Fresh and lighthearted blurb:
One moment, one lifetime; one season, one world.
I am Ji. I still remember. Do you?
Standard blurb:
A rich, handsome man crosses borders to pursue the first love he remembers, only to discover that the sweet, gentle little girl from back then has actually...
Ye Rong, forced to cross-dress: Nobody believes that someone like you, with your stinking (to high heaven)... unfathomably profound personality, your (arrogant beyond compare)... open-minded nature, and your (inhumanly cruel)... handsome and dashing looks, would fall for someone as flat-chested as me.
Loren: Mm.
1. A newbie author's newbie novel. Feel free to criticize = =+ No one's reading it anyway.
2. The writing will probably be amateurish, straightforward, and read like a running diary.
3. The characters might go off the rails, and it may get melodramatic. Have your keyboards ready.
4. Lighthearted, angst-free, and short. Apart from the main cast, everyone else is a one-off passerby, ABC adjectives~
A cold on the outside, devoted on the inside, thoughtful gong x distant on the inside, sharp-tongued on the outside, emotionally detached shou
Theme:
Come on(???_??)?
Hello, I'm the person on the forum. I've read the article. Here are my comments: As a novice, the writing is pretty good, but I don't know if it's necessary for the plot. I think one of your paragraphs is too long and the short paragraph is too short. Second, there are a lot of characters in the first chapter, and everyone feels a bit like an NPC passerby. It's hard to distinguish the priorities. The protagonist is not too distinct. My personal opinion is for reference only.