Originally titled "Man and Ghost"
The Master of the Luo family and the Third Master of the Xie family shared a bond stronger than gold. They both caught a chill and, not long after returning home, passed away one after the other, each leaving behind a son and a daughter. Among them, the Luo family's daughter and the Xie family's young master had been betrothed since childhood. It should have been a match born of fate and bound by love, but the Xie family was overrun with women and short on men. In that enormous mansion, who knew how many women's youth had been imprisoned?
Luo Wenjun held the red silk tied to the coffin lid and, in the end, entered the Xie residence. Who would have thought that what should have been a separation between the living and the dead would instead find love undiminished and fate rekindled?
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Dear author, I will make a suggestion as it is almost finished. After reading the whole article, I feel that there is no main story line, although I can roughly feel that you want to write a ghost version of the Red Mansion, exposing the ugliness of the big family's heart, and finally falling down. But there is a problem with this. There are too many characters and the whole story of each character has to be written. If there are not a few hundred words to express the intense writing power in front of the Jia family, or millions of words are laid out like a male video, such as the "Swordsman in the Snow" I have watched, it will be difficult to control the group drama. I hope that the next book can pay attention to highlighting the main line, and I look forward to your progress.
I think there is no big problem with the writing style of this article, but because it is labeled as "supernatural", it is classified as a fantasy channel. However, most of the content is about house fighting, so it is. . .
Also, is the heroine too Buddhist? She always accepts what others want her to do without any objection, which makes it difficult to feel comfortable. . .
Maybe it's just not that interesting!
After reading this chapter, I feel that if the male protagonist maintains this ghost form for a long time, he should be called "The dead ghost husband stays with me as a widow" 23333. . .
Of course, I'm just saying by the way, the decision is up to you!
Damn, I think the writing and thinking of the article are quite good, but should you consider changing the cover or making the title more attractive? To be honest, when I saw the title and cover, I thought it was a modern supernatural horror. . .
Also, the heroine has made me feel aggrieved so far. When will I be able to stop being manipulated by my mother's family and my husband's family who are like vampires?
The behavior of the people around the heroine is really irritating! Will the hero be resurrected? Resurrection from a dead body or reincarnation with memories?
Dear author, I will make a suggestion as it is almost finished. After reading the whole article, I feel that there is no main story line, although I can roughly feel that you want to write a ghost version of the Red Mansion, exposing the ugliness of the big family's heart, and finally falling down. But there is a problem with this. There are too many characters and the whole story of each character has to be written. If there are not a few hundred words to express the intense writing power in front of the Jia family, or millions of words are laid out like a male video, such as the "Swordsman in the Snow" I have watched, it will be difficult to control the group drama. I hope that the next book can pay attention to highlighting the main line, and I look forward to your progress.
I think there is no big problem with the writing style of this article, but because it is labeled as "supernatural", it is classified as a fantasy channel. However, most of the content is about house fighting, so it is. . . Also, is the heroine too Buddhist? She always accepts what others want her to do without any objection, which makes it difficult to feel comfortable. . .
Maybe it's just not that interesting!
After reading this chapter, I feel that if the male protagonist maintains this ghost form for a long time, he should be called "The dead ghost husband stays with me as a widow" 23333. . . Of course, I'm just saying by the way, the decision is up to you!
Damn, I think the writing and thinking of the article are quite good, but should you consider changing the cover or making the title more attractive? To be honest, when I saw the title and cover, I thought it was a modern supernatural horror. . . Also, the heroine has made me feel aggrieved so far. When will I be able to stop being manipulated by my mother's family and my husband's family who are like vampires?
The behavior of the people around the heroine is really irritating! Will the hero be resurrected? Resurrection from a dead body or reincarnation with memories?
It looks good too! ! ! Please continue to update