Serious version:
I would rather turn to ashes than let you perish from this world.
I would rather destroy the world so you can be reborn.
I would rather create a world to give you a place to call home.
Lighthearted version:
A journey through the Realm of Mountains and Seas, carrying a pocket dimension and searching the world for family.
An adventure across the vast interstellar reaches in search of little friends.
A journey through the world of adventure, flying high together with friends.
Friends before romance version:
Yuan: My partner is everything to me. Underlings, step aside. Don't disturb our time alone together.
Romance before friends version:
Xining: My little friends are everything to me. You-know-who, don't get in my way while I search the universe for them!
(The author's logic has run away from home. The protagonist is the boss!)
When writing the article, you can describe the protagonist more. The stories of the supporting characters do not need to be written separately. They can be interspersed between the stories of the protagonists, so that it will not feel awkward. The main line of the article is good. Come on. Roses bloom in September. You are the only one in my heart. I really want to be with you. I will give you one!
I can see that my wife has been working very hard, but when it comes to writing novels, my wife still has to pay attention to some things. My wife's sentences were broken incorrectly, and there were commas in many places that shouldn't be broken. For example, in the first sentence of this chapter, the fourth team of murlocs have temporarily found the direction of their investigation. This is a complete sentence and does not need a comma at all. Not only this sentence, but almost every sentence from the first chapter to this chapter has this problem. The sentence segmentation is wrong, and this alone can dissuade readers, let alone expect readers to follow the plot. Also, madam, you should pay attention to the layout of the article. It is best to leave a blank line after writing a paragraph, otherwise it will look uncomfortable. In short, my wife has written a lot of words and worked hard enough. As long as she finds the right method, she will succeed one day. Come on!
The app looks at the copywriting and there are no line breaks or paragraph breaks. The author should study how to format_(:зゝ∠)_
Come on! I feel like the layout is a bit crowded, so I could use blank lines~ The writing is very smooth, I didn't expect to have written so much www