My Disobedient Disciple Wants to Keep Me All to Himself

I just happened to read this article in Shuhuang, and now I have finally read it all. I personally think the story is quite novel, the writing and plot are good, but the ending is a bit short. It would be better if it was extended a little bit. Hehe, I hope I can write better in the future.

The overall effect is good, but the middle part is a bit brain-burning.

The ending is so hasty???

That's it. . . I suddenly felt that the descendants of the Yellow Emperor were of that lineage. . . I don't know how to put it. The person who couldn't spell the two words died after finishing the bad thing. He didn't bear the consequences. It was simply the worst. Beat the drum and beat him to death. Do you move yourself? So it doesn't feel like it's impossible for his descendants to bear the consequences. . . But now Jun Xi cleans up the mess, and the immortal bears the consequences of death. I think immortals are very miserable. Written like this, mortals seem really greedy and ruthless. It's actually not a good idea for Jun Xi not to say anything now. He directly blames Gonggong and makes the Kowloon incident public. In fact, it's not bad. There is strength in numbers, and the fairy world will not be prone to chaos.

Ah, I vaguely feel that Nuwa Fuxi is a bit irresponsible. Even if she complies with the wishes of mortals, Jiulong should solve it before she dies. . . This leaves such an unsolvable situation. The Jedi Heavenly Power doesn't feel that tricky, but the really tricky thing is the Broken Dragon. The worst thing about this is that the immortal died in the end. Why is the dragon so powerful?

Oh, I have to say that I can accept Jun Xi's idea.

Oh, selfish and narrow-minded, I really can't believe it

I, go, I am really speechless. Do the descendants of the Yellow Emperor really think so? My brain. . . ? Nothing's wrong?

Lord Shen, you have become a lover.

The writing style of a single short story is not bad, but the cohesion of the whole text and the characterization of characters need more work. The male protagonist is a person who has already worked in the real world. He always knows a little about people and the world, and he should also have the ability to think calmly. But looking at it now, you wrote the male protagonist as not being vigilant at all. He wants to take care of everything, but he can only rely on his apprentice to do it. I am very confused about what is wrong with this male protagonist.