Quick Transmigration: Disaster Star, Get Lost

Happy Children's Day, keep up the good work, and look forward to more!

The article is very interesting, I have been following it

My understanding of quick travel seems to be different from my understanding? I thought that quick travel is the kind that can travel through several worlds continuously, and basically has a system.

For a newbie, the writing is pretty good. I saw it recommended on the forum, and I was curious about how old it is. My intuitive feeling is that I am around fifteen years old, I don't know if it is accurate. .

The arrangement of the paragraphs feels a bit strange. There are long paragraphs in the front that seem a bit irritating, and the later chapters look a bit messy. At first, the description of the environment seemed a bit too much? It feels like maybe the description of the environment is more focused on enriching the characters and storyline. These two paragraphs feel a bit overwhelming? The description is indeed a bit redundant in some places, although the vocabulary seems to be quite good. This is purely a personal opinion, and may be more subjective. Come on, the author (*￣3￣)╭?? The little flowers will hit you

The pronouns seem a bit confusing in some places. For example, at the end of this chapter, "Father, what is he going to do?" I feel that if it is the protagonist, I should be used.

There is a typo for gay in one-half of the word, and "Zigu's clothes" near the bottom. I remember that Zuogu seems to be a euphemism for death. Does the author want to change it_(:з∠)_

Come and help!! Come on come on! Please keep writing!

The writing is good~ Come on, the time travel writing is very natural!

Sorry, I smiled unkindly