In a magical world, a prophecy made by the elders turns a girl who should have been happy into a sacrifice. For the sake of this so-called prophecy, she loses family, friendship, and even love. Can her love last? She struggles against the fate laid out for her, but can her life really change? I wrote this a long time ago, when I was still young and my writing wasn’t very good. Read with caution!
Here I come! Look how obedient I am. A while ago, I have been looking for magical novels with female protagonists. Come on! My shoulders hurt a lot, and I still can't stand reading novels on the computer. I'll go to an Internet cafe tomorrow and read some. I said it lazily. Sister Ling, please call me Sister Ling. I like the word "ling". Sister Ling won't mind, right? I really can't sit still. The watch hits me, I am a good boy. Elf, does Sister Ling also have a soft spot for a few words? Hey hey hey. I prefer the demon version, the fallen wings are beautiful. If Sister Ling adds a new character, how about letting Luoluo be a demon girl? Huhu, I want silver hair and silver eyes, and a pair of big black wings, so handsome. OK? Promise to pull it! Otherwise, people will be very pitiful. I really, really like eating chicken wings! Hey-hey. Author's reply:
Haha, how about you wait for the next article? There will be no new characters appearing in this article
Support author reply:
Thank you~~~O(∩_∩)O~
Come on! The author of Sanhua replied:
Haha, okay
Come on! Come on! The author who will definitely win the prize replies:
I'd like to lend you some good words~~
The name "" really suits him. Others gave him a bad beating and he couldn't go out for several days, haha. I know a lot about this fantasy genre and I don't particularly like it, but I can find typos for you and give you points. I hope you don't mind. The author's reply:
It doesn't matter, my article was indeed a failure~~
I will change it as I say, and now I present the revised version... The author's reply:
Thank you~~Thank you very much~~Handshake~~
Already deleted~~
At the beginning of the book review, I must apologize to the author. I am really sorry. Due to a misunderstanding, I wrote a previous book review that was full of loopholes...
The theme of the fantasy novel competition is: fantasy and love. These two elements are full of dreamy colors. When they are intertwined, blended and penetrated, they will definitely paint a beautiful and magical picture. So under the influence of this clue, the picture scroll unfolded to us.
I don't really like reading fantasy novels with a strong Western flavor, but I personally think your article is quite interesting. After reading your article, my general feeling is: the text is written in an orderly manner, and although it is narrated in the first person, it has a sense of intimacy when reading it, which is commendable. Maybe your writing style is still a little immature, but when I see this unburdened sentence, it seems like drinking a cup of rain flower tea. The light tea aroma overflows from the throat, and it has its own unique charm.
I read anyone's articles with appreciation, so I never evaluate the pros and cons of the storyline. After all, people are different and have many differences in thinking. Everyone's stories are carefully conceived by themselves. I am not qualified and do not want to comment on them. So, let me put aside the storyline and make a brief review.
Your characters and plot are all good, but the overall structure still needs polishing. I can roughly imagine such a grand world that you wrote. Comparing your description with my impression, I will clearly feel that your description is too sloppy. Since you have determined that the story will take place in such a background, you should write it in full, depict the grandeur of that world, and make the atmosphere more solemn. In addition, when I read your story, I felt like the demons and gods... Were like a family. I have to say that the society you constructed is too harmonious. I say this not because I personally like to see wars and disputes, but I think since we are from different races, wouldn't it be weird if there were no disputes? These illusory races are people's imagination. You can design them however you want, as long as you can make them reasonable and impeccable. In this world, there is often no absolute harmony, so we must always advocate and create it. The same must be true for these different races. Being as close as a family and living in peace can only be an ideal, but it is not easy to realize it. Different species will have different needs, which will inevitably lead to conflicts, especially the gods and demons. Literally, we also know that they are incompatible opposites, so I don't fully accept your idea. If you must continue this harmonious world, it is not impossible, but it is inevitable that people who think the same as me will come to make things difficult. In order to avoid this unexpected situation, please consider and deal with it carefully.
Another point to add: I hope you can delete the content in brackets in the article. If you think it is very necessary, then reorganize the sentences and integrate them into the article. The brackets you add as supplements will destroy the structure of the article and give people a fragmented feeling. This will make people think that your thinking is confusing, and the integrity of the article will be greatly reduced.
The above remarks are only my own. Regardless of praise or criticism, I hope that the author can create better works...
