Peacocks Fly Southeast

This is an imaginary online game article without a love tag. The author is confused as to whether this is a story. I think it is more like describing a tearless growth process of the little priest, in which love is just an embellishment. There are no dangerous leveling scenes, no heart-wrenching love, it just makes people feel like they are in a quiet continent, Hilt. After the war, in order to restore the population of Hilt, a group of newborns grew up to fifteen years old directly after being baptized by priests. The heroine Wutear was one of them. Lin Ke, the priest who baptized Wu Tear, died because of her and left her a notebook. The word "normal heart" in the note was remembered by Wu Tear and became a clue throughout the entire text. Wu Tie's parents are extremely indifferent to her, and her beautiful sister doesn't care enough about her. She has a crush on her only close brother Yi Yu - destined to be fruitless. Under a series of blows, the word "normal heart" always supported her, or in other words, Lin Ke, the spiritual mentor, was with her. But Wu Lei is just a little girl. Even if she is not good-looking, she still loves beauty. The details of her buying the charity outfit illustrate this point. Because it is professional attire, and it has some connection with the ideal of no tears, the transition is more subtle. When it comes to family members' indifference, it reaches the pinnacle - Wu Tear even learns his last name from outsiders. This only happens under certain circumstances. Faced with the dual pressures of the struggle for family power and the mission of promoting all-intelligent priests (the reformist faction of the No Tears), the author could have portrayed more of the fragility that No Tears endured. The protagonist did not experience many events, perhaps due to space limitations. In fact, he could try to concentrate on writing by deleting the characters. From the copywriting point of view, Zimo and Wu Lei could have written more stories. Speaking of the love embellishment in it, the old saying "I wish to be a winged bird in the sky, and a twig on the earth" is used a bit abruptly. After all, the carriage mentioned in the article also feels like Cinderella's Western-style pumpkin carriage. It is natural for readers to be familiar with Jay Chou's lyrics. Each author is not required to compose his own lyrics and music, and the disappearing secret love can be expressed in less gorgeous language: "It turns out that I have already given up. But the person who was picked up also put himself down at the same time. Fate. Reincarnation. Retribution. " I don't dare to comment on the author's writing style just by reading this article, but this kind of light writing style without ups and downs is undoubtedly what the author is good at. In the singing competition, the reason Wu Tear attracted the Chu brothers, apart from the notebook, should be more of her personal charm. In the third person, language and behavioral descriptions are particularly important. However, the friendship between the Chu brothers and her before they became a trio was a bit thin. They decided to help each other not long after they met, which is inevitably a bit sympathetic. As a story set in an online game, the heroine's emotional experience is not closely integrated with leveling up and fighting monsters. The venue where her sweetheart Yiyu announces her engagement is in a hotel. The short section of Zimo's confession to Wu Lei does not have an impressive background, and as for Zi Mo's confession, there is nothing new... No wonder Wu Lei ignored it. Such ordinary love is embellished in it, and it can easily be covered up by other plots, so the growth and maturity of Wu Tie replaces the youthful love and becomes the highlight of the novel. I don't know what the author's "imagination results" are. It can be seen that the growth of Wu Tear is the bright line, and the love between Lin Ke and You is the hidden line. If there can be more intersections, the whole story structure will be more exciting. Regarding the plot of Mingxi trying to kill his little daughter Wu Lei, it seems like the sound of gravel coming from the valley, but the reckless method of strangulation is not in line with his noble status. I don't know if he really wants to kill the girl, or just pretend to separate the relationship. After Wu Lei experienced this disaster, in addition to a normal heart, there should be something more on the way forward. She is heartbroken and determined, which makes people wonder whether the author has designed the ultimate test for her? The article is coming to an end. It may have a climax, or it may end lightly. In terms of tone, it is impossible to tell which one is more complete. Since the novel is named after it, it might as well end with a more poignant ending. The tearless dream of the all-wise priest and the hazy love... It would be good to leave blank spaces for either. The title of the song and chapter is indeed very clever. If the author can put more emphasis on character creation and emotional rendering, he will definitely be able to create a more attractive work. Oral commentator - Tu Mihua

I'm here.. Hehe. Score first and then watch..

