Leng Zhuoyue: "If you're in the mood, why not join me for a riverside gathering, drinking beneath the moon and admiring the moonlit water and the moon reflected in it?"
Wen Miao: "You're getting smoother and smoother behind the wheel... Take me along for a ride, experienced driver!"
Apple has a lot of drama 233, a little immature, but very cute haha
The heroine's character is still very cute, and the plot is also good, but the details and language need to be worked on, okay?
I watched it again, give me a hug
His literary talent is pretty good~ Let me praise you first_(:з∠)_
Qing Mimi's little suggestion: The description of the details can be more detailed, which will make the picture more immersive.
The plot changes are a bit anxious. For example: Chapter 1: Ling Feng just woke up for a few seconds, and after saying a few words to the heroine, he agreed to take a strange girl around... Uh-huh... [Face covering] Yes, it's a little weird. After all, in ancient times, men and women walking together rashly were not so casual_(:з∠)_
This is just a small amount, it's okay, hehe
Keep up the good work
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The writing is very good, the sentences are relaxed and comfortable, and it makes people feel comfortable.
I have a small comment, Wenwen's pace is too fast.
The following is my opinion, please listen to it as appropriate.
Personally, I think we can start with a single chapter about the encounter between Xiao Yueyue and Xiao Yao, and then describe in detail the words and intonation of the first meeting, from shallow to deep. After all, no one will be gentle to a stranger right away, and there can be a process of attitude change. The first task is almost in the middle of the third chapter, and the pace is really fast. I hope that more attention will be paid to the details and the description will be expanded!
Come on!
There are no big problems with soft conditions such as writing style, but... It feels like the plot has no logic???
It feels like the ancient style is interspersed with a strong sense of modernity⊙▽⊙There is a place where the heroine said that her shoes were missing, and then she jumped directly to other places. It felt a bit abrupt here, but I can see that it was the thing that Leng Zuiyue kicked, right?
Every time your author has something to say, it's so interesting, hahaha
Very interesting! The heroine is very lively and noisy, so I have already accepted it.
Wow, it's time for an update! ⊙▽⊙
Apple has a lot of drama 233, a little immature, but very cute haha
The heroine's character is still very cute, and the plot is also good, but the details and language need to be worked on, okay?
I watched it again, give me a hug His literary talent is pretty good~ Let me praise you first_(:з∠)_ Qing Mimi's little suggestion: The description of the details can be more detailed, which will make the picture more immersive. The plot changes are a bit anxious. For example: Chapter 1: Ling Feng just woke up for a few seconds, and after saying a few words to the heroine, he agreed to take a strange girl around... Uh-huh... [Face covering] Yes, it's a little weird. After all, in ancient times, men and women walking together rashly were not so casual_(:з∠)_ This is just a small amount, it's okay, hehe Keep up the good work
I'm from the forum The writing is very good, the sentences are relaxed and comfortable, and it makes people feel comfortable. I have a small comment, Wenwen's pace is too fast. The following is my opinion, please listen to it as appropriate. Personally, I think we can start with a single chapter about the encounter between Xiao Yueyue and Xiao Yao, and then describe in detail the words and intonation of the first meeting, from shallow to deep. After all, no one will be gentle to a stranger right away, and there can be a process of attitude change. The first task is almost in the middle of the third chapter, and the pace is really fast. I hope that more attention will be paid to the details and the description will be expanded! Come on!
There are no big problems with soft conditions such as writing style, but... It feels like the plot has no logic???
It feels like the ancient style is interspersed with a strong sense of modernity⊙▽⊙There is a place where the heroine said that her shoes were missing, and then she jumped directly to other places. It felt a bit abrupt here, but I can see that it was the thing that Leng Zuiyue kicked, right?
Every time your author has something to say, it's so interesting, hahaha
Very interesting! The heroine is very lively and noisy, so I have already accepted it.