Having lost both her parents at a young age, Maria has spent her life training at the church alongside Father Fenerrel, who is ten years her senior. Their warm life together is shattered by a mysterious incantation, setting off a journey to another world. Just who is the red-haired man who declares, “You’re my bride!” the moment they meet? And what roles will the very different men who appear one after another play in Maria’s journey through this other world? Will Maria manage to return to her homeland, or...?
A fantastical journey through another world, tangled thoughts, and days surrounded by handsome men: it all slowly unfolds after a chance encounter born of a misunderstanding.
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I am the little M of BS. The post sank and came up again! I found that I forgot to scatter the flowers at that time, so I'm going to fix it now~~~~Great efforts·
Why are you so confused~~~ It reminds me of Zhen Asuka orz for no reason. Having a child in the family is not such a bad thing, right (off topic). The priest is hard enough, but the author can't do it at the expense of MM, let alone the three brothers of Red, Blue, and Gold.
Xiao Jin was too impatient and ran away with trivial things. Please, in this office, pay attention to the occasion orz I like it when MM combs Xiaolan's hair and twists it
Didn't lz say that lz has no ability to resist the overwhelming wind? Although this is an article with a lot of complaints, lz accepted it without hesitation... The name and copywriting are not included in the consideration, just say the article. First of all, as Manfanfeng, the biggest feature is that "what you read is what you see". Girls who read comics have smooth transitions between time and space. The girl's writing style should be said to be pretty good. She is so talented, and there are always cute little things that hit me... It's time to complain. As a finished work without any pressure, please read my sincere complaint. Due to the author's setting of the title of the article, in order to highlight the name Maria, and the format of f, f, f, it caused dyslexia. After reading it carefully, there is basically no big structure, but lz when I see a lot of English characters, I want to say, girl, you, an old person with memory problems like me, is simply testing my reading comprehension ability. I read chapter after chapter and still can't connect the personality of the male pig's feet with the name. The girl has a good sense of words, especially the separation of paragraphs and the transition and arrangement of sentences. But girl, please continue to read my sincere complaints. I have to say that in the face of too many ellipses, I finally had the feeling that "even though I am cute and cute, I can't read so many ellipses." Sometimes it means omission, profound meaning, or nothing to say, so it is not necessary to use ellipses. Since the girl is in the third person, you can completely replace "..." With a side description. Of course, this problem has been improved in later chapters, and it can be seen that the girl is growing up while writing. But!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! What is the ending of this cheating NPC! What is this so-called open ending! Are you sure you wrote a main text, not a prequel, not a side story, not a flower arrangement?!!!!!!!!!!!! Lz roared... Sorry So this is not a love story at all, it is a prequel to a harem story about a beautiful girl who was supposed to be the queen. Those who travel through time and space are all floating clouds... All those men with pig feet and magical horses are floating clouds. As a manga-style work, Girl still pays more attention to the plot and the description of inner feelings, but it still exposes the weakness of "thin characters". There are few personalized language descriptions, and the personalities of all the characters except the heroine are vague (the priest's sister-control only left me with the impression of a sister-control orz) But if this is the girl's first article, then there's actually a lot to be done in the future. It is recommended that girls streamline their writing, so that even if they are rambles, they can still have concise language and sentences that people will remember after reading them. More importantly, before the sentence that the girl wants to emphasize, it is recommended to break the line into paragraphs, so as to highlight the role of the sentence here. Something like the one at the end of Chapter 30 would be great. Second, girl, really, really, in the next article, use Chinese characters to replace the names of the people in your article, so that readers will be able to read it more easily and remember your characters. Third, the author's words at the bottom of each chapter are very qualified as the opening remarks of TBC. Girls can stick to it...
By the way, I just thought of it. Now that this article is finished in such a NP ambiguous direction, I can do two small extras if I feel like it in the future. In fact, I am very, very looking forward to Xiao Jin's extras~~
I'm here to step on it~~ I have kept my friend at home for the past two days, hanging out with me, but he didn't come up, hehe~
Collect, pass by, scatter flowers
It's over... Oh... Well, luckily it's the NP I love, and everyone is fine and fine. It's really more comfortable this way~~ As expected, Xiao Jin is the cutest person, and her bossy attitude is also very nice~~ If Maria comes back after buying pears, she will ask for peaches next time~ As expected, the priest left some atonement, which is very good. This attitude is very good and a little more comfortable. Xiao Lan has such a sultry personality, and her requirements are too few. She can be satisfied with just one name. From now on, the priest and Xiao Jin will definitely put pressure on you. Xiaohong also worked surprisingly well. From now on, he will be responsible for the duties of the Ouchi general manager, responsible for protecting the personal safety of Maria and the harem Mina-san. It is very high-end, destroy hahahahahahaha~~
It looks like NP is better like this. The male protagonists and the maid are all gathered together. Xiaohong is really a brick, and he can move it wherever needed. Yes~ Xiaojin must be fine!!!
Hey, hey, hey, why did Shenma want to interrupt Xiao Jin when he was happy? It doesn't hurt to be intimate for a while!! Father, those last words are very lethal, and have the aura of a heroine. You are allowed to stay and atone for your sins...