June's Sorrow

So annoying... I have never been able to figure out the dividing line between friendship and love, so I would take the jokes among friends seriously. Regardless of whether they are men or women, as long as they make such a joke to me, I will seriously consider it and even think about a future together. Tsk… It's just that everyone is joking. I always thought I was crazy

Very realistic and respectful of life choices. It's a pity that as teenagers, we are unable to resist, and can only struggle and howl inexplicable feelings of inferiority, pain, shame, joy, and unknown ambiguity and disgust. At this age, some words are bold and wanton and can be laughed off, while some words are hidden deep in our hearts and we dare not think or touch them, waiting to be weathered and turned into mud. Brave and strong, vulnerable and humble, confident and bright, introverted and dark, righteous or not, yes or no. I'm very grateful to the author for letting me see another person's experience.

Sad, even though I knew it was probably be, I was still so sad to see the ending. I feel that the characters in Dada's works are very vivid and don't feel like they are out of character. I like it so much^*^

Because it is extremely close to reality, it makes people feel even more painful, sad and hopeless. So frustrated

Well, let me encourage you first. Compared with long stories, short stories are extremely difficult to write well. But Ye Da, you did a great job. This kind of little ambiguity is displayed very well in this short story, especially when the two people gradually get to know each other and cherish each other from the hostile conflict. Ye Da handles this part in an orderly manner, and it can be seen that he has put in the effort. But, of course, every article has its own small flaws. I personally think... 1. The evening self-study talk and Lin Bin's misunderstanding seemed to be a bit unclear. I don't know what others think, but it took me reviewing it again to understand that Mr. Lin was jealous rather than having an inexplicable outburst. Plot ambiguity is the most taboo thing in short stories. It should be better if it is greatly revised. I scratch my head and look at the sky. Well, it should be~ 2. I read short stories, but I don't like those one-man dramas in which the protagonist sings a long part. After all, this is a novel, not a prose poem or a stream of consciousness. If a person is entangled over and over again, it would easily cause visual fatigue to the reader if the author's writing style were not exceptionally brilliant. Therefore, the inner monologue of Ye Zizi's shoes seems to be a little too much (purely a personal opinion, pai~). Of course, I understand Ye Da's difficulties. It is generally difficult to grasp the degree of self-pity in the first-person tragic writing (let's consider it tragic). If you write too much, it will look like Xianglin's wife, if you write too little, the sentiment will not be evoked. So, I hope Ye Da can practice more in this aspect. Summary: Good article, more blood. There is room for further improvement, wait and see~~

Woohoo, this is from DaDaXinwen. I cried when I read it (┯_┯)

It's been a long time since I wrote this. I'm now in my third year of high school and I'm also very scared.

Unspeakable...

I feel so sad, ugh

It's been eleven years. Have you seen each other again?