Li Ying, a demon who was raised by humans for five years.
Li Ying, a demon who thought of herself as human for five years.
Li Ying, a demon who is neither purebred nor mongrel.
Li Ying meets a cool, aloof lake demon, a remarkable mother and son, and a Taotie raised by a cultivator. She also raises a half-demon whose mother is a flower spirit...
This story is being revised as I write, but at most I'll only be changing little things...
Almost every character has an illustration. Su is looking forward to your clicks and bookmarks along with all the beauties~ (I refuse to believe that with so many beauties, I can't tempt a few people into reading. Hehe O(∩_∩)O~)
You can see the picture, but it has not been updated after many times. Please don't give up~
Can't see the picture ~ Author's reply:
Huh? Go and change it immediately... Author's reply:
It's been changed, can you see it? Author's reply:
It's been changed, can you see it?
Please update soon~~~~Author's reply:
Well~ Because the Loli Development Notebook has been completed, the next step is to mainly update this article.
However, because of the Chinese New Year these days, I won't be able to update until two days later. The author's reply:
What should I say, I also participated in the essay competition for Eastern Monsters for this article, so I will definitely write 80,000 words by the end of February~ Don't worry~
Go to Baidu and search for "empty organ". The second line on page 7 is the one with the same cover as your character.
Damn it... I forgot to rate it... The author's reply:
3Q~
Isn't this Sasha?
But it's really cute~
I think it's good. The author replied:
Thank you~ I'm even more touched if you can rate it..
Sasha? What is pinching?
1) "There have been a lot of strange guests coming to the inn recently, and it seems that they are all here for the mother and son who came first."
Well, if they were servants, shouldn't they be together?
I originally thought I could see some kind of conflict in the inn, but it turned out to be the master and the servant...
By the way, this chapter feels a bit flat and rushed. It would be better if it were broken into three or four chapters and explained in detail.
2) "When Liying is five years old, she looks like she is only three or four years old... That's why Liying will grow up to three or four years old quickly in five years."
Do you feel conflicted? Especially the last sentence, doesn't it go well?
3) "A little melancholy on the young face"
After reading this sentence, it is easy to think that dot is a verb! Would it be better to add "with"?
4) "Qinghu looks at his own body"
Ontology? Hmm... It looks a bit abrupt. Although there is "The sparkling lake is strangely soothing" at the end, it still feels a bit difficult to understand, because it is easy to regard the latter sentence as a description of the environment.
5) "The cherry blossom tree has been planted for nearly 20 years and has grown into a big tree."
Ah - yes, because such expressions are usually used in exclamations, that is, when people speak. The author is describing objectively, not psychologically, right?
6) "Liying still has no way to refuse her benefactor's request."
Should there be a preface to this "still"?
7) "But her qualifications are so good, Liying is almost catching up with her now. People outside are sinister, and although monsters are indeed more innocent, once they go out, they will not simply come into contact with monsters. Besides, even monsters have evil intentions."
What does "catch up with yourself" mean? And the last sentence is a bit long-winded and contradictory! The author should refine it a bit more.
8) The little wind blows and blows
Are you singing an opera?
9) Liying ate the meal just brought by her brother and the dishes on the table alone, ignoring the murderous eyes of the middle-aged men next to her, and the interesting eyes of the mother and son opposite her.
Would it be better if the last two sentences were placed in the middle of the first sentence? In this way, I always feel like I haven't finished the sentence yet.
10) Strangely, Taohua became more and more silent, maybe because Lihu City was getting closer and closer, Liying guessed.
The first two sentences are descriptions, and the third sentence is the psychology of the heroine, right? Should it be separated by punctuation?
I really like the author's writing, so I can't stand some minor mistakes in the writing. Just like fish, although it's so delicious that you can't put it down, it's still uncomfortable when a fish bone pops out from time to time. Typos, typos, and missing key points are all common problems that no author can completely avoid, but the frequency of them in this article—well, is very high, and I often look at them and make fun of them. So I really hope that the author can proofread it carefully before publishing, and pay attention to grammar and sentence structure-a bit picky! I hope the author doesn't think too much of me...
Author's reply:
Ah~Thank you dear~I will take a good look~
Ren Xiaoyao… (I don't know why this name is a bit shocking... Embarrassing)
That mother and son are a living treasure. They are so cute.
I'm curious why their men are so afraid of them~~~Xiao Mo's article is very good
Collect it
By the way, did that nephew show up? Would it be better to show up? (Appears like a monster... - -) Author's reply:
It's really weird. I got my name very casually. It's just a code name anyway~ I just borrowed the name that others have used, hehe~ The author's reply:
Well, as for the issue of appearance, I probably didn't write it clearly. I mean because the nephews' mother was there, so Liying didn't appear. Liying is a monster, so of course she showed up. I'll change it later, hehe.
Bing Lai supports Xiao Mo~~hehe~~
Is this the male protagonist -v-… Author's reply:
Thank you Bing~ The hero is still early, hehe
I came across this article from the themed essay contest. Although there is only one piece, I think it's very good! The beginning is so exciting, it must be very interesting. Collect!
