The Fox Girl of the Li Family

After reading about ten chapters, I think it should be a story about the growth of a little fox. Overall, the story is told fairly smoothly. From what I have seen, the character of the heroine is a relatively innocent and lively image, which is quite likable. However, I also found some problems at the same time. I just want to talk about it, and I hope the author doesn't mind. First of all, the male protagonist of this article should be the Taoist priest Su Gengyi in the copywriting, right? However, after reading ten chapters, there is no trace of the male protagonist. Of course, it can be said that this article is slow to gain popularity, but it is best to indicate it in the copywriting, otherwise it will be easy to become impatient. Personally speaking, the copywriting is a bit bland. If it is written by a newcomer, the copywriting should be more attractive. The author's copywriting simply tells a story and is not particularly attractive. There is a big problem in the first chapter. First-person writing can easily make people feel immersed in it, but in fact, it is a very difficult kind of writing. The most important thing is to avoid opening the God's perspective. It is best to keep writing from one perspective, especially in the introduction of the first chapter. The switch between the first person and the third person perspective is very abrupt, and it is cut abruptly by the dividing line, and it is switched more than once. Did the author find that the difference in clicks between the first chapter and the second chapter is a bit big, almost a cliff-like drop. Although the clicks gradually decreased later, the magnitude slowed down. The second problem is that there are too many elements in the author's article. From the perspective of the first ten chapters, it includes a series of factors such as palace fighting, martial arts, immortality, ghosts, gods, monsters, etc. In fact, if there are too many elements mixed in one article, it will not work. For example, most immortality articles only distinguish between immortals and mortals, but this article is divided into mortals, mortals who know martial arts, immortals, monsters, ghosts, and gods and the underworld are mentioned. This will actually make it very confusing. In addition, in fact, martial arts themes, especially romantic martial arts, can be said to be a relatively cold theme in recent years. Unless the writing is particularly excellent, it may attract readers' attention, but generally speaking, it is very likely to be blocked. The author puts this copy map in the first part, so he must be prepared that there will not be many readers. Also, the author hopes to think more about the words and sentences, such as: "Shu Lang's long eyebrows", "I was caught off guard and my body flew into the sky", and when expressing the sentences, it must be combined with the characters. For example, it is normal for a rough lady to howl like a killing pig, but the word "howling like a killing pig" comes from the mouth of a concubine, which feels very inconsistent. An article, especially an ancient style article, should not make people feel inconsistent. You should also pay attention to some specific vocabulary. For example, the word "San Guan zone" appeared in the late Qing Dynasty. Xiaozhu comes from Jin Yi's "Palace Maid Tan Lu", which is the title of the beauty waiting to be selected or the low-level concubine in the Qing palace drama. These, especially the little master, can be said to be exclusive words, which generally only appear in the context of the Qing Palace. They appeared in the first chapter, and it didn't feel very good. The author has something to say, which is a good place to communicate with readers. But dear, I know that some authors have left you a message asking you to leave a blank line. Please don't say what the author has to say in every chapter, okay? It's really a bit embarrassing. Although I have picked some faults, they are all from a personal perspective. I hope the author does not mind. As a newcomer, my writing is already very good, and I wish you continued success.

Oh my god, Xiao Su is so good at it, Qing Qing is simply eaten to death.

>_<Woooooooooooooooo cute

Hou Kang, you bitch, you are so angry with me.

Xiao Su is so good ?_?? ?

Does Xiaosu not want Qingqing to separate from him? Kswl

What a shame, what a mean man

This Hou Kang is so annoying =Dan= bullying our little fox

The owner of this light bulb is so annoying (??_?`)

The interaction between the little fox and the Taoist priest is so cute >_<