Song Zhanyi was given the chance to see Lu You again, but in exchange, he had to give up something important.
He returned to two years ago, to the place where they first met.
With the same time and the same place, would the same story await him?
And what exactly was the thing he had lost?
A melodramatic angst story, with a scummy gong and a pathetic shou. First the gong suffers, then the shou. Happy ending, no gong-switch. In short, it's not very original, but I like it.
I'm a newbie author who really, really wants to be popular. I hope you'll show me lots of support! Thanks!
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Sorry, who is the attacker and who is the receiver?
I like the setting of this article very much. The author's description of the scenes and events is really expressive and gripping. Praise~ And because I like it very much, I would like to make some suggestions. I have read through the author's short stories in the past two days. I feel that the settings are very interesting and the writing is not bad. The obvious area that needs improvement is that for short stories, the ending is usually a little lacking in stamina. I feel that it is like this in several stories. Anyway, it suddenly disappears. The plot is not explained enough and the emotions are not fully conveyed. So at the end, the reader will have a feeling of confusion_(:з∠)_ For example, for the article "Heart", let's talk about my understanding of the emotional line. I think Song's emotional changes should be quite drastic after he found out that Lu didn't love him. He would feel that "this road is still alive, but the road I like is gone." Regarding Lu in this life, Song may have complex emotions such as rejection and dissatisfaction, but he has to be careful to tolerate and take care of him. In short, I had these expectations for the emotional line, and I felt a little disappointed at the end. Because the first half of the article is really good at shaping the emotions, in comparison, the "he" at the end seems empty and weak. The article will be much more complete if we detail Song's journey of how to make up for his mistakes after finding the path. The author's way of describing his thoughts after retrieval is to write about the emotions of the other person from one person's point of view. In fact, I feel it would be better to do the other way round. Don't give way to talk about how to be taken care of, but let Song talk about how to be careful. I feel that the expressiveness will be stronger. Anyway, I hope the author can put more effort into the ending of the next short story~ Of course, if what I said is wrong, don't blame me~ By the way, The trail is real! It hurts so much. . . Why does such a good child have to live so hard? . Mr. Song must love him well~ Thank you for your hard work, madam (≧∇≦)/I have been in a literary turmoil recently and can finally eat happily again. My madam will definitely be popular!
I don't care, love is also family affection T^T
Liar!!! Such a poor protagonist