In the bleak autumn wind, he was the first man she had ever seen;
As the parasol leaves fell, she was a flower from the other shore blooming amid despair;
The fiery red flames and the pure blue ocean, ice and fire entwined in a passionate dance;
One breathtaking glance was all it took to seal their fates for life;
Love and hate? Passion and vengeance!
For love, she became a demon with a single thought;
For hate, he burned himself and his kingdom to ash;
Love is no sin, so what of hate? Love and hate are separated by a single thought;
Your article is the same as mine before. The biggest problem is... The issue of perspective!!! Since you want to write in the first person, you need to unify the perspective issue. There is a section in this chapter from Jing Ling's perspective... I would like to give you two suggestions: First, change the perspective problem. You can check out my revised version because my article is also in the first person. The original perspective problem was also very serious, and there was also a master's perspective. However, after the revision, this problem has basically been solved (although I am not a master and my writing is not very good, but my article has the same problem as yours, so you should still be able to refer to it). Second, while there are not many words, replace all personal pronouns with third person, so that there will be no perspective problem. The above is just my personal opinion, please forgive me if I offend you!
It's in the first person... It was so tragic from the beginning!
Read and stamped... I have scolded several people for their layout today, so why don't you... Arrange them in alternate rows, okay?
I hope your book will become popular and I will keep an eye on you. No matter what, I support you anyway. Although there are fewer people following you now, there should be many more in the future.
Waiting for the update, it's good, keep up the good work, I don't know if it's a sofa, but I'll be here to keep you updated.
Wow wow, I have written so much already, Olai. . . Did you write the poem yourself? Ah, so envious. . . Talented woman, absolutely talented woman.
This chapter is normal in terms of personal pronouns. I don't know what happened in the previous chapter. I will continue to support you!
I'm here again, yes, the story is still attractive, but the fairy skirt should be like a flowing stream. Hehe, also, the personal relationship feels a bit confusing. Is each character written in the first person? This is a bit awkward. For example: After leaving Jing's room, I went straight to the east wing of my mother. This should be said by the prince in the first person, but before the prince, the heroine has already been written in the first person, and here the prince is written in the first person, which I feel is awkward. There are many places like this. I think this sentence should be changed to "Leaving Jing's room, the prince went straight to the east wing of his mother." It would be better to write it in the first person of the heroine! The above ideas are purely personal opinions. Don't mind if I say something bad. Overall, the storyline is quite good.
Is Shu'er a real princess?????
Shuer is refined and charming, Zixian is a charming pair of sisters.