Ball, Love, and Wilderness

MGD, wearing water moon!

Oh, except for the extra scenes at the back, the characters in the front are very confusing. It seems that I haven't figured out which one I traveled through... In the first quarter, Shuiyue played ball, In the second quarter, Ye Zi received a breakup call? Suiyue cried in the third paragraph... Sorry, I really can't tell which character OTL received the breakup call earlier. The fourth paragraph... Ouch!!! I finally discovered that this is the first person, and those Shuiyue, Ye Zi, and Doudou are all supporting characters. The protagonist is wild!!! Three months later, he asked Ye Zi, "Did I fall asleep that night?" It seemed that the protagonist received a breakup call, and when he answered the phone, he inserted Ye Zi's behavior, but why was Shui Yue crying? OTL

I... Can't understand. With all due respect, Sir, there are some problems with your plot logic and language organization. In short, it is very confusing and incomprehensible. I suggest you put in more effort, do some basic training, read some good articles, practice your writing, and then start publishing again. Author's reply: Ok! I will check all these tonight.

I'm so confused after reading this conversation~ The author's reply: This... Should Ono abandon literature and pursue martial arts?

I'm about to smash bricks, please calm down before looking down. To be honest, I didn't understand it, not at all. At the beginning, I didn't even understand whether Shuiyue and Ye Zi were male or female. First, I had a vague understanding of the conversation on the phone after watching it for a long time, but I had no clue at all about the subsequent conversation at the prison. It is recommended that character dialogue be divided into paragraphs so that it is easier to distinguish who is speaking, especially for long paragraphs of dialogue. Secondly, the description of the scene is relatively pale. The environment described by the adults makes it almost impossible to imagine a rough outline. The relationship between the characters is also confusing. Although the people who have appeared so far can be counted on one hand, it still feels very confusing. Once again, sir, you haven't even written much in the main text, but you have an extra chapter, which makes me feel very happy. It is recommended that adults practice writing more and deepen their skills! Author's reply: ... ... I'm really tired of typing. How comfortable would it be to write with a pen?

It's so scary, I can't understand it at all

He was just as motionless as a piece of wood, not even moving his eyes. Shuiyue decided that he didn't like this person, it was too scary! He hated noodle stall patients. Are you sure it's a noodle stall and not facial paralysis? Or is this sentence meant to be funny? Kid. . . What grade did you go to? Learn how to write articles in paragraphs, otherwise it will be too confusing for people to understand. . . Author's reply: I just want everyone to laugh... ... Hurt...

Ono is threatening! He wants votes!!

Wow, let's make a sound while reading the Bawang article, Xiao Yefan said hard.

Come on, the author replied: Thank you