Coming to this world wasn't what she wanted. She never wanted to stand out, yet she had no idea that so many people had already set their sights on her.
Freedom was all she'd ever wanted, but it seemed fate would never grant it. In the end, she could only watch as she sank deeper and deeper into the whirlpool of the martial world.
He is the master of the Jueming Palace, a prince of the court and the emperor's older brother. He has always hated women, but she is the only one who makes him want to draw near.
He is the leader of the Demon Cult. Haunted by a painful memory from childhood, he trained relentlessly in martial arts until he lost his mind and became a fool. Yet he never forgot to train or seek revenge. Then he met her. Because of her, he regained his sanity, but became even more evil. As a result, he repeatedly harassed and schemed against her. She couldn't escape...
I should explain that I write mainly through extensive inner monologues, using them to bring out the characters' thoughts, her inner world, and the growth and changes in her feelings. Sometimes there may be repeated phrases, too, to emphasize the effect and highlight the heroine's conflicted feelings and guilty conscience. This is my first novel. Many parts aren't very good and don't meet my expectations, but you'll need to savor it carefully to appreciate its flavor.
Everyone, please share your thoughts! I don't mind criticism. I need to grow, so please tell me what you think, good or bad. I can't even figure out my own strengths and weaknesses, and I'm so lost!
Recommended stories: some are mine, some are my friends'.
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YY also has the charm of YY
I always feel that the heroine seems to be heartless but is actually sentimental. The article introduces the reasons why she doesn't love, but I think it's mostly because she knows love but doesn't dare to love! Speaking of which, the fate of the heroine in this article is pretty good! I have read a book called "The Immortals Enter the Mortal World" before, but it turns out that the beginning is about being a girl with a "Thousand Pillows", and the ending is a tragedy! It's so sad to see that I'm the one! To be honest, I really like Tan Gang. So cute and silly
The character description needs to be more detailed, Wenwen took it away! Thank you for your hard work! Keep up the good work!
I don't like the ending, I think one-on-one is better
It's really low-key from beginning to end.
Overall, it feels weird, and it seems that there are too many things about Danmei. The article about the heroine changing gender may be better to read. Hey, I have never seen people in Danmei look so uncomfortable. I basically just skipped and read. But the author is still very careful, so I won't spoil it for you.
You like to use "that person" or "him" to replace the characters in the book, but as a reader, I sometimes wonder for a long time who the person you are talking about is. Well, I have also seen typos and some illogical sentences before, but to be honest, I read your article at a glance. Basically, I just wanted to know the direction of the story, and I didn't read it seriously. So I think (emphasis my opinion) the biggest shortcoming of this article is that it is very flat and floating, well, just like the egg drops in egg drop soup, they float on the water. In fact, if you really want to write a good article, you have to carefully consider every word and every sentence, eliminating the unnecessary and retaining the essential. All the works of NPC writers must be rewritten before publication. Ah, although my words are not pleasant to the ears, there is no malice in them. There are a thousand Hamlets among a thousand readers. The thoughts of our readers can only be used as a reference. PS: The number of words for nonsense is probably enough to give points. I still don't know how to use points to read the article. For the sake of saying so much nonsense, give me points for fun.
I can't describe how I feel, it's a bit unreal
Hai meikan
The front part is okay, but the back part is really a bit weird!!!!!!! Weird!!!!!