Finally, I wish you the best in this competition and achieve good results! (Close the fan and exit quickly~~)
Policy Book Review Group Xiaoyue Yingxuan
Author's reply:
Well, accept it, this article is indeed a bit sloppy~~The author's reply:
Thank you very much for writing such a long and insightful review, thank you~~~%>_<%
Dear author... How should I put it? I am in a state of confusion now. I will not ask for your forgiveness. I am really hopeless. I wrote it without understanding it. You must delete it and I will repost it at noon tomorrow. Thank you~~~The author's reply:
I know~~O(∩_∩)O~
I was wrong, I'm guilty... I'm really sorry - - Just delete it... I'll revise it... Those who scored 5555555 can be deleted and I'll post it tomorrow... Author's reply:
It doesn't matter~~
Poor Feng Da, classmate Xiaoyue downstairs. . . They are participating in fantasy competitions. . It's a misunderstanding. . . Author's reply:
Haha
Here I come! Look how obedient I am. A while ago, I have been looking for magical novels with female protagonists. Come on! My shoulders hurt a lot, and I still can't stand reading novels on the computer. I'll go to an Internet cafe tomorrow and read some. I said it lazily. Sister Ling, please call me Sister Ling. I like the word "ling". Sister Ling won't mind, right? I really can't sit still. The watch hits me, I am a good boy. Elf, does Sister Ling also have a soft spot for a few words? Hey hey hey. I prefer the demon version, the fallen wings are beautiful. If Sister Ling adds a new character, how about letting Luoluo be a demon girl? Huhu, I want silver hair and silver eyes, and a pair of big black wings, so handsome. OK? Promise to pull it! Otherwise, people will be very pitiful. I really, really like eating chicken wings! Hey-hey. Author's reply: Haha, how about you wait for the next article? There will be no new characters appearing in this article
Support author reply: Thank you~~~O(∩_∩)O~
Come on! The author of Sanhua replied: Haha, okay
Come on! Come on! The author who will definitely win the prize replies: I'd like to lend you some good words~~
The name "" really suits him. Others gave him a bad beating and he couldn't go out for several days, haha. I know a lot about this fantasy genre and I don't particularly like it, but I can find typos for you and give you points. I hope you don't mind. The author's reply: It doesn't matter, my article was indeed a failure~~
I will change it as I say, and now I present the revised version... The author's reply: Thank you~~Thank you very much~~Handshake~~ Already deleted~~
At the beginning of the book review, I must apologize to the author. I am really sorry. Due to a misunderstanding, I wrote a previous book review that was full of loopholes... The theme of the fantasy novel competition is: fantasy and love. These two elements are full of dreamy colors. When they are intertwined, blended and penetrated, they will definitely paint a beautiful and magical picture. So under the influence of this clue, the picture scroll unfolded to us. I don't really like reading fantasy novels with a strong Western flavor, but I personally think your article is quite interesting. After reading your article, my general feeling is: the text is written in an orderly manner, and although it is narrated in the first person, it has a sense of intimacy when reading it, which is commendable. Maybe your writing style is still a little immature, but when I see this unburdened sentence, it seems like drinking a cup of rain flower tea. The light tea aroma overflows from the throat, and it has its own unique charm. I read anyone's articles with appreciation, so I never evaluate the pros and cons of the storyline. After all, people are different and have many differences in thinking. Everyone's stories are carefully conceived by themselves. I am not qualified and do not want to comment on them. So, let me put aside the storyline and make a brief review. Your characters and plot are all good, but the overall structure still needs polishing. I can roughly imagine such a grand world that you wrote. Comparing your description with my impression, I will clearly feel that your description is too sloppy. Since you have determined that the story will take place in such a background, you should write it in full, depict the grandeur of that world, and make the atmosphere more solemn. In addition, when I read your story, I felt like the demons and gods... Were like a family. I have to say that the society you constructed is too harmonious. I say this not because I personally like to see wars and disputes, but I think since we are from different races, wouldn't it be weird if there were no disputes? These illusory races are people's imagination. You can design them however you want, as long as you can make them reasonable and impeccable. In this world, there is often no absolute harmony, so we must always advocate and create it. The same must be true for these different races. Being as close as a family and living in peace can only be an ideal, but it is not easy to realize it. Different species will have different needs, which will inevitably lead to conflicts, especially the gods and demons. Literally, we also know that they are incompatible opposites, so I don't fully accept your idea. If you must continue this harmonious world, it is not impossible, but it is inevitable that people who think the same as me will come to make things difficult. In order to avoid this unexpected situation, please consider and deal with it carefully. Another point to add: I hope you can delete the content in brackets in the article. If you think it is very necessary, then reorganize the sentences and integrate them into the article. The brackets you add as supplements will destroy the structure of the article and give people a fragmented feeling. This will make people think that your thinking is confusing, and the integrity of the article will be greatly reduced. The above remarks are only my own. Regardless of praise or criticism, I hope that the author can create better works... Finally, I wish you the best in this competition and achieve good results! (Close the fan and exit quickly~~) Policy Book Review Group Xiaoyue Yingxuan Author's reply: Well, accept it, this article is indeed a bit sloppy~~The author's reply: Thank you very much for writing such a long and insightful review, thank you~~~%>_<%
Dear author... How should I put it? I am in a state of confusion now. I will not ask for your forgiveness. I am really hopeless. I wrote it without understanding it. You must delete it and I will repost it at noon tomorrow. Thank you~~~The author's reply: I know~~O(∩_∩)O~
I was wrong, I'm guilty... I'm really sorry - - Just delete it... I'll revise it... Those who scored 5555555 can be deleted and I'll post it tomorrow... Author's reply: It doesn't matter~~
Poor Feng Da, classmate Xiaoyue downstairs. . . They are participating in fantasy competitions. . It's a misunderstanding. . . Author's reply: Haha