Deer Washing Clouds Beneath the Flowers, Cranes Dancing Through the Gate

First of all, the writing style is still very good and clean, but in the article, I have noticed several problems. The smaller problem is that it is not divided into natural paragraphs. You can pay attention to the articles written by some good writers. The dialogue parts are one sentence and one natural paragraph, rather than being squeezed into one piece. The visual effect of squeezing into one piece will definitely not be good, so you can pay attention to this issue next time you write~ The second is the issue of combining details and outlines. The outline is good, but it is not detailed enough, does not show the specific scenery, the feelings of the characters, etc., And does not allow readers to resonate with the feelings well. There is still a lot of room for improvement! I hope you will continue to work hard!!!

First of all, the writing style is still very good and clean, but in the article, I have noticed several problems. The smaller problem is that it is not divided into natural paragraphs. You can pay attention to the articles written by some good writers. The dialogue parts are one sentence and one natural paragraph, rather than being squeezed into one piece. The visual effect of squeezing into one piece will definitely not be good, so you can pay attention to this issue next time you write~ The second is the issue of combining details and outlines. The outline is good, but it is not detailed enough, does not show the specific scenery, the feelings of the characters, etc., And does not allow readers to resonate with the feelings well. There is still a lot of room for improvement! I hope you will continue to work hard!!!

Dear author, stop being a pig and update it quickly.

I downloaded Jinjiang mua specifically to read our Hu Baobao's articles.

Comrade Chen~ Next time you delay your manuscript, I will caress you carefully

This kind of clean ancient style writing is rare

I really like this style of writing