[The author's back from exams, and is enthusiastically revising the whole story.]
As the progenitor of the vampires, Cain's life stretched on without any end in sight.
At last, unable to find anything interesting to do, he chose to sleep for a long, long time before boredom drove him mad.
After all, his descendants were multiplying faster than weeds in a field, growing tall in great clumps.
When he woke from his long sleep and learned that both his neighbors had mysteriously disappeared, Cain calmly opened a bottle of 120-year-old champagne.
How could he not send his unseen neighbors his warm and... malicious wishes on a day like this?
After a hearty meal, Cain lazily propped his cheek on one arm and looked at the owl in the sky, hungry enough to look like a curve. He asked nonchalantly,
Hey, the plot is different from before?
Today I saw a blog post about writing. I recommend it. Here are the excerpts: [First of all, let me explain that the first or even only criterion for writing is accuracy. "The cup is on the table" is more accurate than "the cup is there." This is an accurate description. A farmer goes into the city and asks for directions: "Hello, how do I get to Zhihu Building?" This is not accurate. Another way to put it: "Fellow, let me ask, how to get to the Zhihu Building?" Is relatively accurate. This is an accurate grasp of the identity of the person writing. "Zhang San is my friend. He has recently fallen in love with a girl and wants to see her every day." This is not accurate. "Zhang San is my friend. He has recently fallen in love with a girl. The girl works in a coffee shop. After get off work every day, Zhang San will take a long detour and pass by the door of the coffee shop." That's relatively accurate. This is the grasp of the narrative perspective. I'm not Zhang San. I can't know what he thinks, I can only see what he does. These are the basic skills of writing, and they are also the writing instinct that a writer develops spontaneously after long-term writing training. Only when an author is accurate can the characters and events he writes about be reliable and stand the test of time. Take Zhang San above as an example. In a hundred or a thousand years, if people see a boy passing by the place where a girl works, they can tell that he has a crush on her. But saying "He wants to see her every day" is suspicious. Even if the author describes this longing in a lavish way, as if the sun and the moon are indestructible, like the mountains and the sea cannot be turned around, the longing itself has not occurred in the reader's heart. The plot of the novel is mostly made up, but the novel also has its own inherent truth, which comes from the author's accurate use of words. Only on the basis of the accurate application of words can literary ideas, literary aesthetics, and literary skills be established. "XX lowered his head, eyes full of stars, slightly raised the corners of his mouth..." If a novel begins with this sentence, I should close it after reading this sentence. The reason for closing it is that the author's grasp of the text does not meet my minimum reading standards. The word "drooped" only has the complimentary meaning of softness and plumpness unless it describes plants. When used to describe the limbs of animals or people, it all implies low mood, such as "hands drooped", "head drooped", "upper body drooped". Since he was in a low mood, the stars in his eyes behind him and the smile on his lips were a bit inexplicable. If he was not in a depressed mood, then the correct and accurate way to write it would be "XX lowered his head." From this example, we can see that the biggest harm of piling up words is that it undermines the accuracy of description. The word "low" is obviously enough, but because "low" seems more convincing and literary, it is used blatantly, regardless of whether it is appropriate or not. So why is it that the more novices are, the easier it is for them to pile up words and pursue a surprising statement? The reason is actually lack of confidence. Since I knew very little about the power of words, I felt secretly guilty every time I wrote a sentence. I was afraid that my writing would be mediocre and people would see that my words were weak, so I made plans and racked my brains to filter the words with beautiful words. In fact, whether the writing is wonderful does not depend on the gain or loss of one word, but on the breath, the sentence momentum, the paragraph, and the whole. Only when you reach the accurate army of words can you leave the creator, walk through time in silence, face one picky reader after another alone, and never fail. It's not that famous writers are incapable of complex descriptions, but that novels are things outside of life and do not aim to restore life. Famous artists will cut off reality, leaving only key and necessary descriptions. Novelists, especially modern novelists, will never be formulaic. The first paragraph explains the appearance and the second paragraph explains the psychological activities. Hope it can inspire the author.
It feels a bit confusing... In fact, the words can be slightly changed to make it more fluent? ... I hope the author doesn't mind if I offend, I will just make a suggestion. In fact, my level is also very poor, otherwise I would write the article myself. For example, "Monica took him into the door behind the front desk, and opened a door on the ground, and then there was a long stone step." Maybe it would be more smooth to change it to "Monica took him into the room behind the front desk, opened the entrance to the secret passage on the ground, and there was a long stone step ahead."
Ah, this... I feel like it's a little harder to read, but I don't remember what it was like originally.
The author is a macho man? Is it 1? Funny.
I seriously suspect that I have Western name recognition disorder. Just after a thousand words have passed, I can no longer tell who is who (눈_눈)
Spread the flowers ~ come on big time
Collecting cards? We can play cards again
Looking forward to the follow-up QAQ
Give it to Huahua~ You must persist