Starlight [Entertainment Industry]

. . . The author could use less description of the heroine's beauty. . . There is too much description in this part, and it would be a bit cumbersome to write in unnecessary places. . .

There are also people who greet people in person and directly call them Best Actor and Best Actor? I gave up immediately when I saw this.

Zhu Di is Zhu Yunwen's uncle, right?

There is a bug here~

After reading the first few chapters, I found that the author really has some problems with logical expression and language. I would like to make a few comments. 1. To express that the heroine has a good figure and looks beautiful, it does not necessarily have to be hot, top-notch, enchanting, graceful, etc. And if I mention it again with the same 50 words, it will seem repetitive and cumbersome. 2. If the male protagonist thinks that the female protagonist is very special, there is no need to add a superfluous sentence later, "She is also very beautiful" (←In fact, the female protagonist's good looks have already left an impression on the male protagonist in the previous article). There are a lot of logical repetitions in articles like this, which makes it difficult to read. 3 In fact, there is really no need to describe the appearance too much, it is purely to promote the plot. When I read Chapter 6, the words that impressed me most were probably the words top, beautiful, and hot. That's probably the few problems I've seen so far, just a few small comments. I hope the author can improve them next time.

Don't criticize me. How do you say it? The first chapter is like writing a running account. Xxx wanted to woo the heroine, but the heroine refused, so the contract failed. Xxx wanted to woo the heroine, although the heroine refused, but because I felt that the heroine would be popular, I still signed the contract. It also gave me a feeling of country style. "Song Wan, the company has won it for you~" Would it be better to go directly to the topic? ? ?

The author is a child! Your pronouns are very bad. I feel like I'm going to get cancer from the embarrassment. Please read more of the collection of high-quality author's articles.

For you little cookie, I collected it.

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Come on! It will get better gradually!