Hehe~~Come and check it out if you saw it on the forum~~~Come on
Sorry, I'm late~
This is a very interesting beginning, but it's a pity that it's a bit confusing, especially the chattering conversations between the first few girls. I personally think it's meaningless. You can try cutting directly into the conversation between the protagonist and the prophet at the beginning, which may create a more mysterious feeling. The rhythm of this chapter is a bit chaotic, sometimes fast and sometimes slow. It is recommended to control the narrative speed.
Wow haha, this chapter is so hilarious~Those two live treasures~
Sorry I haven't been here, I changed the city recently~Hehe~
Traveled through BBS. Come on.
Smiling, I came here after reading the self-recommendation, so be diligent.
The update speed is a bit slow. I have to go to class first and reserve a sofa to come back and watch.
It was so cold~ So Zhiwa came to enjoy the coolness again~ It was so slow otz I have been here several times...
Come on~ scatter flowers all over the sky~
Ah~ I want to take it back~ What a great article~ I like the male protagonist's name! Try to update!
Come and sit at my place when you have time~ It's really cold~
It can be seen that you wrote the article very carefully, keep up the good work!
Dear~ I suggest you change the picture on the cover to a larger one~
The writing is getting better~ but it's a little noisy~ It's okay~ Come on~
Welcome to visit again ~ Author's reply:
Thank you!
Hehe~~Come and check it out if you saw it on the forum~~~Come on
Sorry, I'm late~ This is a very interesting beginning, but it's a pity that it's a bit confusing, especially the chattering conversations between the first few girls. I personally think it's meaningless. You can try cutting directly into the conversation between the protagonist and the prophet at the beginning, which may create a more mysterious feeling. The rhythm of this chapter is a bit chaotic, sometimes fast and sometimes slow. It is recommended to control the narrative speed.
Wow haha, this chapter is so hilarious~Those two live treasures~ Sorry I haven't been here, I changed the city recently~Hehe~
Traveled through BBS. Come on.
Smiling, I came here after reading the self-recommendation, so be diligent.
The update speed is a bit slow. I have to go to class first and reserve a sofa to come back and watch.
It was so cold~ So Zhiwa came to enjoy the coolness again~ It was so slow otz I have been here several times... Come on~ scatter flowers all over the sky~
Ah~ I want to take it back~ What a great article~ I like the male protagonist's name! Try to update! Come and sit at my place when you have time~ It's really cold~
It can be seen that you wrote the article very carefully, keep up the good work!
Dear~ I suggest you change the picture on the cover to a larger one~ The writing is getting better~ but it's a little noisy~ It's okay~ Come on~ Welcome to visit again ~ Author's reply: Thank you!