The Demon Lord's Everyday Pampering of His Husband

Congratulations to the author on finishing! Let me say a few words that are not complimentary. I have been following this article, and I have seen many replies from readers saying that the article has flaws and the plot is unreasonable. I didn't understand why the reader said this at first, but now that I've finished reading it, I seem to understand a little bit. Overall, it's a bit messy. First of all, the rhythm is messy: it's not compact where it should be. For example, it's coming to an end, and the protagonist can still walk for more than a hundred years... The last chapter is even more outrageous, Gong and Shou disappeared together for a hundred thousand years, and Gong himself came back and waited for Shou for a hundred thousand years... Oh my God! Just seeing the two hundred thousand years, I instantly felt that the tension of watching the finale was gone. Two hundred thousand years, I felt like I had lost my soul. It is conceivable that I have disappeared, how can I have the time to worry about whether we will meet again? Even if the author mentions it briefly, the number of two hundred thousand years is too shocking, and it completely mixes up the urgent and anxious atmosphere of the separation of attack and suffering. By the way, there was also a thousand years of stalemate with the villain. So this finale is written in a textbook-like way: "one rush, then decline, three times to exhaustion." In one hundred, one thousand, one hundred thousand years, the mace will have withered into a toothpick long ago... And things that shouldn't be compact are being compacted. In the lower realm, I have attacked various sects many times. Whether two people went together or one person took turns, almost all of them were written. It was just to unify the lower realm. When we wait for the upper realm, we come back to take revenge. This is where the foundation of attack and shou is, and where love and hatred take place. However, there is basically no positive description of the large-scale battle with the villain. It is always about the protagonist spending many years doing something, and his subordinates on the other side are constantly attacking the villain. This sentence is enough to explain it. Later, Gong Shou did not even write about the management of the fairy world. He only explained what the supporting characters were doing in one sentence, while the protagonist was responsible for walking, waiting, disappearing, and waiting again. Gong's responsibilities as Emperor of Heaven have basically disappeared. Secondly, the plot is confusing: Although the two villains Dongfang and Nangong did not officially appear until the later part of the article, they have made their presence felt from the middle of the article and constantly appeared in the form of background panels. Not only were the two of them high-ranking, they also betrayed Gong and had a mortal feud with him. Maybe it's not good to give too much spoilers in the middle of the serialization, but when you can do it in the later stages, you should give it a good reveal. However, the author casually inserted the reasons for the betrayal of these two people into the character dialogue, and finished it in a few sentences. The methods the two used to assassinate Gong were written piecemeal in the early stages of the article, and the rest were also inserted into dialogue or excessive sentences. This is the biggest foreshadowing in the whole article besides the emotional main line. It can be regarded as the main line of the plot. After all, their betrayal and conspiracy made this story possible. However, such an important plot did not receive the attention it deserved and was written casually. And because it is not written in a centralized manner, it is easy to fail to understand it, not remember it after reading it, or even miss it. This not only affects the understanding of the plot, but also makes an important highlight of the whole text dim. How many readers in the comment area said that this paragraph was confused? Some plots can be integrated into the plot and written separately, and used as easter eggs for readers to discover; but some plots should be written concentratedly, so that they can be prioritized and the plot can be clearer. There are also the true identities of attack and shou, which are sometimes one way and another time. In the whole text, both sides have changed 5 or 6 times each. From the beginning of the Demon Lord and the male favorite, to the Demon Lord and the Son of God, to the Demon Tree and the Phoenix, to the Emperor and the Heavenly Phoenix, and finally to the tree outside the boundary and the Soul of the Galaxy, and then back to becoming the Emperor and Queen. After this circle, the author's explanation is not clear, but I always feel that the recognition is a bit insufficient, as if he has transitioned to another identity inadvertently. Like this kind of identity that changes many times, and both parties change multiple times, each identity is still very important and closely related to the plot. The plot even revolves around the identity, so naturally it should be described as deeply as possible. But regarding the change of identity, just like the plot of Dongfang and Nangong betraying the protagonist mentioned above, it is often integrated into dialogue or other plots, as if written carelessly and incidentally. Speaking of which, I feel like the author likes this way of writing? Is it a deliberate attempt to avoid too deliberate description? But I don't know what other people think. Anyway, I was so dizzy at the end that I just broke the pot and threw it away. If they (identities) want to change, just change it. I won't remember it again and again. There will definitely be trouble later. This is because the author did not write enough features about each identity change of attack and shou, leaving readers with a vague understanding of the plot. They can still recall the change once or twice. If it happens too many times, won't it become chaotic? Just like a rope, if it is wound and knotted regularly, it can weave beautiful patterns, but if it is irregular, it can only become a mess that cannot be untangled. In the end, it was a mess. The author may think that sweet writing means making sweets from the beginning to the end, so he can make sweets all the way. It is really a story that does not distinguish between time, place and occasion. The ending is better. Many times in the past, we have reached critical junctures. The protagonist is about to suffer and get hurt. If we don't solve the dilemma quickly, we will still fight each other. The author knows that nothing will happen, but the reader does not. In other words, readers also know that after all, this is a HE article, and the attack and reception will definitely not die. But this does not mean that it can be unlimited. From the author's point of view, it is called "fat sugar". From other people's point of view, it is called being in love anytime and anywhere, and it cannot be controlled... Maybe the author wants to write a personality protagonist who does not care about other people's opinions and only cares about his own love. But, when it's time to get nervous, you should still think about business. After all, a heavenly emperor or a heavenly phoenix has such a high level, but they can't even control their desires. How can readers sincerely agree with the author's lofty identity? Just like a student who makes such low-level mistakes as wrong decimal points, wrong spellings, and forgetting participles of English verbs. If he claims to be the top scorer in the college entrance examination or the Olympiad champion, who will really believe it? Moreover, this way of writing is also a hindrance to the reading experience, just like a few years ago when the Radio/Television Bureau did not ban commercials in TV dramas, the feeling of being interrupted every time you saw the key points was the same. How about saying "nothing is more valuable than more"? Of course, the sugar in sweet articles does not need to be particularly refined, just don't overuse it, and this article is a bit overused in sugar. It would be great if the author could use one-tenth of the words sprinkled with sugar to supplement the main plot that is written in pieces. The above is my opinion. Seeing that the author is preparing to write a new article, it is still a sweet pet route. I hope that it can be slightly improved to make the article more focused and the plot more reasonable.

I am so speechless at this ending. Why do I have to stay in the Milky Way for 200,000 years? The author's plot was too extensive and the writing power was a bit unsustainable. The ending made me feel...

The first part is fine, but the later part is written more and more hastily. As several readers have said, it will wither after seeing a hundred thousand years. There is no need to draw such a big pie. It is really unnecessary to draw such a big pie and you can't eat such a big world view.

The author's ideas are quite good, but the backend is a bit messy. The tree outside the boundary and Tianhe Soul were rushed from the beginning and a bit unfinished.

The sprinkles throughout were awesome! ! But the front is so sweet, and the back is holding back a big move! ! I feel so heartbroken when I see it... By the way... Can you please stop being jealous of Gong La in the future... It makes me feel sad for him... Especially when I meet a brother who controls my brother... I personally don't like my brother's control... So to me, his brother was the best before he was resurrected! I can just stop watching 23333 if I check it later ~ Overall, the front part is great! Very sweet! I don't feel tired at all! !

After watching it for so long, I feel a little dizzy.

Haha, I feel dizzy too... But it's still pretty good-looking!

In this historic moment, in this great moment, author, have you seen my sincere heart?

The writing is smooth and the ideas are broad. I really like it!

I felt a little dizzy after reading it.