Childhood Friend, I Was Wrong

The author can't even describe the painting clearly?

Downstairs is right. . It's too verbose and makes me a little tired. I'll basically fast forward.

Sususususu, sweet, sweet, sweet... I just feel that the ending is a bit rushed... Everything else is okay, Xiaobai's text plus Mary Su's sweet text... When I see it now, I cover my face and burst into tears. Thank you, author!

Emmmmmm Sure enough, I wrote and missed something. I have also tried to write articles myself, and I know how difficult it is to enrich the plot, create good characters, and write in detail. But I still have the nerve to suggest it. If you want to improve the characters and plot, you probably have to read more, think more, and think more about how a good author arranges the plot, and then how the character's personality concept will react. As for the details, I would probably look for some works that have been evaluated as having compact plots and repeated climaxes to see how the author writes in detail the plot that affects the reader's mind, and how he brushes aside the unimportant plot settings in one stroke. Best wishes at last

After reading this, I have a big face... First of all, I think lz's forums are not well written. First, I feel tired after seeing long paragraphs of forums describing the plot. Second, the function of the forums (from what I've seen) is usually to add gimmicks to the title and the main building, and then some eagle-eyed friends/lz friends in the building interact to add attention. The main building takes up too much content and people who come to watch it can easily lose interest and feel that it is too long to watch. Then, if the little yellow rabbit is discovered by the bamboo horse, I would rather see the male protagonist's behavior after discovering it, and the consequences of this incident (the rivalry with the female protagonist). The author feels that the male protagonist's thoughts are arranged a bit far, and the effect may be better if he adjusts it. I feel that the consequences of drawing the little yellow rabbit are a bit high. I picked it up and put it down gently. I probably hope that after the heroine has a headache, she may have sex with the yellow rabbit (well, after all, everyone is an adult and will associate lust with the yellow rabbit's gimmick), or tell the male protagonist that she will be compensated with sex or something. Also, I feel that the other two CPs who appeared were... Given with phone bills (.) Their interaction was a bit deliberate and didn't feel very natural, but I can't explain the reason here, probably because of my limited skill (if I suggest it, maybe add some four supporting characters without contacting the protagonist, and it would be better to have more coincidental interactions. Finally, I saw that the female protagonist doesn't like the male protagonist but likes the female protagonist. This was an event where Jin Jiang and I were on a date. I clicked on an article called "818, the reader who read pirated articles and wrote long comments to criticize me." This is also a funny article, and it also has a forum style. I think the author has a good understanding of the rhythm of the article. The grasp of details, the creation of characters, and the control of the overall style are all good. It's not about selling Amway or cheating, but it means that you can probably learn some, and it can be regarded as similar to the genre. If you don't like it, please don't get angry at that article or the reader, just come to me ((((

Well, I want to say that this chapter feels like I am reading a high school history book, and doing historical reading comprehension, analyzing the merits and demerits of the emperor, etc. The author can summarize the conversation according to the needs of the plot (for example, this chapter wants to say that two people have different views, then A can directly say that she likes a certain emperor but B thinks that the emperor has more merits than merits, and then uses psychological activities to show that the character feels that the two people have different views). There is no need to copy a long character evaluation. Readers are not reading the article to review knowledge... Please make up for points. There are so many words and it seems like there will be more points. I won't get points by replying (.

Well, I want to say that this chapter feels like I am reading a high school history book, and doing historical reading comprehension, analyzing the merits and demerits of the emperor, etc. The author can summarize the conversation according to the needs of the plot (for example, this chapter wants to say that two people have different views, then A can directly say that she likes a certain emperor but B thinks that the emperor has more merits than merits, and then uses psychological activities to show that the character feels that the two people have different views). There is no need to copy a long character evaluation. Readers are not reading the article to review knowledge... I remember that the more words there are, the higher the points will be. Give more points to the author!

Maybe I have a unique taste. It would be particularly annoying to watch a plot where the female supporting character comes to trip up the female protagonist. If there is a twist in the plot: the female supporting character actually likes the female protagonist and not the male protagonist! When a plot like this unfolds, I feel like it's awesome, the writing style is funny, and it's so comfortable to watch. Emmmmm, give the author a score. Maybe I am too shameless to use my own taste to judge whether it is correct or not, because after thinking about it later, it is basically inserting a female supporting character to cause conflicts in the article, so I probably still want to see more plots that do not follow the rules.

As far as this extra episode is concerned, it feels a bit lackluster, because the previous chapters did not provide enough foreshadowing for Wu Feifan and Anna, so the progress is a bit abrupt. I came in to read it for free for a limited time, which is considered a blessing. I hope the author will continue to make progress.

Although it is not my favorite taste, after all, the writing style is very young and the logic is not perfect, but I have a habit of finishing it if the beginning is not too weird. Give the author a rating, keep up the good work, and hope it will be better in the future.