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First of all, let me state that I am not deliberately criticizing, but I just can't help but want to say something. When the fire in the house was very serious, the heroine, as a reporter, ignored the isolation of the firefighters (I didn't mention whether there was isolation, but at normal fire scenes, firefighters would be isolated. Reporters couldn't get in to interview, because it would hinder the fire fighting) and got into the fire scene to take pictures. This is not called dedication, this is called illness. It gives people the feeling of forcibly arranging for the heroine to be in danger so that the hero can save the beauty heroically. It is too blunt. Another very awkward thing is Xiao Yang's mood. As soon as the heroine got in, he wiped his face with tears all over his face. I thought it was caused by the smoke at first. But what he said after the hero arrived made me feel very shocked. I felt like those ignorant old people in rural dramas asking for help. 233333 I feel like the purpose of this character's existence is to specifically tell the male protagonist that if the female protagonist gets in, you should hurry up and save her. Overall, the first chapter felt very stiff and lacked the feeling of natural development. The above is my personal opinion. I really don't mean to be critical. Look at my sincere star eyes [star eyes. Jpg]

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My computer is broken so I can't update it for the past two days! It's obviously coded

How should I put it? I feel that the writing is a bit stiff and the reading is not particularly smooth.

I can see it almost sharply... A moment passed and a moment now... Oh my god...

It looks good, but it's too short. Would you consider updating it a second time?

Coming from a pair of bad people, I really like the article about meeting again after a long time.

Wow, I loved it from the beginning! Looking forward to it!