But there is a problem: the theme of the essay contest is "Oriental Monsters", and there is a clause in the submission instructions for registration: "9. If there are superstitious contents such as ghosts, monsters, gods, etc. - This contract will be automatically terminated, and all legal liabilities arising therefrom will be borne by Party A." I hope the author will pay attention to this and not be deceived.
Author's reply:
Uh, I guess... This is fiction~ and it's a novel~
It's actually related to superstition~ I'm so sweaty...
But thanks for the reminder and support~
You can see the picture, but it has not been updated after many times. Please don't give up~
Can't see the picture ~ Author's reply: Huh? Go and change it immediately... Author's reply: It's been changed, can you see it? Author's reply: It's been changed, can you see it?
Please update soon~~~~Author's reply: Well~ Because the Loli Development Notebook has been completed, the next step is to mainly update this article. However, because of the Chinese New Year these days, I won't be able to update until two days later. The author's reply: What should I say, I also participated in the essay competition for Eastern Monsters for this article, so I will definitely write 80,000 words by the end of February~ Don't worry~
Go to Baidu and search for "empty organ". The second line on page 7 is the one with the same cover as your character. Damn it... I forgot to rate it... The author's reply: 3Q~
Isn't this Sasha? But it's really cute~ I think it's good. The author replied: Thank you~ I'm even more touched if you can rate it.. Sasha? What is pinching?
1) "There have been a lot of strange guests coming to the inn recently, and it seems that they are all here for the mother and son who came first." Well, if they were servants, shouldn't they be together? I originally thought I could see some kind of conflict in the inn, but it turned out to be the master and the servant... By the way, this chapter feels a bit flat and rushed. It would be better if it were broken into three or four chapters and explained in detail. 2) "When Liying is five years old, she looks like she is only three or four years old... That's why Liying will grow up to three or four years old quickly in five years." Do you feel conflicted? Especially the last sentence, doesn't it go well? 3) "A little melancholy on the young face" After reading this sentence, it is easy to think that dot is a verb! Would it be better to add "with"? 4) "Qinghu looks at his own body" Ontology? Hmm... It looks a bit abrupt. Although there is "The sparkling lake is strangely soothing" at the end, it still feels a bit difficult to understand, because it is easy to regard the latter sentence as a description of the environment. 5) "The cherry blossom tree has been planted for nearly 20 years and has grown into a big tree." Ah - yes, because such expressions are usually used in exclamations, that is, when people speak. The author is describing objectively, not psychologically, right? 6) "Liying still has no way to refuse her benefactor's request." Should there be a preface to this "still"? 7) "But her qualifications are so good, Liying is almost catching up with her now. People outside are sinister, and although monsters are indeed more innocent, once they go out, they will not simply come into contact with monsters. Besides, even monsters have evil intentions." What does "catch up with yourself" mean? And the last sentence is a bit long-winded and contradictory! The author should refine it a bit more. 8) The little wind blows and blows Are you singing an opera? 9) Liying ate the meal just brought by her brother and the dishes on the table alone, ignoring the murderous eyes of the middle-aged men next to her, and the interesting eyes of the mother and son opposite her. Would it be better if the last two sentences were placed in the middle of the first sentence? In this way, I always feel like I haven't finished the sentence yet. 10) Strangely, Taohua became more and more silent, maybe because Lihu City was getting closer and closer, Liying guessed. The first two sentences are descriptions, and the third sentence is the psychology of the heroine, right? Should it be separated by punctuation? I really like the author's writing, so I can't stand some minor mistakes in the writing. Just like fish, although it's so delicious that you can't put it down, it's still uncomfortable when a fish bone pops out from time to time. Typos, typos, and missing key points are all common problems that no author can completely avoid, but the frequency of them in this article—well, is very high, and I often look at them and make fun of them. So I really hope that the author can proofread it carefully before publishing, and pay attention to grammar and sentence structure-a bit picky! I hope the author doesn't think too much of me... Author's reply: Ah~Thank you dear~I will take a good look~
Ren Xiaoyao… (I don't know why this name is a bit shocking... Embarrassing) That mother and son are a living treasure. They are so cute. I'm curious why their men are so afraid of them~~~Xiao Mo's article is very good Collect it By the way, did that nephew show up? Would it be better to show up? (Appears like a monster... - -) Author's reply: It's really weird. I got my name very casually. It's just a code name anyway~ I just borrowed the name that others have used, hehe~ The author's reply: Well, as for the issue of appearance, I probably didn't write it clearly. I mean because the nephews' mother was there, so Liying didn't appear. Liying is a monster, so of course she showed up. I'll change it later, hehe.
Bing Lai supports Xiao Mo~~hehe~~ Is this the male protagonist -v-… Author's reply: Thank you Bing~ The hero is still early, hehe
I came across this article from the themed essay contest. Although there is only one piece, I think it's very good! The beginning is so exciting, it must be very interesting. Collect! But there is a problem: the theme of the essay contest is "Oriental Monsters", and there is a clause in the submission instructions for registration: "9. If there are superstitious contents such as ghosts, monsters, gods, etc. - This contract will be automatically terminated, and all legal liabilities arising therefrom will be borne by Party A." I hope the author will pay attention to this and not be deceived. Author's reply: Uh, I guess... This is fiction~ and it's a novel~ It's actually related to superstition~ I'm so sweaty... But thanks for the reminder and support~