[Content warnings]: The female lead gets a golden finger at first, then loses it. All pairings are 1v1; there are characters who turn gay and characters who turn straight. No angst, multiple couples, a little explicit content, both BG and BL. If that's not your thing, don't read!
[Literary blurb]
As a child, she was born to a distinguished family, with her older brother and masters to rely on.
When she first entered the secular world, she had no ties holding her back. She smiled at the mortal world, free and carefree.
Then disaster struck one day, and she lost everything.
Fortunately, some people never abandoned her.
[Lighthearted blurb]
When a straight girl falls into a crowd of gay men, she is inevitably turned gay herself.
She later realizes that wherever she goes, she's a giant third wheel. From then on, she sets out on a one-way mission to turn the gay men straight.
A certain man looked at her with disdain. "You know I don't like women."
A certain straight girl swayed her hips coquettishly. "How do you know you don't like it if you haven't tried it?"
One day later
The straight girl: "You said you don't like women."
The man: "But what if I want to try now?"
P.S. I've been busy with school lately and may not have time to write. I'll continue when I can.
[Title of Work] Xuantian Sect JQ Chronicle AuthorPeach Flavored Cookies CommentatorThe squirrel next door Number of chapters read: 20 Hello author! After reading the author's book, I also found that the author's imagination is indeed good, and the story ideas and content are very attractive. However, perhaps because the author did not pay attention to some key issues in writing, the story you wrote was not fully reflected in your words, and the readers were not able to feel the center and emotion you wanted to express. Next, Squirrel will communicate with the author based on some of the problems I found in the article, hoping to give the author some help. First of all, the first and biggest problem of the author's writing is that the expression is not in place, the description is too abstract, and the description is not accurate enough. It is difficult for readers to connect to your story from your characters and words. Let me give you an example. There is this passage in Chapter 6: At this time, Wu Zuo interjected at an inappropriate time, "Are you okay? It's not a separation of life and death, why are you doing this? Really." Wu Zuo hated that kid who looked at her as if he had snatched his toy, which made her extremely uncomfortable. Xiao Feiyang didn't look bad, "Old witch, it's done." He was so angry that he was filled with smoke, "What? Old witch? Look at how old I am and how I look like an old witch! What are you talking nonsense about, you little devil!" "My mother said that a woman without beauty in her heart is still an old witch no matter how beautiful she is on the outside." "You, you, you, see if I don't teach you a lesson today, kid!" Kuai finally broke out, while Xiao Feiyang looked like he was not afraid of death, which made him even more angry. In this plot, I obviously felt difficulty while reading, and my feelings about the characters were unreal. Apart from some minor problems, such as: the name "Nothing" is misleading, the whole narrative felt particularly messy. It was difficult for me to understand what the author was mainly talking about and where the center was from this plot. As an author, what we have to do is to use the simplest words to express the story so that readers can understand the ideas and themes we want readers to feel in the story. From the author Jun's article, I found that you did not consider that a character's identity will limit some terms and inner expressions when he speaks. "No" is a master, right? She should have adult thoughts and adult generosity, but in the author Jun's words, I feel that she is like a shrewd little girl. She always feels uncomfortable and angry when being looked at by a child. How can she look like a master? If what a character says or does is too far out of the scope of his age and identity, it will cause the character to become distorted and unreal. Not only this one character, but also several characters who appeared in the scene at the beginning of the story where the heroine was robbed are like this. I hope the author will pay more attention to this aspect. Then, the author did not do a good job in changing the perspective when expressing. In this plot, there are only these two characters. When they communicate, they constantly switch the perspective of the characters. It does not feel particularly coherent. What I see from the text is not joy, but escape. The messy perspective seriously affects the reading experience. The author should remember: 1. The point of view should be consistent with what the reader wants to see. 2. The point of view should stay on the character or object with the strongest contradiction. 3. When converting the perspective, make sure that the effect will be better after the conversion. I tried changing it to see if it looks better: "Are you okay?" Wu Zai said suddenly and inappropriately, "Xiao Xichen is just going to get treatment. It's not like we can't see each other again. We will come back when the illness is cured. Why do we have to make it look like we are parting from life or death?" Xiao Feiyang turned around and said goodbye in a cold voice, "Old witch, you're done." "Old witch?" After hearing this, she was stunned for a moment, then she raised her mouth slightly and asked with a gentle smile: "Haha, Xiao Feiyang, look at me, my face is like a peach blossom, and my lips are as red as jade, how am I old? How am I like a witch again?" Xiao Feiyang tilted his head, without even looking at her, and said without a trace of respect in his tone: "My mother once said that a woman with an unbeautiful heart, no matter how beautiful she looks, is just a witch in human skin." "You, you..." His anger was gone and he was speechless for a moment. In the revised article, there may be many places that are slightly different from the characters and characteristics that the author wants to express, but it looks clearer and more vivid, making it easier to incorporate the characters and stories in the novel. Then there is another problem, that is, the author likes to write some of his personal feelings and inner thoughts into the article. The author needs to understand that we write books to show readers, and a lot of your inner self-absorption may not be what readers want to read. We can only let readers understand the pictures and feelings you want to express through stories. Then, I saw from the words of the author that the author seems to be opening two books, and it seems that it is not guaranteed to be updated every day. In this way, Squirrel personally feels that if there is no guarantee of daily updates, it is best to open only one book, because if a reader likes one of your books, not both of them will be liked. If you break it every day, do you think that reader will continue to follow it? There are a lot of online articles nowadays. If you stop updating, readers will basically abandon the article and look for other books. Finally, if the author likes to write books and has the dream of writing, then stick to it. Your brain is good and has great potential, but your foundation is a little poor. I will give you six words: read more, think more, and write more. Go to our Rising Star Forum to read more information when you have time. There is a lot of basic writing information there that is very suitable for you. As long as you work hard, I believe you will become a god one day. Come on!!!
What did Ruoyu say in Xuanyuan Palace, which seems to have played a big role in the marriage between the two countries?
As a little baby, I'm really powerless, I can't even speak.
It's so joyful to read the text. Such children who are born with good luck will most likely have a bad fate later on.
If you ignore the fairy brother, there will definitely be bigger troubles.
The heroine is smart, and now she can only wait and see what happens.
Where will the swaddled baby fly to?
Haha, what's the point of patting the baby on the back if she doesn't cry, and pinching her. The heroine is so upset
It feels pretty good. Keep up the good work. I will come and visit often. Let's communicate more~
Very interesting =￣ω￣= Already bookmarked, hope to visit again and work together