the cute spot. By the way, why is it so cute? There are three reasons: One, looking at this trend, it will have a fantasy element. I love fantasy and think it's a nice twist in the article. Write about love and career, what about the chaos in the palace and the struggle for supremacy in the stock market, where are the monsters and evil spirits? "I love you, I will give you all my money, car, and house." "Fuck you, get out of here, I want to catch monsters." This kind of dialogue is so transcendent of material things that it touches people's hearts. It would be boring to write too much about the relationships between people, so why not add some fantasy and emotional spices at this time? Second, it is a youth campus. Youth campus, this environment setting that has been overwritten and tired of being written about, has become more popular over time (?) It is necessary to write about the youthful excitement, naivety, and untested passion of youth, and add fantasy elements, how cute it would be~ Three, it is a relaxed style. Nowadays, many people dare to challenge the bottom line of human BT. A good school is described as a dirty and dirty school. Today you will fuck you and I will fuck you tomorrow. I will fuck you from time to time. From time to time, violent SM will make me sweat. A good youth should be passionate and warm. Friends, bonds, occasional confusion, firm choices, ah, it's all about cuteness (you are truly a G. A. Y) So how did Xiaoyao write this article? We don't know because we haven't written much yet = = But it can be seen that she did not intend to be pretentious and piling up rhetoric. She was simple and straightforward, which is really worthy of appreciation. So, except for some shortcomings, this article is worth reading. ... But let's talk about the flaws below. The first is the time jump issue in this chapter. In this article, Xiaoyao suddenly (sorry to use this word) comes to an event two years later. This kind of interjection is not impossible, but it is a bit unacceptable for you to insert a paragraph right at the beginning of a sentence, and it can be regarded as redundant. It's like that. Xiao Ming was walking on the road. Three years later, Xiaohong held his hand and walked along this road. It's very shocking to see. If you ask me why I am pursuing this issue so closely, it is of course because I am trying my best to squeeze in a long comment, and I cannot let go of any point that can be written. The ancients told us that if we want to be poor, we should be poorer. Now, even if this article has nothing to complain about, I still want to dig out more points to complain about. ... Okay, continue. So, how to solve this problem? How about "Two years later, in the same classroom, Su Mu was waiting for Song Yang. He turned off the lights, and the bright moonlight was cut to pieces by the blinds. Su Mu opened the blinds and saw Song Yang's face through a layer of glass, smiling cheerfully at him. Su Mu was helpless, smiling a little dazedly under the moonlight: "Idiot, I knew you would be like this. "Delete this paragraph. This will make the context more coherent." Next, let's talk about the eternal topic of "characters". Of course, Xiao Yao has just written the first chapter and I'm not sure how well he's portrayed, but please remember, he must have personality. Good, bad, sour, sweet, bitter, spicy are all personal characteristics. The more outstanding the personality, the more vivid the article will be. Since I've already written about this subject, let me capture the cuteness!!!!!!!! Remember not to make the character look thin and pale. Also, if you dare to cheat, I won't spare you ^_^