It's too thin. It feels like the heroine didn't do anything but raised an apprentice as her husband and she almost died. .
The relationship between the characters is not bad. After all, the male and female protagonists have known each other for many years and the male protagonist is still a loyal dog. The emotional support and environmental atmosphere are very smooth. I won't go into too many advantages. I mainly want to mention some of my divergent views on this book. There is a section in the middle where you are in jail or something. I feel like the author, in order to pretend to be 13 and forcibly improve your character, left too much blank space so that you can't guess the cause and effect of the story, which made people confused (I almost gave up when I saw that). Also, I think Baili, the second male lead, can be dispensed with. Firstly, his play is not that long and short and does not reflect the gloomy feeling. It can only be forced to express sorrow for the sake of new words. Secondly, there is no complete story system or supplementary narration to explain the past of the heroine and the second male lead. This makes it difficult for people to understand the plot and thoughts of the second male lead, and may appear in the play at any time. Personally, I think the second male lead is not fleshed out enough. Instead of doing this, it would be better to portray the second male lead as a confidant or a close friend. As for the role of promoting the emotional drama between the male and female protagonists. . . A blue face with jade trees in the wind, misty and elegant like a banished immortal descending to earth, can easily achieve this effect. And the heroine's character. . . It's a little flat, maybe it's the second male lead's problem, the character description is not deep. The author probably wanted to portray a heroine who looks lazy, silly and fufu but is actually very smart, talented and has a story. However, there is no strong feeling between the lines, and the description of the character is a bit watered down. There doesn't seem to be much mention of talent in the book (?), And when it is mentioned, it's just in the past. There aren't one or two things to deepen this impression (I've read too many stories and I'm sorry for the memory loss). She's one of the more bland female protagonists I've ever seen. Speaking of the male protagonist, The things are basically all taught by female masters, but it gives me the feeling that the male protagonist is very good at martial arts, but not many people care about who taught him, so it doesn't reflect the female protagonist's feeling of "knowing all the martial arts in the world, but she doesn't know any martial arts." But the male protagonist gives people a deeper impression, maybe because the male protagonist is dependent on him most of the time, so he gives people the impression of a firm and reliable loyal dog boy. Overall, the article is certainly good, but there are still areas for improvement, so please do your best. . . . (I don't know if this is an old article, but I don't care. Anyway, this is a comment from a few light years ago. The above only represents my personal opinion, please don't criticize if you don't like it)
Fortunately, I survived.
I personally think it would be good if there is no extra episode.
!!! I left a message last time and said that I read your writing "Responsiveness to All Requests" when I was in college. Today I suddenly discovered that you also wrote "Zhuangyuanyou"!!!!!
The author tells the story very carefully, I like it.
The writing is quite beautiful, but it felt like a bowl of gorgeous porridge to me. I had to eat it for a long time before I could eat a few grains of rice. I was so hungry!
It's a very literary technique, which is rarely seen. The author has good literary skills. Nowadays, online novels are very messy, with many typos and mistakes. At least these shortcomings do not exist in this article. The connection between the past and the future and the foreshadowing are very good. Nice article.
A light but very meaningful ancient text. I like it. Thank you to the author for his hard work.
Are Qin and Ma really a couple?
I almost thought Xiao Zhao was dead, I was scared to death, I like the ending~
It's too thin. It feels like the heroine didn't do anything but raised an apprentice as her husband and she almost died. .
The relationship between the characters is not bad. After all, the male and female protagonists have known each other for many years and the male protagonist is still a loyal dog. The emotional support and environmental atmosphere are very smooth. I won't go into too many advantages. I mainly want to mention some of my divergent views on this book. There is a section in the middle where you are in jail or something. I feel like the author, in order to pretend to be 13 and forcibly improve your character, left too much blank space so that you can't guess the cause and effect of the story, which made people confused (I almost gave up when I saw that). Also, I think Baili, the second male lead, can be dispensed with. Firstly, his play is not that long and short and does not reflect the gloomy feeling. It can only be forced to express sorrow for the sake of new words. Secondly, there is no complete story system or supplementary narration to explain the past of the heroine and the second male lead. This makes it difficult for people to understand the plot and thoughts of the second male lead, and may appear in the play at any time. Personally, I think the second male lead is not fleshed out enough. Instead of doing this, it would be better to portray the second male lead as a confidant or a close friend. As for the role of promoting the emotional drama between the male and female protagonists. . . A blue face with jade trees in the wind, misty and elegant like a banished immortal descending to earth, can easily achieve this effect. And the heroine's character. . . It's a little flat, maybe it's the second male lead's problem, the character description is not deep. The author probably wanted to portray a heroine who looks lazy, silly and fufu but is actually very smart, talented and has a story. However, there is no strong feeling between the lines, and the description of the character is a bit watered down. There doesn't seem to be much mention of talent in the book (?), And when it is mentioned, it's just in the past. There aren't one or two things to deepen this impression (I've read too many stories and I'm sorry for the memory loss). She's one of the more bland female protagonists I've ever seen. Speaking of the male protagonist, The things are basically all taught by female masters, but it gives me the feeling that the male protagonist is very good at martial arts, but not many people care about who taught him, so it doesn't reflect the female protagonist's feeling of "knowing all the martial arts in the world, but she doesn't know any martial arts." But the male protagonist gives people a deeper impression, maybe because the male protagonist is dependent on him most of the time, so he gives people the impression of a firm and reliable loyal dog boy. Overall, the article is certainly good, but there are still areas for improvement, so please do your best. . . . (I don't know if this is an old article, but I don't care. Anyway, this is a comment from a few light years ago. The above only represents my personal opinion, please don't criticize if you don't like it)
Fortunately, I survived.
I personally think it would be good if there is no extra episode.
!!! I left a message last time and said that I read your writing "Responsiveness to All Requests" when I was in college. Today I suddenly discovered that you also wrote "Zhuangyuanyou"!!!!!
The author tells the story very carefully, I like it.
The writing is quite beautiful, but it felt like a bowl of gorgeous porridge to me. I had to eat it for a long time before I could eat a few grains of rice. I was so hungry!
It's a very literary technique, which is rarely seen. The author has good literary skills. Nowadays, online novels are very messy, with many typos and mistakes. At least these shortcomings do not exist in this article. The connection between the past and the future and the foreshadowing are very good. Nice article.
A light but very meaningful ancient text. I like it. Thank you to the author for his hard work.
Are Qin and Ma really a couple? I almost thought Xiao Zhao was dead, I was scared to death, I like the ending~