I'm looking for advance readers for my new novel, After Marrying the Emperor Who Hates Me to the Bone. Visit my author page to check it out (╯3╰)
A tomato spirit with overwhelming combat prowess and a husband-spoiling obsession X a mild-tempered, laid-back, fallen immortal lord.
Immortal Lord: I'm such a fool, truly. I knew that if you ate too much salt, you'd get thirsty and need water. I didn't know you'd drink that much. I got up in the middle of the night to pour some water. I had just crossed the threshold with the teapot when I saw that naked tomato spirit. I told him to go inside and get dressed. He was very obedient, always doing everything I said. So he went inside. I started packing his things and giving him instructions, preparing to send him away. I told him to leave, but he didn't answer. When I asked him what was wrong, all I heard was that he wanted to stay at my house...
Tomato Spirit: I don't just want to eat and drink from you, I want to sleep with you, too. (lights cigarette)
Reader's Guide:
1. This isn't orthodox cultivation. Demons, ghosts, and all sorts of strange creatures may appear.
2. The love interest is probably like an onion: peel back one layer of his identity, and there's another underneath. Please be patient while I peel back his heart, one layer at a time.
3. The general direction is sweet, and I guarantee the ending will be overloaded with sugar (*˙▽˙*)
4. Collections and comments are our greatest motivation. Please show your support. (bows)
Theme:
After reading it, how can I put it, overall, I personally feel a little disappointed. First of all, I really like the setting of this article, which is what attracted me to buy it. But it's very sad that such a good setting was not written well. The overall feeling is like an abbreviation that omits many details. When thinking about it carefully, some logic cannot be justified. The characters are relatively flat. I can see that the author wanted to make the characters three-dimensional, but because there are too many details missing, the plot appears abrupt in many places. The male protagonist's emotional change towards Tomato Spirit, the senior brother's emotional change towards the male protagonist, the grudges and grudges between the male protagonist and Tomato Spirit in the previous life, Tomato Spirit's true identity, the protagonist's friendship with the fox tribe, the general environment in which humans and demons are incompatible, etc. Many of the places that require long pages and long lines to lay out the description are briefly and crudely covered. It is not as detailed as the incident of the roadside boss's father being cursed by the son of the vixen's mistress. Originally, these things should be described emphatically, and should be described in a more detailed and longer space than the incident of the vixen's mistress' son being cursed. The current situation of improper detailing and a large lack of details has led to the overall feeling of being rushed and missing the point. There is not enough paving for the emotional line, the description of the fight between human and monster is rough, and there is no obvious description of the ending of the fight. The ending of the supporting characters is brought to a hasty ending, what should be a very satisfying slap in the face scene is ended halfway, and so on. I really liked the setting at the beginning. I originally thought it would be a long novel with more than a hundred chapters, but it ended up being hastily completed with dozens of chapters. It's such a pity, such a pity.
Wow, the ending is so good!
You... Are actually more literate...
Summer vacation is here, winter vacation is still a long time coming
Why aren't you updating? Are you too busy?
I obviously saw that there was an update, but why didn't I see it when I opened it?
Xiaoqi, you finally showed up, can we not end up with an anticlimax this time?
This senior brother is so disgusting... I hate this kind of person who will destroy himself if he doesn't get it.
If you don't want it to be unfinished, update it quickly.
!! You will torture the crayfish as soon as you come back, ojbk