Transmigrated as the Villainous Male Lead's Husband

Could it be that Shou didn't think about how important his attack was without thinking about him? You actually dare to go alone. Aren't you just rushing to get caught? That's too careless.

I finished reading this article in one night. I originally thought it was a farming article about wearing books and slapping people in the face. I didn't expect that my wife was so imaginative. In the middle and late stages, it turned into an apocalyptic article. The ancient apocalypse is indeed very novel, and my wife's setting of world consciousness is very attractive. Generally speaking, it is quite logical. My wife's writing style was a bit immature at first, but it became much smoother later on. Unexpectedly, it was my first time to write an article, and she was able to complete a medium-length novel of more than 500,000 words. It was really amazing. (It's just that the ending is a bit rushed While reading the article, I found some problems and wanted to share them with my wife. It would be great if she could adopt them. First of all, the biggest problem is that the allocation of roles between the main and supporting characters is unreasonable. There is no need to spend a lot of words describing each character. If you want to create a flesh-and-blood world and establish the image of the characters, you don't need so much space. It is best to simplify the language and only select some plots that can occasionally shape the characters. Otherwise, readers will be very tired when reading, because too many supporting roles severely compress the role of the protagonist, and Mrs. This article is not a group portrait novel. Secondly, the image of Shen Yuyun created by the author is somewhat tool-like. From the middle to late period, the emotional scenes between Qin Su and Shen Yuyun began to decrease significantly. Shen Yuyun's role seems to be just to awaken Qin Su, give birth to children, comfort Qin Su, and let Qin Su compete with the male protagonist of the source world. Looking back at the full text after reading it, I can remember several outstanding plots of Qin Su, but as for Shen Yuyun, I only remember him worried about the male protagonist crying at home... Except for the very beginning, there are too few emotional scenes between the attacker and the enemy. I hope that my wife can grasp the proportion in the next book, add more daily interactions between the attacker and the enemy, and not make the emotional line become a tool. Also, regarding the rhythm of the plot, the plot advances too slowly in the early stages, but the plot advances rapidly in the later stages, and the pace is too fast... I wonder if your wife has coded the general plot, or is she thinking of the plot while coding? If it is the second type, I suggest that my wife make an outline and reasonably allocate the number of words to different plots. If it's the first type, I suggest my wife simplify the language. When I read the article, I felt that some plots were too much nonsense. No matter what the plot was, I could write three or four articles. I could still read it at first, but after turning several pages in a row, I was still at the same plot point, which made me a little impatient, especially when a bunch of long paragraphs appeared in front of me. In fact, Madam, you can put more emphasis on the plots of several small climaxes. There is no need to spend so much ink on them all. It is also important to grasp the details of the plot. That's all, I hope I haven't offended my wife.

Even though Li Shengxiang represents the highest-status class in the feudal era, he still cannot escape the influence of ancient ignorant concepts. He believes that Qin Suneng's current status is due to Shen Yuyun's luck. How is this view different from those of village women? The village women believe that Qin Su turned from a local ruffian and turned into a good person, taking care of his family and making money because of Shen Yuyun's "prosperous husband". They all wished that their children could marry a prosperous man, so that their children could become Qin Su. They have such metaphysical thoughts that they want to rely on others for help, but never think about how to change themselves, and ignore the importance of their own efforts. It is really pitiful, sad, ridiculous, and extremely ignorant.

Yang Huan... It's amazing. In ancient times when medical standards were low, childbirth was equivalent to a trip to hell, which would have extremely bad effects on the body. But what was he thinking? "Shen Yuyun must not be in trouble. She must give birth to a child safely, and she must be healthy and give birth again." Good guy, if you can't give birth to a baby yourself, you just stare at other people's bellies. For your own selfishness, are you treating others as fertility machines? Besides, why should someone else's child be given to him? Since flesh and blood are connected to each other, who would be willing to give his ten-month-pregnant child to someone else? Even the reason why he hopes that Shou will give birth to a child safely is because he hopes that Shou can give him another child... This is really unreasonable.

Congratulations on finishing the article, spread the flowers! The story is very exciting, and the setting and imagination of the article are also very interesting. It is different from the traditional rebirth and book transfer. Although the protagonist has an aura, he is not intelligent. The villains also have their own plans, and there is no obvious facial expression. The protagonist, Gong, comes from the end of the world. At the beginning, he appears to be dissociated from the people and things around him. Later, he slowly integrates and truly accepts it. My feelings for Shou start from her good looks, loyalty to responsibility, and then to being attracted by Shou's talent and personality, which is very fascinating. Shou is a very traditional brother, gentle and kind, with his own principles and persistence. Although he is sometimes too soft-hearted, his view of right and wrong and the overall situation shows that he has a good upbringing. Especially in the final historical choice, I feel that the author's situation has been lifted up. Since there is no way to stop the torrent of history from rolling forward, let the brother race leave a glorious mark in history. It's really touching and admirable. The supporting characters such as Big Brother and Zhao Zhuang are all very good and have distinct personalities. Let's not talk about Xiaobai, the standard starting point man's appearance, Jin Jianggong's appearance, I look forward to his story with Turing! Although the plot is a bit long and the author's writing skills are slightly lacking, after all, the background of the story does require a long connection. The biggest drawback is that the wife always stops updating in the middle! Here's the key point!!! This problem must be corrected!!! Overall, the advantages of this article outweigh the disadvantages, and I insisted on finishing it, which is worthy of praise! Looking forward to the big new article, it looks very good! The new world of Xianxia, ​​attacking and receiving looks so interesting, I'm super looking forward to it!

This weakling is stupid and stupid, so he should die. 1. Knowing full well that her mother's family is not good, she falls into the wolf's trap alone. 2. He was caught by Emperor Zhou and questioned whether he would care about his life or death for the sake of the country. Useless brother.

It's just that the ending is tempting and the way it's written is so silly.

I laughed to death from this chapter during the second brush. Before Tan Xin left, she had to tell Gong the secret that Shou's father was inhumane. The key to this was that this secret was of no use. It was just to explain to the readers that he was still "clean", but it was too abrupt. One second, the young master fell in love with you, but he was blind, and the next second, he suddenly said that the young master's father is not good, hahahahaha

Have you passed the law exam? If you want to get it over once and for all, it's best to review it wholeheartedly and stop writing essays. Come on.

I just finished reading the novel today. It was well written, but I thought there would be a side story about Tan Xin and Xiao Bai?