Hufflepuffs are often called goody-goodies by some Gryffindors. Some Ravenclaws think Hufflepuffs aren't very bright, while some Slytherins think being sorted into Hufflepuff is a disgrace. And then the light of Hufflepuff appeared. So did its black sheep.
"Good little Cedric, go back and get some sleep. I promise Snape won't catch me today!"
"Sylvia, you say that every time, right up until Professor Snape catches you..."
"Ced, quick! Help me out!"
"How?"
"Just throw this Dungbomb at the old bat when he comes out in a bit. There are so many people around, no one will suspect you!"
"Tell me, why does Hermione always come first in exams?"
"Maybe she's hardworking and clever."
"What about Malfoy? He's always one or two places above me."
"I'm so worried. With a Muggle-born background like mine, how am I ever going to get a good job? I can't even outscore students from wizarding families."
"Worst comes to worst, you could collect protection money."
"Why?"
"If some Hogwarts students could avoid being bullied by you, they'd be more than happy to pay."
"Esteemed Mr. Malfoy, your hairstyle is as artfully raised as an eggshell, and your English accent always carries a strong hint of daddy issues. Oh, Merlin! Oh! How could the Malfoy family be so dazzling? Oh, Merlin! The hair gel makers will never have to worry about business again!"
Please don't flame me if you don't like it. This is written at an elementary school level. Thanks for understanding.
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If there are two female protagonists, then I am very happy that the author committed the taboo of not focusing on the topic and not distinguishing the priorities. Because everyone is reading the article just to see Said and the heroine. If you add an original female character rashly, the sense of immersion will drop a few notches. What's more, Miley's character has a bad personality to begin with, and she even bullied the heroine twice - twice!! The heroine didn't even fight back!!!
Hmm... I have a question. Harry Potter participated in the Triwizard Tournament when he was in fourth grade. The Weasley twins were two years older than Harry Potter. Since they were in sixth grade at the time, the heroine and the Weasley twins were in the same year, but Cedric was in third grade when the heroine was in first grade. So by the time of the Goblet of Fire, Cedric had already graduated for two years, which is inconsistent with the original work. Is this a big personal setup? ~?(●.●)
The heroine is indeed too stubborn and too slow. Doesn't she know and doubt her identity now? He also called Dumbledore old man. With all due respect, this is a bit rude.
Just like here, what's the crisis at Hogwarts? Why do the two families of the heroine donate money to Hogwarts? If there is no special plot development in this paragraph, you don't have to write it, and there's nothing wrong with it. But you wrote it but didn't write it clearly, which gave people a strange feeling. I thought I missed many chapters of the plot.
And from the beginning to this point, the author's writing style is indeed average and the writing is messy. I often add irrelevant things to the words and sentences, and there are many unnecessary psychological descriptions. Also, the content jumps too much, and there is no foreshadowing in the previous text - maybe the author is too imaginative. You know a lot of things yourself, but the readers don't. You should write these out (but it doesn't matter, many authors have this problem)
But I think about it afterwards, Qiu and Ginny changed their dates very quickly, Ron liked Hermione but he couldn't be with anyone in a second, and Ced could accept being with the heroine right away. He was such a bitch. After all, people have a dating culture where they get together first and then get together. It's just too fast, and the way the heroine licks the dog makes me melancholy, but luckily it doesn't end with nothing left.
In fact, the writing style is not childish, but maybe, as far as I am concerned, I think the heroine is a bit of a licker 🤦, because I am the female protagonist.
??? Brother, you are a bit of a scumbag for saying this before your last relationship has come out. You are really hanging on to the heroine.
Theo, I can only say that all girls nowadays are like Hill. I am just a girl who hasn't washed her face and doesn't do anything. Man, I'm still in bed now. Seder, you actually like your senior sister. ,,, Okay, I understand you, but I don't want to understand you, I want to curse, even though you belong to Hill in the end, it's actually Theo, and I thought it was Seid, Huo Huai,,, big, I know you can't write Seed to death, the worst thing is that they are not dance partners, and the worst thing is that there is a misunderstanding, right,,, I'm so smart,,, hahaha
Hey, his label is an upright good old man.