Everyone has taken a wrong turn and suffered a loss at some point. Lu Yu is lucky enough to get the chance to start over! Career, love, and family: can this young woman seize her opportunity and live a brilliant life?
My only opinion is that the modal particle 'ah' appears too many times in your article. After roughly counting, there are ten of them in this chapter.
For example, there is a section that says, "I'm so hungry. People are like iron, and rice is like steel. I feel so hungry if I don't eat even one meal - Chen Jie, you are such a scourge1"
For a mature woman, even though she is a young girl now, it is a bit weird to keep talking about ah, ah, ah, ah, ah, ah, and ah.
It's a good start, I hope to keep up the good work.
Author's reply:
Thank you Huan'er for your message. After reading the message, I have changed your opinions. I really didn't notice it before!
Thank you! ORZ!
I quite like this type of article that goes back to the past. I always feel that if I can go back to the past, I can make up for a lot of my regrets~ Come on, author! Keep writing, and there will always be people who appreciate it o(∩_∩)o...
Sofa. I like reading this kind of articles. Come on
My only opinion is that the modal particle 'ah' appears too many times in your article. After roughly counting, there are ten of them in this chapter. For example, there is a section that says, "I'm so hungry. People are like iron, and rice is like steel. I feel so hungry if I don't eat even one meal - Chen Jie, you are such a scourge1" For a mature woman, even though she is a young girl now, it is a bit weird to keep talking about ah, ah, ah, ah, ah, ah, and ah. It's a good start, I hope to keep up the good work. Author's reply: Thank you Huan'er for your message. After reading the message, I have changed your opinions. I really didn't notice it before! Thank you! ORZ!
I quite like this type of article that goes back to the past. I always feel that if I can go back to the past, I can make up for a lot of my regrets~ Come on, author! Keep writing, and there will always be people who appreciate it o(∩_∩)o...
Sofa. I like reading this kind of articles. Come on