The Nonhuman Male Leads' Bride

Hmm... The story is too short. If my wife is practicing writing, I have a few suggestions. The first few chapters are okay, but in the middle, it is like an outline. There is only a framework, and the characters are just thin to complete the personality of the story. It is too simple, as if the story must be completed in a few chapters. See It's very uncomfortable. Maybe my wife wrote it very short because this is just a small unit, but I still try not to cram so many things into such a short chapter, which makes this love and hatred that spans thousands of years feel like playing house. (My feelings can be ignored if my wife doesn't like it.)

I felt like I was a bit lacking in writing power at the end of the writing... The ending was also rushed and I rushed through it... I hope I can write better and better in the future.

Boyfriend, system sound, car's artificial intelligence, white bear

The words in this chapter should be 3 times, the sound of the system, the artificial intelligence in the car, and the white bear

Why haven't you updated the article? The flowers have withered after waiting QAQ

It ended a bit hastily

It's good to watch, but it feels a bit rushed. At the end, I felt like Li Su died instantly... It ended so quickly ×

I find that writing about human beings often has this kind of problem. They use the malicious side of humans to set off the kindness of non-humans to the protagonist very straightforwardly, thus avoiding the conceptual issues that may exist between humans and non-humans. And I want to say that I understand that people's malice is sometimes unreasonable and straightforward, because I myself have been bullied. But if I continue to change environments and still receive the same treatment, is there really no problem with my character? I don't mean to say that the victim is guilty. Assuming that the heroine was isolated while working part-time, is it really true that everyone chooses this indifferent attitude because they are good-looking? Based on the previous article, the heroine has a cold appearance, and if her personality is not warm, who would want to be hot and cold? She is exhausted from working in class B every day, and she has to face an uncompetitive part-time employee. It is also worth the trouble to engage in serious bullying.

Let me ask you again, please reply. Is this article clean? I read that the female protagonist said that the first female protagonist grew old together with the second male protagonist after the male protagonist disappeared. Is this true? Isn't this a one-on-one quick wear? How could there be such a Minotaur plot? ? Don't tell me that it is normal and rational for the heroine to marry due to the pressure of reality when the hero disappears (for example, people cannot accept that the hero finds someone else to carry on the family line after the heroine disappears or has a difficult childbirth). I have a personal opinion. You read the reality from the novel. I just want to see something beautiful (if it is called bad, I don't care). I'm just afraid of stepping on thunder.

I don't know how many days the next update will be...