The Tale of the Pampered Beauty

Not bad, keep up the good work~~

It's very nice, the heroine's physique. . . . The future life will be awesome

The plot develops quickly and the rhythm is tight. If you like it, it means you will follow the article, okay?

I was attracted by the title of the article. I poked in and took a look, and it turned out to be my cup of tea...

The article lacks a sense of immersion, that is, is the entry point of this article the male protagonist's perspective or the female protagonist's perspective? In the first chapter, the entire introduction is from the perspective of the emperor, telling how the emperor loves the heroine deeply, but the text introduces the story of another man and the heroine, which will make the readers confused, like "Who is the protagonist? The emperor is very good, why does the princess not like him yet, but she likes Yue?" And thus abandons the article. Let's talk about the character settings of the three protagonists. The first is the emperor. This character is actually quite successful. The image of a loyal dog is ready to emerge. However, in ancient times, the eleven-year age difference was a very normal concept. Why should we deliberately set an insurmountable obstacle in the article? It stands to reason that the emperor The emperor should have enough confidence in himself. Such a small problem should not arise when pursuing the little princess. He should not be timid or have such random thoughts. The only thing that prevents him from being with the little princess is objective reasons, not these subjective factors. Speaking of the princess, the character of the princess seems very unpleasant in the introduction at the beginning. She is simple, ignorant, full of fantasies about the outside world, and she is also a bit cold-blooded. How could she not have any feelings for someone who has been caring for her for so many years? I think this point will not be given to readers, but will only be greatly reduced from the impression points. Returning to the reasons why the emperor could not be with the princess, there are the following points: the princess may have witnessed the cruelty of the young emperor when she was young (of course, it may be that the young emperor had to do it in order to seize the throne), so it left a deep imprint in the princess's mind, and then excluded the emperor; or add ten years to the emperor's grade. After all, there are The age difference allows readers to have a process of adapting. The princess only regards the emperor as her elder, so naturally she cannot like him, which is understandable; and then let's talk about Yue. The character creation is very different from the emperor. Maybe due to preconceived reasons, Yue gives people the impression of being a cold-blooded person who does not care about the beauty and beauty, and it is impossible to like him at all, okay? Finally, let's talk about the first three chapters. The coherence is not very strong. There are too many things described, and the subdivision of the characters is simply not enough. The first chapter should be described from the perspective of the little princess. Don't write about the emperor throughout. If the author has decided that Yue Lai will be the male protagonist, then please directly write about the little princess's affairs in the first chapter. The first chapter is the best time to give the reader the first impression. If you give the emperor such a big advantage, don't you let the male protagonist flip the table? The most important thing to remind you is to never let the heroine eat from the bowl and look at the pot. If she has no feelings for the emperor, please don't mention Brother Mao from time to time. I feel this will be a lightning point. Also, don't have any physical contact with the hero when you are together for the first time. After all, readers still like to see the pure heroine of White Lotus! Having said so much, I hope you don't mind. I feel that after reading so much, I still want to see the relationship between the heroine and the emperor. It should be more attractive than the current plot, and the emperor is really well described as a loving and loyal dog. He is one of the most popular male protagonists now.

Momoda, wait for the update (づ￣ 3￣)づ

Hahaha, take a few days off... I was wrong, I have a holiday on the 24th. I may revise the article on that day and try to make up for what I haven't updated in the past few days.

Hahaha, take a few days off... I was wrong, I have a holiday on the 24th. I may revise the article on that day and try to make up for what I haven't updated in the past few days.

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