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The author's writing style is good. The theme of Jianghu grudges + imperial court is also an attractive theme, and the setting is also very attractive. After reading the copywriting, I know that the heroine is a high-IQ and cold-blooded person. Such a setting will not offend readers. The author's copywriting is simple and attractive, and hits the theme.
The rest of the plot is written very smoothly, and there are no major problems. The problem is just that the first three chapters are here. The author's great work in the first three chapters gives people a feeling of confusion. The first chapter is the wedge and preface, and the second chapter is the main text. It is set a few years later, but it is too excessive and makes people think that the thinking cannot be connected. It is better to revise it. The preface of the first chapter is quite confusing, and I generally know what it says. It is said that the fate of this child is the fate of the heroine, but the other explanations are not very clear. After the young man appears at the end, the author jumps directly to N years later. The heroine has grown up and has changed her identity. This jump is too big, and readers cannot reverse it. I suggest the author to look at how other people have gone too far. And according to the text and theme of this article, I think the author can set up a dialogue between the male protagonist and the female protagonist in a big preface. For example, the male protagonist asks her if she has feelings, and the female protagonist says yes, but she has no love, and then leaves or something. The male protagonist smiles bitterly. It turns out that everything is in vain, but the female protagonist is crying or showing that she is actually affectionate. What are her difficulties, etc., To arouse the reader's suspense, and then the next picture can be recalled or the story can be continued...
The above is my personal opinion, I hope it will be of great help to the author, haha
Come on, I've collected the ice cubes, please give them back~
The cover is beautiful!!!!!!!
Wow, my collection has greatly increased! Please update frequently!!!
The big copywriting is really... (I still have a long review in my stomach)
As for killer writing, I'm still a martial arts fan. I like the big writing style (⊙o⊙). I'll take a closer look at it. The author should also work hard (⊙o⊙).
The list is finished. If I have time tonight, I will write a long review for you. Come on!
Well, are you still a student??
Damn, I think your description is very graphic, the details are real, and it makes people immersive. It will fit your martial arts story very well. I don't know what you think? Are you planning to sign a contract or do you want to write something as a hobby? If you want more people to see it, you still need to expose it, not to mention that martial arts should be considered a cold frequency... (Switching the perspective is still a bit unnatural sometimes...)
Already reviewed, the author can go to the post to receive comments~
The author's writing style is good. The theme of Jianghu grudges + imperial court is also an attractive theme, and the setting is also very attractive. After reading the copywriting, I know that the heroine is a high-IQ and cold-blooded person. Such a setting will not offend readers. The author's copywriting is simple and attractive, and hits the theme. The rest of the plot is written very smoothly, and there are no major problems. The problem is just that the first three chapters are here. The author's great work in the first three chapters gives people a feeling of confusion. The first chapter is the wedge and preface, and the second chapter is the main text. It is set a few years later, but it is too excessive and makes people think that the thinking cannot be connected. It is better to revise it. The preface of the first chapter is quite confusing, and I generally know what it says. It is said that the fate of this child is the fate of the heroine, but the other explanations are not very clear. After the young man appears at the end, the author jumps directly to N years later. The heroine has grown up and has changed her identity. This jump is too big, and readers cannot reverse it. I suggest the author to look at how other people have gone too far. And according to the text and theme of this article, I think the author can set up a dialogue between the male protagonist and the female protagonist in a big preface. For example, the male protagonist asks her if she has feelings, and the female protagonist says yes, but she has no love, and then leaves or something. The male protagonist smiles bitterly. It turns out that everything is in vain, but the female protagonist is crying or showing that she is actually affectionate. What are her difficulties, etc., To arouse the reader's suspense, and then the next picture can be recalled or the story can be continued... The above is my personal opinion, I hope it will be of great help to the author, haha
Come on, I've collected the ice cubes, please give them back~
The cover is beautiful!!!!!!!
Wow, my collection has greatly increased! Please update frequently!!!
The big copywriting is really... (I still have a long review in my stomach)
As for killer writing, I'm still a martial arts fan. I like the big writing style (⊙o⊙). I'll take a closer look at it. The author should also work hard (⊙o⊙).
The list is finished. If I have time tonight, I will write a long review for you. Come on!
Well, are you still a student??
Damn, I think your description is very graphic, the details are real, and it makes people immersive. It will fit your martial arts story very well. I don't know what you think? Are you planning to sign a contract or do you want to write something as a hobby? If you want more people to see it, you still need to expose it, not to mention that martial arts should be considered a cold frequency... (Switching the perspective is still a bit unnatural sometimes...)