Yu Qing (gentle and clever recipient) & Lu Ya (split-personality, devoted-dog attacker)
Character introductions for the first world. They start falling in love in the third world, hey~
Updates daily or every other day at 8 p.m. Lots of chapters saved up, and the story won't be abandoned.
The first time Lu Ya split into a younger version of himself,
he had just called out, "Beautiful one!"
The Heavenly Venerable scooped up the little one and sat him on his arm.
"I was afraid you'd get tired walking."
The second time Lu Ya split his personality while pursuing the Heavenly Venerable,
the Heavenly Venerable said, "This kid looks way more pitiful than I do. I'll keep him around as a long-running drama."
The third time Lu Ya split his personality, he finally saw hope.
The Heavenly Venerable's human-world mother remarked, "I feel so unnecessary. Why has our son found himself another mom?"
A new novel with the complete manuscript saved up, posted next door~
"Onmyoji: With You"
Theme:
He is coming, he is coming, he is coming with beauty?ω?
You need a visa to come to the human world hahaha
Hope there will be more updates! Don't stop updating.
Xiaotuanzi is very able to capture the favor and love of female readers. If the author can describe Lu Yatuan more cutely and use some adjectives that sound like milk, so that Yuqing can't help but love him, the effect will be better.
"Lu Ya's face turned pale instantly, and he was confused, as if he didn't recognize him." It was bearable before, but here I really can't bear it anymore. In an instant, my face turned pale, and the adjective "surprised" is too exaggerated... You can say that Lu Ya was secretly frightened and started to re-examine or guess about Yu Qing. Such an exaggeration is like being discovered as an undercover agent. Not even the traitor who will be executed in the next second is so afraid...
The dialogue between the system and the male protagonist here is too "white" and "dry", which makes readers not feel interesting and their interest in reading will decrease. The author can try concise dialogue to make the purpose clearer. The beginning of an article is very important~
Come on, keep going, keep updating. The writing is pretty good.
I originally wanted to update a chapter, but I found that the update schedule for mobile phones was all messed up... I couldn't read it at all... If there is no wifi, I can only use my mobile phone... I will have to wait for a while to buy a network card before I can update... Bow, thank you for your support.