Haha, I made a few random comments. In fact, this article is also good, it just needs to be polished a little more.
PS: Authors can self-recommend themselves in original reviews, where there are more readers. Author's reply:
Nice to see you again, haha.
I went to Bishui because I wanted to start from the beginning and avoid detours. To be honest, there is only one chapter of the article for self-recommendation, which is really meaningless. I am also at fault.
I'll probably revise a chapter or two and then read the original version, because I rarely go.
Thanks.
I'm taking exams these days and I'm very busy. I will work hard to change it later.
Does Luo also use this MJ in Bishui? If it's not troublesome, I hope you can help me take a look after the modification.
I found it after seeing the self-recommendation post in Bishui. If the author doesn't mind, I won't be too kind.
To be honest, I don't really like it. It's a bit bland, a bit pretentious, and there's nothing particularly outstanding about the writing, plot, or characters. After reading this chapter, I have no desire to read the rest.
If you want to improve, you may wish to refer to the following suggestions:
1) Readers like to read "interesting" articles. It is best if there is a murder case, a thousand-year treasure, a royal secret, etc. At the beginning. There is definitely a highlight in your article (the old man's reaction to seeing the heroine), so you should move it to the beginning to attract readers to read on.
2) The pace is too fast. You might as well use the first chapter to exaggerate the era and scene, such as what kind of person the heroine is, what kind of family she was born in, and what she does every day. It is best to use some small things to highlight the character of the heroine. The plot of meeting the flower-picking boy and becoming a disciple can be stacked later.
3) At the beginning, you can talk about the old man's prophecy, and then jump to the heroine becoming the prince's attendant, sitting in front of the window writing or something, and while writing, you can slowly recall things like apprenticeship, youth, etc.
4) The writing style needs to be improved. You should determine the tone of this article at the beginning, whether it is light as water, gorgeous and decadent, majestic, or something else. I can see that you were a little impatient when writing the article and skipped some details, so the pace was too fast. For your article, too fast pace is a big no-no.
5) The title "Wild Weeds" is a bit petty and does not seem to match the type of article.
6) The characters and colors in that picture don't match well. Author's reply:
First of all, thank you Luo Yan for pointing this out to me.
The opinions were very detailed and reasonable, and Xiao Jin accepted them all. Will definitely adopt it as appropriate.
Regarding the pace of the article, I wanted to improve it because another previous article was criticized for being too slow. It seems that the effect is not ideal.
Is there a problem with the writing style? There is no quick way to improve it. But I will also read more good articles and study carefully.
The tone should be positioned on the deep water without waves, that is, the ups and downs under the plain narrative. Compared with Jin's current level, there is still a long way to go.
The rest of the trivia: The title is one of my favorites in the Book of Songs, but I didn't expect it to have this effect. I will consider changing again. As for the pictures, I can't find any that I like right now, so I will continue to look for them in the 4YT Photo Gallery.
Thank you again. These are very precious words of wisdom.
Have a nice day.
Haha, I made a few random comments. In fact, this article is also good, it just needs to be polished a little more. PS: Authors can self-recommend themselves in original reviews, where there are more readers. Author's reply: Nice to see you again, haha. I went to Bishui because I wanted to start from the beginning and avoid detours. To be honest, there is only one chapter of the article for self-recommendation, which is really meaningless. I am also at fault. I'll probably revise a chapter or two and then read the original version, because I rarely go. Thanks. I'm taking exams these days and I'm very busy. I will work hard to change it later. Does Luo also use this MJ in Bishui? If it's not troublesome, I hope you can help me take a look after the modification.
I found it after seeing the self-recommendation post in Bishui. If the author doesn't mind, I won't be too kind. To be honest, I don't really like it. It's a bit bland, a bit pretentious, and there's nothing particularly outstanding about the writing, plot, or characters. After reading this chapter, I have no desire to read the rest. If you want to improve, you may wish to refer to the following suggestions: 1) Readers like to read "interesting" articles. It is best if there is a murder case, a thousand-year treasure, a royal secret, etc. At the beginning. There is definitely a highlight in your article (the old man's reaction to seeing the heroine), so you should move it to the beginning to attract readers to read on. 2) The pace is too fast. You might as well use the first chapter to exaggerate the era and scene, such as what kind of person the heroine is, what kind of family she was born in, and what she does every day. It is best to use some small things to highlight the character of the heroine. The plot of meeting the flower-picking boy and becoming a disciple can be stacked later. 3) At the beginning, you can talk about the old man's prophecy, and then jump to the heroine becoming the prince's attendant, sitting in front of the window writing or something, and while writing, you can slowly recall things like apprenticeship, youth, etc. 4) The writing style needs to be improved. You should determine the tone of this article at the beginning, whether it is light as water, gorgeous and decadent, majestic, or something else. I can see that you were a little impatient when writing the article and skipped some details, so the pace was too fast. For your article, too fast pace is a big no-no. 5) The title "Wild Weeds" is a bit petty and does not seem to match the type of article. 6) The characters and colors in that picture don't match well. Author's reply: First of all, thank you Luo Yan for pointing this out to me. The opinions were very detailed and reasonable, and Xiao Jin accepted them all. Will definitely adopt it as appropriate. Regarding the pace of the article, I wanted to improve it because another previous article was criticized for being too slow. It seems that the effect is not ideal. Is there a problem with the writing style? There is no quick way to improve it. But I will also read more good articles and study carefully. The tone should be positioned on the deep water without waves, that is, the ups and downs under the plain narrative. Compared with Jin's current level, there is still a long way to go. The rest of the trivia: The title is one of my favorites in the Book of Songs, but I didn't expect it to have this effect. I will consider changing again. As for the pictures, I can't find any that I like right now, so I will continue to look for them in the 4YT Photo Gallery. Thank you again. These are very precious words of wisdom. Have a nice day.