A Pureblood Fell from the Sky (Vampire Knight Fanfiction)

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Does the heroine have masochistic tendencies? How do I see someone donating blood?

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Short review "[Blood Rider Fan] Purebloods Fall from the Sky" Copywriting: The layout is very good, and the simple style is very suitable for me. The only thing is that [Blood Rider] is in the title of the article. Wow, am I ignorant? I have heard the abbreviations of Vampire Knight and VK (English initials). At first glance, I didn't realize that this was a Vampire Knight fanfic... Text: Chapter 1: [With a "whoosh" sound, the uncle and Loli disappeared] ==> There was a "whoosh" sound. Forgive me for being nitpicky, get down on the ground. [The girl suddenly raised her head, and the black master Hui Yan saw bright red eyes like orchids. Pureblood? It is recommended to divide it into paragraphs when typesetting. It is also the same as before. The description of the psychological activities of the black master Hui Yan is not divided into paragraphs before starting the description of actions. This will be very tiring to watch. It should be better if it is divided into paragraphs. ["Believe me." The black master Hui Yan hugged Xi into his arms. Although the black master Hui Yan looks a little crazy, he seems to have no brain. But as a former NO.1 Hunter, he also founded the Black Master Academy. Apart from the superficial appearance, he is not a simple character in any aspect. So is it reasonable for him to do this to a pure-blooded vampire whom he met for the first time? Although he has always advocated peaceful coexistence between humans and vampires, he was so kind to the heroine before he was sure whether the other party was a "vampire who will not harm humans." I have to say how great the halo of the protagonist is... Chapter 2: The connection between the first chapter and the second chapter is not very good. At the beginning of the second chapter, it is said that the heroine will be sent to the night department. The reason is that Jiu Lanshu and the hunter both know the existence of the heroine. Since the reason is specified, why not just add one or two sentences to explain? Why did the hunters know the existence of the heroine in such a short period of time? This is a foreshadowing that is worth taking advantage of, so don't regret it. [Like a ghost, Lan Tang walked into the room, took the delicate hand extended by the girl, and covered her lips. Lantang's performance is also a bit unrealistic. Although the concept of vampire world hierarchy is very clear, even nobles must bow to pure bloods, but everyone who has read the original work should know that Lan Tang's arrogant character only regards Jiu Lanshu as the king. For a pureblood meeting for the first time, Lan Tang might not act too over the top, but... It's unlikely that he would kiss the hand as a sign of loyalty right away, right? [Only he knows that in just a few seconds, his heart is no longer just trying to play. What kind of past should such a confused pure-blood girl have? Same as above, it's hard to imagine Lan Tang acting like this towards someone other than Jiu Lanshu. If the author wants to show the loyalty of nobles to purebloods, he can expand it to give readers a buffer time. [When passing Yu Ji, Lan Tang uttered a sentence lightly, but solemnly and firmly. The word "que" expresses a turning point, but there seems to be no turning point here. The author's meaning is probably from the "light vomiting" in the front to the "solemn and firm" in the back? ==When passing Yuji, Lan Tang whispered a sentence, his voice was soft but solemn and firm. ["Don't worry, I will protect her." When passing Yuji, Lan Tang said softly, but solemnly and firmly. "Thank you." He heard the unfocused girl in his arms murmur softly. ] Still no turning point. Would it be better to add words like "next second" and "immediately" after what the heroine said below? [If I could always be surrounded by such sunshine,] the punctuation mark is wrong, the first one should be followed by a period. [Jiu Lan stared at the crystal chess set on the desk and narrowed her eyes. Is that so? There is still no transition at all. =="Jiu Lan stared at the crystal chess set on the desk. She squinted her eyes and thought: Is that so?" Would this type of layout be better than the one above? Chapter 3: [Xi tilted her head and sniffed the air. "The smell of blood, a faint smell of blood."]==> Xi tilted her head and sniffed the air, and then said: XXX [Placing Xiaoxi in the night department. What the chairman did not expect was that it might bring Xiaoxi closer to the darkness. Is there a problem with the segmentation of this sentence?? [Hide behind Lan Tang and look at everyone present hesitantly. Looking hesitantly? I don't quite understand what the author wants to express, but it would be better to change it to "shyness" or something like that... [Liu Jia is not satisfied with this answer. She wants to discover her origin directly through the Black Lord Xi. ==Not satisfied with this answer =_= Summary: Although this review did not review all chapters, I have read the entire article. Later in the article, it is not very clear why the heroine's attitude changed suddenly. Although it can be roughly understood that it was because the heroine had to complete the mission and was possessed by Zhensha. Everything 'she' did was not of her own will. We can roughly know what happened, but the author's narrative seems a bit confusing. Probably because it is a short story, the descriptions in many places are not very detailed. It is so confusing that I can only understand half of it, and I can almost guess the other half =_= I haven't read much Vampire Knight fan fiction, so I don't know much about the market, so I can't give the author some useful suggestions, so I hope you'll forgive me. Iris review - Qian Mu

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After reading it again, I saw the overwhelming sadness hidden deep in the text. They just liked each other that way. Maybe Xiao Xi is in love, but maybe Xu Ying just likes her.