The heroine's personality is unpredictable and ever-changing.
Meeting you in an unfamiliar place is my honor, and my happiness.
--Murong Xia.
I believe our meeting in this life must be the reward for the immeasurable good karma we accumulated in our past lives. That's why we can be together now. I will treasure you above all else.
--Atobe Keigo.
Note: The main couple is one-on-one, and both are healthy in body and mind.
Much of the content is purely fictional, so please don't worry too much about it qaq.
I'm not good at writing things like competitions, so please bear with me qaq.
I think that although Atobe may seem a bit arrogant on the surface, it is also based on his understanding and confidence in his own abilities. He is not a arrogant person. I feel like you were too focused on not being OOC when writing the script. Instead, you used too much force, which made the script a bit broken. Atobe is not a blind and arrogant person. He will behave differently in different situations. He is essentially a very calm person. Even if he is given the halo of "falling in love and losing his IQ", he will not lose everything. He will also restrain himself appropriately when facing the good friends of the people he likes, and he will not act like a female cat. Of course, he won't do it at ordinary times. With his upbringing, he will only meow like this when he is in a bad mood. Also, at this point, he has already fallen in love with Xia Xia. Is there no reason why he still calls Xia Xia an 'ungorgeous woman' from time to time?! Shouldn't it be called by name? Moreover, Atobe's self-proclaimed 'I' does not need to be replaced by 'this uncle' in every sentence, right?! When appropriate, you can let Atobu directly call himself "I", which will make it more readable and immersive. Otherwise, Atobu will feel a bit too rigid and not real enough. Finally, come on!
At the beginning, I felt very distorted and my OCC was a bit serious. In my mind, the uncle was as dazzling as Apollo, as beautiful as a rose, but with thorns, making people afraid to approach him. Later, after slowly reading it, I realized that it was not too OOC. After all, there is a saying that falling in love lowers a person's IQ and makes people less like themselves. So, is it reasonable for an uncle to become less like himself for the person he loves?! Also, you can probably practice your writing skills. Your settings are all good, but I feel that the effect you want to write cannot be fully reflected with your current writing style. An analogy is: You want to write about ten points of his pain and sorrow, but with your current writing style you can only express six or seven points, which is about the same meaning. Finally, big brother, come on o(≧v≦)oI am optimistic about you!
Please add more, not enough (⊙o⊙)