Some natural paragraphs are too long and make you feel impatient when reading them. It would be nice if you could divide the overly long paragraphs into two paragraphs. I also felt that the first few chapters were a bit long-winded and explained too many unnecessary things. I feel like I just got to the point in Chapter 4
To be honest, this book attracted me very much at the beginning, "I finally met someone who writes apocalyptic stories seriously. He is pragmatic and logical, a little cruel but also tender. It seems that the emotional lines of the characters are not awkward." I was so happy that I even stayed up all night for it... Until the middle and later parts, I started to feel sloppy. , It was a bit broken, and even added fantasy elements, and I was still struggling with whether to abandon the article. Until the end, I felt that the author was in good condition again, and the foreshadowing laid at the end was probably fulfilled. It was a good article that I felt after reading it. Thank you to the author for bringing me a good mood.
If this is really the male protagonist, I guess he is probably the original male protagonist, because this name fits the setting of the heroine Mary Sue in the book too well.
Every time a male character appears, I wonder if he is the male protagonist. I even dislike them for not having the same sense of coordination as the female protagonist and the younger brother (of course Jinjiang is not allowed to write about younger brothers, but they can be developed as adults). As a result, a character who is most likely to be the male protagonist appears...
It's so rare. The protagonists in the post-apocalyptic novels I tested are all self-contained. Finally, I saw a protagonist who would take the initiative to save others.
"Like" is a big thorn in the side of the author~
It should be "towards".
The ending is a bit too sloppy
What were the weapons of Tang Wei?
The male protagonist is actually called Dongfang Shuo!! Taken off the shelves, I hate using real historical names! Disrespectful!
There's a lot of nonsense in the first chapter, it feels like I'm writing the author's family history
Some natural paragraphs are too long and make you feel impatient when reading them. It would be nice if you could divide the overly long paragraphs into two paragraphs. I also felt that the first few chapters were a bit long-winded and explained too many unnecessary things. I feel like I just got to the point in Chapter 4
To be honest, this book attracted me very much at the beginning, "I finally met someone who writes apocalyptic stories seriously. He is pragmatic and logical, a little cruel but also tender. It seems that the emotional lines of the characters are not awkward." I was so happy that I even stayed up all night for it... Until the middle and later parts, I started to feel sloppy. , It was a bit broken, and even added fantasy elements, and I was still struggling with whether to abandon the article. Until the end, I felt that the author was in good condition again, and the foreshadowing laid at the end was probably fulfilled. It was a good article that I felt after reading it. Thank you to the author for bringing me a good mood.
If this is really the male protagonist, I guess he is probably the original male protagonist, because this name fits the setting of the heroine Mary Sue in the book too well.
Every time a male character appears, I wonder if he is the male protagonist. I even dislike them for not having the same sense of coordination as the female protagonist and the younger brother (of course Jinjiang is not allowed to write about younger brothers, but they can be developed as adults). As a result, a character who is most likely to be the male protagonist appears...
It's so rare. The protagonists in the post-apocalyptic novels I tested are all self-contained. Finally, I saw a protagonist who would take the initiative to save others.
"Like" is a big thorn in the side of the author~ It should be "towards".
The ending is a bit too sloppy
What were the weapons of Tang Wei?
The male protagonist is actually called Dongfang Shuo!! Taken off the shelves, I hate using real historical names! Disrespectful!
There's a lot of nonsense in the first chapter, it feels like I'm writing the author's family history