He May Be Sickly, but He's the Top

I don't mean to provide writing guidance. I would like to express my personal opinions and suggestions for authors. I came in because of the author's fast time travel, and the previous copywriting was also very touching. In other words, many of the author's copywriting poked me, but this one was a bit disappointing. It is completed with more than 100,000 words, which is not much different from the previous fast-traveling world. However, fast-traveling only needs to explain the main plot, and some places do not need to be described in detail, and readers will not be demanding. Everyone can just make up their minds. A whole article is different, especially this kind of fictional one. To make readers feel involved and identify with the story, it is necessary to build a complete world and infiltrate the world view in the article. It is really not possible, so just say it bluntly. But no. When I read it before, I thought it was very strange. There were many features that should be close-ups and easy to attract people, but there were not too many descriptions. Later, when I read the quick-travel book, I realized that the author was probably writing this book in a quick-travel style. Short stories are not unattractive, but they require a good grasp of the rhythm and allow readers to appreciate the charm of the text within a limited space. The author's writing style is very good. Do you want to consider making the outline more detailed, grasping the rhythm, and arranging the plot points well? Don't leave the grand worldview to the readers' imagination. I didn't want to say so much, just leave if you don't like it. But I really like Counterattack, and the one I invested in in advance is also very exciting. I hope the author can write a work worth reading again and again.

This article is so clean. Except for the last paragraph, you can vaguely tell who is attacking and who is suffering. I really want to see the intimate interaction between the two, hehehe.

Actually, I think it's okay, not as ugly as the author said?

Probably because I've read too much, I feel like the last paragraph scares me

Can you please do more extras?

I read it a long time ago. Come back and subscribe. Why don't you write articles now? I really loved reading your articles at the time. Although this article was a bit unfinished and didn't seem to be developed, it was still interesting. .

I seem to have read too quickly so I didn't understand? The ending was off guard... I have a few questions that I hope someone can answer. About that organization and its conspiracy, about God's Domain, even about He's emotional changes, about the ending of Yi and the ghost (I thought it was the deputy CP at first), about the follow-up of this incident, about why He appeared when Fu was eaten, about whether the Ghost King is a human (the scythe always reminds me of the God of Death), about the use and reason of He's blood, about the place He said he came from? City (I don't recognize that word), about whether He Yihui can survive as a human being, about the system, about the sacrifice, and about life after marriage...

Good guy, I almost thought I was being abused, my heart can't stand it

Isn't it? ? ? How come it's almost over without doing anything! ? ? ? ? I don't want to listen, I don't want to listen, I want to read Chapter 50 again, woo woo woo

Is it really coming to an end? I feel like the story has just begun _(:з∠)_