Words of Acceptance

I have been missing for many years, unable to achieve high or low levels, with a poisonous tongue and a kind-hearted Guoguo. This time, I was invited to read the masterpiece by a fellow student from Tragedy. Because I had to write a long review, I read it very carefully and with a critical eye. Therefore, fellow fellow student from Tragedy, please take a deep breath before reading my long review. Online literary novels are articles that are read quickly, and readers do not appreciate the text very carefully. If the plot doesn't catch the reader's attention at the beginning, no one will know how exciting the plot will be later. In the first chapter, there is a long paragraph before mentioning Song Ziyan. This paragraph feels rambling and unfocused, and does not arouse the desire to read further. Later, the mention of Song Ziyan made me think that he was the male protagonist of this article, and there would be a scene of their reunion later. As a result, the real male protagonist appeared in the third chapter, and this Song Ziyan had no voice, making people confused why he appeared in such an important position in the first chapter. There is no key point found in the second chapter. The appearance of the younger brother, and then the campus life has nothing to do with the younger brother, so what is the use of mentioning him? There is still a little problem: [Chen Moyan looked at the back of Chen Chaoran who was walking in front in a daze, and suddenly realized that he was no longer the little child he was before, he was already taller than himself. But after thinking about it again, Chen Moyan felt relieved. He was only 1.6 Meters tall. If a boy of his age was not taller than him, what would it be like? My younger brother is 12 years old, so he is in the fifth grade of elementary school. How can a boy in the fifth grade of elementary school get more than 160 when he has not yet developed? How can you be taller? To sum up, you want to say too much and spend two whole chapters unable to find the key points, which naturally leads to the loss of many readers. In fact, I think it is perfectly fine for the third chapter to be directly used as the first chapter. As for when you want to mention Song Ziyan or his younger brother later, you can naturally bring up that past in the form of replay. ["Do you want to be a solitary animal?" With a hint of joking, but also a touch of worry. There is nothing wrong with being alone! This shows that the heroine is often alone. As for the later plot, she has to wait for her roommate to eat and go to class with her roommate. Isn't it a bit contradictory? As for when the heroine and the hero are together, basically every word they say is accompanied by some psychological or facial expressions and descriptions of guessing the other person's psychology. It makes me so confused and I want to give the heroine a slap in the face. Can you please stop being so boring! … The male protagonist is a gentle animal, which I quite like, but I feel that he is not sinister enough. Well, the attack speed is not fast enough, and he is a little forward-thinking, leaving the female protagonist time to think about how to escape. Well, the tragedy can make him more brave. Well, Tragedy Classmate, your writing is actually very good, but you are probably too little girl. You are afraid that you have not introduced things clearly and the readers cannot understand your thoughts, so you write every little thing very straightforward and detailed, without any details. In this way, the article will be very dull, without climax, and the readers will also find it very boring. The last thing I want to say is that you should stick to your dreams and don't be discouraged from writing because of my words. I won't say any more unnecessary words, you know...

Mother. . Zuo Tong here, meet Meow.

Dear, are you writing about me? Haha, how did I see my own shadow? This must be mentioned one day the year before last. Please allow me to describe that experience. When I was in college, on the steps to class, someone came down and patted my head. Then I was a little confused and said, "Don't remember me!" Then he left. When I went to the dormitory, I suddenly Then I remembered that it might be that elementary school classmate, and then I asked if it was it, and I was sure, so forget it, but one day when it waved to me again, I thought it was waving to someone else. I looked behind me, but I was still not sure whether it was calling me. I really can't remember the person. It's so embarrassing. . . I'm sorry, I wrote a few things, and I feel more emotional as I get older~ Wow haha~ By the way, I forgot to mention it. When I took the art exam, it was said that it was taking the exam in the class next to mine. At that time, it was not sure it was me, and asked me if I was taking the exam there. I thought it was magical at first. . . Wow haha, does my story have any reference value~ But mine is this her~~ Hehe~ Don't think wrong

Just listen implicitly, haha, by the way, what does "I am only 1.6 Meters tall, what's the big deal if a boy of his age is not taller than me." This makes me feel so embarrassed~ I won't go into detail about this~ Please ignore it, personal emotions are at play. This brother is so cute. But my brother stopped calling me sister when he was 12 years old. He calls me by nicknames. Tell me, what kind of world is this? Children nowadays are so rude. I deeply protest (brothers and sisters, please don't... I mean part of it. Please respect your food with color... Don't throw it over!) I feel that the age of the younger brother in the article should be lower, I guess around 7 or 8 years old. My brother is younger. They were so cute when they were so good that you wanted to pinch them twice (I still have this urge~), but it is limited to a certain period of time. When they grow up, they will no longer be cute. (I wish they would stop growing up, hehe~) The writing is very real and realistic (it would be more real if the younger brother was younger). I said that it will take me a semester to remember all the classmates. It seems that this heroine is stronger than me, so I feel comforted. The plot is still too slow, sister, hurry up~~~Looking forward to it~~Come on, come on~~

