Beloved (Revised Edition)

Well, you don't have to have a lot of money to be happy, I agree.

OTZ… I actually didn't realize this article was yours until I finished spreading the word. Embarrassing

It's good as an outline, but as a finished article, it has shortcomings in many places. I don't know what other people's habits are when reading articles, but I personally don't like opening articles with specially prepared background patterns or background music. At least you can give me a pause button, forcing me to mute the sound. Maybe this song touched you a lot when writing this article, but everyone's understanding and feelings about an article are different. You can mark the suggestion to listen to certain music as the background, and we can also choose to accept it or not. I can also choose to listen to other background music. Another thing is that you deliberately spaced out the story from two people's perspectives. As far as the articles I have read are concerned, this is not the first time I have seen this kind of writing, and it is not easy to write well. You seem to focus too much on telling this story from the inner feelings of the two people, which I personally don't think is a good thing. If a story wants to move people, the best way is to tell the truth. The inner feelings of the characters are important, but it is best to let readers see the facts (personally, this is my favorite way of writing). Just like movies, movies cannot directly express the subtle emotional changes of actors to the audience. They rely on expressions, movements, scenes, changes in light and shadow, and even a wisp of dust in the air can touch the audience. Isn't it the writer's duty to describe the scene he sees in his mind to the reader, so that the reader can feel it? There are many things that you won't be touched by if you don't experience them yourself. If you can't let readers feel the character's soul and enter the soul, readers won't be able to be touched. There are many plots that I have fantasized about. If you had a more detailed description, I would probably cry and swell my eyes after reading this article. For example, in Xu Li's construction site career, he suddenly faced the reality of male prostitutes, such as Cheng Hangyuan's love for Ai Yong, his attitude towards Xu Li when he woke up, etc. Just shouting I love you will make people feel a little fake, like watching a big play in the theater. Although it comes from life, it is so unreal. And it can definitely be combined into two chapters. The length of one chapter is a bit too short, and I wasted most of my time turning pages. Sorry to throw cold water on you, I may not have expressed it well, please forgive me, but this is also the experience and feeling I have accumulated after reading a lot of articles, I hope it can be helpful to you. After all, I am not a writer. I only have a good eye for reading, but I am not good at writing. I have spent so many words to prove that you, the author, still have potential. I look forward to your new work~

You are too strong... Really

Sofa!!! Wow, I really hope it's a first-person attack!!!