The Right Way to Open the Gates of Hell

Finished spreading flowers! I came here for archeology during the COVID-19 pandemic... I spent half a day reading the whole book, and I was a little touched. So I couldn't control my hands on the keyboard, and I wrote a long review for no reason... This is a virgin review. There must be something wrong in the writing, please pat me down... ... First of all, there are a lot of humorous words. I really laughed while watching it. Xiaobai's character is also very interesting. The character is very full! Boast, brag, brag, brag! Xiaobai's style of painting is really weird hhhh, and the brain circuit of a good gay friend is too cute, I love it (x) However, the author said that the writing is not strong enough to support the world view and so on. I think it would be much better if we could try to cut off some details that cannot promote the big plot? Personally, I think the plot is best presented in the form of a line, where every point has logic and every line has a reason. But this article made me a little confused. It felt like it was mostly fragmented plots, and each fragment felt completely unrelated. Forcibly stringing it together always gave me a colorful and eye-catching feeling. (Ah, I can't even understand what I'm talking about...) For example, the cat in Mr. Bai's house only appeared once or twice, mostly acting coquettishly and cutely, which seemed a bit meaningless? Furthermore, the online violence part at the beginning felt a little strange, like an inexplicable collision or something. If we really needed to rely on something to lead the bat spirit to come to our door, could it be replaced with other less obtrusive plots? There is also a chapter dedicated to fish and rabbits, the appearance of Lucifer, etc. Although it is understandable that I want to use these to enrich the characters and world view, they are a bit too cumbersome and affect the flow of the whole text. These are all okay, but I think the most abrupt thing may be the Eastern monks. The big copy says East VS West, and the cultivator boss attacks, but looking at the whole text, this setting (except for beating people with pots) has no sense of existence, and it only appears at the end to force the ending. The origin of the last red monk was never made clear, and it always felt like it was rushed. As well as the Taoist priests in the Secret Service, the writing of them is a bit miserable at first. It always feels like they are going to be suppressed first and then promoted, but there is really nothing after that, which makes people feel confused and confused. Emmm, how should I put it, it just doesn't fit in with the public's coolness? Also, I always feel that the rhythm is not right, and it reads a bit weird. One chapter is used to write about the daily bickering between two people, but only a short paragraph is used to directly break the emotional line, which is sometimes fast and sometimes slow. In addition, the plot is a bit complicated, so the whole text seems a bit messy? Maybe next time you can take a closer look and write two or three sections in one chapter? Although it is cute in daily life, it would not be fun if it was separated from the big plot because of its cuteness. Finally, great praise for bringing us such an article, which gave me an afternoon of constant laughter. But after such a long time, DaDa's level must have improved. I didn't read DaDa's other articles for verification. Halfway through the writing, I felt that I might have talked a bit too much. However, after typing so many words, I was reluctant to delete them and decided to post them. So, don't take it to heart, just have fun reading it... This is the first time I have written a long review since I read the article. My level is not high, and my knowledge of literary creation is only half-full. If I made a mistake or offended my wife, please forgive me.

So after all these years, do I still need to check in... (Manual dog head)

Come check in when you see it's fully booked

Is the later Xiaobai a fusion of Dabai and Xiaobai?

Xiaobai is really cute

Compared to Baymax (?) Who killed three villains with lightning, Xiaobai is indeed cuter

Why is there still Lucifer??

Is it just gone? (T ^ T)

Want a sweet extra?˙?˙??(???????)??˙?˙?

Dad, I'm waiting for your extra episode