Reborn to Spoil You Again

Um (⊙o⊙)..., An ancient dynasty in the future world? My dear, you have such a rich imagination, but it's quite beautiful. Come on ↖(^ω^)↗

The women of the heroine and the hero have never fought for favor! The male protagonist has the memory of having sex with another woman in his previous life, which is so disturbing!

The first chapter reminded me of the deposed general Don't cry in front of my grave, it will dirty my path of reincarnation.

What a waste of naming [hehehehe]

Is the male lead a virgin? Let me ask first.

The beginning looks good, but the writing is broken.

Sofa Throw yourself into your arms 233 The layout is a bit tight for the app_(:з∠)_

Here is a long review of The Tide of Bird Feather Shop. First of all, the cover is very beautiful and can capture readers' attention. The copywriting is slightly lacking, but it expresses the main line of this article very clearly. But there is room for improvement. The first chapter is the memories and explanations of the previous life. But I personally think the author could have written better. Judging from the author's description, this one feels more like ancient times, so I suddenly saw a hail of bullets and felt that I had written it wrong, and then I recalled that this book seemed to be a future mecha novel. I think it can be made more desolate when the country is subjugated, and then it can be written more about Guren's contribution to the male protagonist. I think the author can write the first chapter in more detail and better, and explain more of Guren's deep feelings. In the second chapter, did the sentence "It was a sunny day and a thunder fell from the sky" suddenly appear? I think this sentence was a failure when I was more serious in the past. Also, I think the dash in front of the sentence "a thing that does not believe in ghosts and gods" is unnecessary. The tone at the end suddenly became a little joyful, and I felt it was really sudden. If this article is about joy, I still recommend not to have joy so quickly. After all, I have just died and been reborn, and my heart is still very heavy. Most importantly, this transition is too abrupt. On the surface, this is the "royal family despite the sunset", right? It must be a typo. Chapter 3 is mostly about introduction background, with very little interaction, but to be honest, it is a bit boring and does not bring out the cuteness of this article. The first three chapters of an article are crucial and are the key to retaining readers. But apart from introducing the background and past lives, the first three chapters basically have no real-life scenes. Judging from the copywriting, the focus of this article is on pampering. I think we can first write about the male protagonist's love for the female protagonist and the female protagonist's love for the male protagonist to attract readers first, and then intersperse memories and introductions appropriately. Generally speaking, there is too little interaction in the first three chapters, and the switch between seriousness and joy is a bit stiff. Chapter 4: Not everyone knows about Tengu Nose, so I suggest you replace it. Would I say that I didn't realize what it meant when I first saw it? Also, don't blame me for treating you as a tribute to those chickens. What does that monkey mean... And the heroine, please take it seriously, otherwise you will really think it is a beautiful article. Seeing the cerebral blood vessels behind the pupils in Chapter 5 is really scary and not beautiful at all, really. I would rather you say it is like a clear blue and transparent shallow sea than see the cerebral blood vessels. Although there was some interaction in this chapter, I really wasn't attracted by the chapters. I think this is a bigger problem. After reading the first five chapters, I didn't really want to read the rest. To be honest, I didn't see the personalities of the male and female protagonists. I would rather the female protagonist be a tomboy and the male protagonist be a hands-off shopkeeper. This would be better than the current one. The character's personality must be highlighted, otherwise it will not be remembered at all. Next I will summarize: 1. There is room for improvement in the copywriting. 2. The overall background introduces too many past lives and needs to be revised. Try to reasonably place the background past lives in the appropriate present life. 3. The background setting is both ancient and futuristic and needs to be improved again. 4. The characters do not have very obvious personalities. 5. The conversion between serious and happy writing is too rigid. 6. The first three chapters are not attractive enough and need to add more cuteness and interaction. 7. There are some problems with the description in some places. It is recommended that the author read it again after finishing writing and correct typos and loopholes. The above is Tide's advice to Da Da. It may sound a bit unpleasant, but I sincerely hope that I can make significant progress, and then my collection will rise quickly, and I can enter V as soon as possible.

I'm used to Jinjiang's segmentation method when watching QAQ. I'm dazzled by the huge segmentation.

So selfish, using a country's thousand-year fortune to satisfy his own selfish desires! ?