I've finished reading them all. I'll come back to make up for the points. It's very interesting.

First of all, it is still a matter of typesetting. I suggest that Xiaotong divide some incoherent words into separate paragraphs. Especially for paragraphs with dialogue, it is best to use one person's words as a separate paragraph, such as {which made Wu Lei temporarily confused. "It is the responsibility of your thugs to protect the priests!"} It is best to separate them and separate them into separate paragraphs when the woman speaks, so as not to cause confusion, because sometimes the words are too sudden and the readers will not be able to react. Xiaotong's paragraphs are relatively long, so it is recommended to leave each paragraph blank. The current layout looks a bit dazzling, and it is easy to overlook certain sentences. Secondly, the beginning of the article seems a bit confusing. Xiaotong also said that this story happened 100 years before the story of Missing and Missing. If you don't understand anything, go back and read Missing and Missing. However, there are also children who read this article directly and will give up if they don't understand. Therefore, I still suggest that Xiaotong compiles some information and puts it on it, and puts the background information on the game, preferably an introduction. In addition, regarding equipment, it is best to add a note after the name and note the characteristics of the equipment when the author has something to say. Finally, there is the problem of typos, which every author will have. {You are the king, you can "Liu"} should be changed to "Liu". When they met Zi Mo for the first time, the two felt as if they had met each other late. The two equally weird children had similar thinking. Even though they were strangers, they would soon become familiar with each other. This was probably the first time Wu Lei met someone with similar ideas, but things changed later... Xiaotong's writing is plain and warm. The heroine is a lovely girl. She does not have the beauty that a priest should have. It may not be easy to get along in such a world, but her character will eventually find someone who cherishes her. Normal heart, this is what is most often mentioned in this article. Lin Ke missed his love because of his normal heart. In fact, sometimes, it is not good to restrain yourself too much. The coherence of the article is very good. In this world, everyone may meet. The person you met last time may become a friend next time. Everyone is their own protagonist, and everyone has their own life. Please keep up the good work O(∩_∩)O~ It must be posted! Stop taking comments...

Here's a surprise for you~ Hee When I clicked on the interface of this article, I thought the cover was very beautiful. Haha, to be honest, I was attracted by the cover. I thought it was an ancient saying... I never thought it was an online game. Xiancao has never been exposed to this type of game before, so if I made any mistakes, please correct me~ Well, after seeing this, Xiancao can give me some suggestions and hope I can make progress. I read three chapters carefully. Haha, to be honest, I read each chapter several times before I understood it. When I saw the blood boost in the first chapter, I got dizzy, but it seems to be in the game, haha. I personally think that maybe it would be better to give a brief summary of the past at the beginning. Entering the main scene right from the beginning makes people find it difficult to understand in many places (I am a novice in the game, so don't be surprised). And then, did you notice the writing of the first chapter? It's a bit crowded, right? Different people are talking in one paragraph, which makes people feel stressed~ It is recommended that everyone's conversations be separated, haha, but it seems a lot better after reading the third chapter~ But it is best to leave blank lines between paragraphs, so it will look more comfortable. Although I read it several times, I still don't quite understand it, but hey, come on, dear!

Hmm, I'm a little confused by some of the introduction to the article's settings. It's not that we can't understand it, it's that everyone wants to get into the plot quickly. If you need to foreshadow and overdo it, you must strengthen your writing skills and use sophisticated language to capture people's hearts.

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Sprinkle flowers... I would like to make a suggestion. Can the article be rearranged so that there is a little space in the middle? It's a bit tiring to watch it slowly from beginning to end like this

I really traveled through time... Although there is no plot in the first chapter, it feels very comfortable. I think this is related to Tongtong's writing style.

I haven't read them all, but I have browsed through two articles to appreciate, and you can still see the meticulousness of the writing. As for your title and synopsis, it should be about songs and lyrics. However, I have limited experience and have only heard one or two of them. After searching, I found that there is a one-to-one correspondence, which is really wonderful. I am also writing an article, but I cannot write as many words as Wu Tong, and my words are not as good as yours. I feel very ashamed.