My dear, this is a well-written "leisurely" beginning~ It looks like it's going to have a long development~ I used to prefer long novels, but now I don't have the patience. I prefer shorter ones, because I'm afraid that if I read a long novel, I'll lose confidence in it. The main thing is that I have to persevere to read the ending, which kills me the most. I can't help it, who makes me more stubborn~ Eh~ I really want to say that I'm biased, this is a book review~~ Haha~ But hello I should move closer to a short story~ It's considered a suggestion~ Hehe~ Generally speaking, the writing style is very good, and the campus theme is also good (it can be developed into an urban romance, which is also good. Is it because I am old and too innocent and have no feelings anymore?! Haha ~) Keep up the good work. I didn't see how shady the man was at the beginning (mainly because I commented on it before I read the second part, hehe!). In fact, I prefer to read stories about shady characters and novices, because the words in them are more classic, you know. I'll stop here and wait until I read the rest before continuing. . . . .

Passing by take a look Take a look drink tea Leave It's that simple

Shu Qi came here scattering flowers,

Hey hey hey, here I come. Applaud and scatter flowers! ! ! A warm and long review Warm and melting, just for my beloved. Somehow, he recognized her at a glance in the crowded crowd. Her delicate facial features and unpainted eyebrows. Quiet and simple. The young man was young, but he couldn't help but fall in love at first sight. He stayed for her and was crazy about her. It's just a longing for lovesickness, begging the beautiful woman to look back at her again. The copywriting attracted me from the beginning, and I always felt that I could smell a hint of conspiracy in it. It makes me want to read on involuntarily. I like the male protagonist's character very much, it's three-dimensional and clear. He changed his name and surname. Although it was a purposeful approach, it did not make people feel disgusted at all. Even though we haven't seen each other for a long time, the affection he left behind is still profound. The feeling of ignorance in high school has not changed even now, which makes me a little envious of the heroine. "The so-called Lan Yan is just the first step towards getting closer to her." Faced with such a sultry heroine, I am very much looking forward to how he will become her lover and break the tightly closed door. "The so-called evil is just a way to take off her mask." To be honest, I personally didn't think the male protagonist was very sinister. He was friendly and doting on the female protagonist, and he only wanted to be with her after waiting for so long. On the contrary, it gave me the feeling of a world gone through. But if he will use some tricks in the future, that will be another matter. The male protagonist's temperament is very to my liking, and I hope that he will continue to follow this path. Looking at the heroine again, she is silent and talks very little, feeling depressed inside. It is indeed the slow-heating type. But I always feel that besides being sultry, she is also very confused. From what is described in the article, it is true that the male protagonist is indeed a handsome guy. I really don't understand why she can't recognize people she has interacted with many times when we meet again. This really made me very depressed. However, the so-called coquettishness can be unexpected when it happens. The moment the mask is taken off, it is still unknown who will be raped by whom. In short, I hope that the heroine's character can be more distinctive and lovable, and not boring. The taste of love can only be understood by those who are deep in it. How the heroine loves and how she loves is also a major highlight of this article. Although the encounter between the two people is a bit unexpected, the novel relies on all kinds of abruptness to put it together, so it is reasonable. In fact, campus writing is not easy to write. You cannot make readers think it is naive or even nonsensical. Furthermore, since the hero and heroine have such personalities, the plot must be set up cleverly. I hope Tou Mingda can bring us a refreshing feeling. The word "nuannong" makes people feel warm at first glance. Warmth and affection. At this point in the novel, there is affection, but the warmth... Maybe it will naturally come later. I have always liked articles worth remembering, and this novel whetted my appetite just enough. But I wonder if this article will be a bit abusive in the future? Smooth sailing is never a good thing. Along with the sentence "I don't want us to be just friends", I want to see how the male protagonist will cast the net step by step and finally capture the heart of his lover. Warm and melting, forming ripples of pure color. All in all, this is a very good article, with a good title, good copywriting, and a good beginning. But I believe the best part is definitely more than that. Maybe there will be some minor flaws along the way, but I still hope Tou Ming will work hard and write hard. Fox, I will definitely support you all the way, hehe

I can't understand. I'm OUT.

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