After reading this book for so long, I finally found one worth reading. The author will update it quickly, but he must ensure the quality. Updates are in progress...
Jiayoujiayoujiayou
It's very well written. I look forward to more articles. I'll keep up with the updates every day. Oh well, I won't say anymore. The boss is here. I'll continue reading after get off work... Come on, Yisheng.
In fact, I read this article before it was revised. The writing was unfamiliar at the beginning, and the sentences were not very accurate in portraying the characters and scenery. The writing was not very clear. There was only one result and no reason. When I looked at it, I could only say, "Why is this happening?" Instead of "Oh, so that's how it is." It's just that the middle one is missing. A brief introduction: it is not easy to write this kind of article. It requires a lot of historical knowledge. I also read through books and wrote it virtually based on the situation at that time. However, there is nothing exciting in the writing. I can't close the web page and I can still recall the exciting aspects of the novel I just read. There is no one. A single point can attract people. It may also be because the author is not experienced enough in writing novels and cannot grasp a wonderful point. When describing it, the character characteristics are not clearly described. The novel relies on the author's writing description and then adds the reader's own imagination to create a picture of his own. However, The author's description seems very stiff. It is a character description that is forced into the character's activities. It is not a very rounded description of the character. He can use more scenes to describe the inner dynamics of the character. Even the bulingbuling of the eyes must be vividly written.
Now that you have revised and adjusted everything you wrote before, it is indeed very good. The content is much smoother than before, and you have added a lot of outstanding features in the character description. When it comes to describing, it is not abrupt at all. The character description is also very smooth and delicate, allowing readers to feel the psychological dynamics of the male protagonist at that time, and smoothly eliciting an idea from the male protagonist.
Regarding the choice of plot, don't you think the progress from meeting to acquaintance is a bit too fast? No matter how good the person is, they will not fall in love too early. Author, you have only written a few articles now, and the seeds of love have already begun to rise (this is just me Personal opinion, I personally feel that this progress is too fast), you have written a lot of things about the two of them who have been ambiguous for a long time, and they have been ambiguous for a long time. If a cauliflower falls down, there will be a person who looks at each other, and the affection is endless, but does not reveal it. Can you, the author, Write something that is innovative, eye-catching, and memorable after reading it. It is best to add something else in the middle. Don't always have scenes that increase the relationship between the two of them. It will be boring to watch too many scenes of ambiguous scenes. For example, it would also be good to write some scenes of the male protagonist's previous life. , Or the female protagonist goes out alone with her friends to live a very ordinary life. The male protagonist should not be too naive. The gods above can still come down to earth to play secretly. The male protagonist is a big man and cannot be a mother. If you are a mother, you will suffer. This is not a BL story.
It's better to add more other interesting chapters. Too many rules will make you tired, and you will also get tired of eating the same flavor of food all the time. Add some legendary color. I haven't seen anything legendary or fantasy yet, which will increase my interest in reading.
Even the Book of Mountains and Seas has a lot of fantastic ideas, not to mention if you want to add more to this or that, you can add more of your imaginative ideas. You can add some other character descriptions. It would also be good to change the characters. You can still have a second male lead, a third female, etc. Come on, write it. I will continue to support you. Write well. At least it will remind me that there is another novel to be updated every day. I am looking forward to reading it.
"Ahem!" As soon as the arrow was pulled out, the originally quiet man coughed up a mouthful of blood, and the wound at his heart was extremely bloody. He seemed to feel the pain and frowned, but did not wake up. .
Is he still alive? Huan Xiaomao hurriedly poured out all the freshly picked herbs from the bamboo basket, looked for a sunken stone next to the man, and picked up a longer pebble from somewhere nearby. .
"Little ears, give me the dragon bud grass.".
She placed all the dragon bud grass that Little Ear handed over to the sunken area of the stone, holding the pebble she picked up everywhere in her hand and grinding it vigorously. After grinding all the dragon bud grass into grass mud, he used the ivory knife he brought with him to carefully scoop up the grass mud and gently applied it to the man's wound. .
"Little Ear, go and find the lily grass." She ordered Little Ear while tearing off the hem of her clothes. After taking the grass, she wrapped the grass in the corner of her skirt and beat it hard with a stone. She pinched the skirt and squeezed out the juice from the herbal medicine, and dripped it into the man's mouth. . After several twists and turns, the man's brows finally smoothed out and his breathing gradually became much calmer. Huan Xiaomao was so tired that he sat down in the flowers. Little Ear also followed her example, sitting down in the flowers and pretending to wipe the sweat on his forehead with his paws.
"You." Huan Xiaomao lay on her side next to the man, held her little ears in the air, and let out a laugh like a silver bell. Little Ear also covered her belly and kept laughing. .
There was a sharp pain, as if the sun-shooting arrow had been struck. He frowned. . "Little ears".
"Little ears, give me the dragon bud grass.".
"Little Ear, go and find the grass.
Support the author, come on, I write too often, this writing style is no longer impressive. Come on, come on, I hope it will continue to develop, I love you.
Good subject matter and well written
"It's the season of early summer, and there's still a coolness in the mountains in the early morning. More than hundreds of years have passed since Yi shot down those nine suns from the sky. In the past, there was no grass growing in the Shiri Kingdom. Now, relying on the business of selling mountain spring Biluo tea, the lives of the people are becoming more and more comfortable. Frankly, even the wilderness of Funiu Mountain, which is far away from the Central Plains, has changed from the poverty and poverty it once was under the scorching sun, and has become green and lush. "The content of this first paragraph has an indescribable flavor, which makes people feel bright. I like the author's style of writing very much.
In addition, in the text:
"Little Ear is neither a human nor a god. It was an adult gift given to her by Lord Wu Xian, her master, on her eighteenth birthday. It is a pure white eared rat with high aura. This eared rat has been with Xiao Mao since she was a child. Although it is only as big as a palm, its ability to cause trouble is beyond the reach of the entire San Miao tribe."
"When he first rushed out of the bamboo basket, Little Er was just angry. Now after hearing what Huan Xiaomao said, he looked up and down at Huan Xiaomao's situation. He saw Huan Xiaomao in mid-air, tied with a piece of silk cloth under the jujube tree, with his little paws covering his three-petal mouth, making a snickering expression."
"But she doesn't know who has fulfilled whose fate. But from now on, she will be destined to be entangled with that person for the rest of her life."
"I walked forward for an unknown amount of time in the direction pointed by the little ear. In the middle of the basin, I saw a man in red clothes, lying quietly deep in the flowers, with a sharp arrow stuck in his heart. The green hair on his head spread randomly in the depths of the flowers blooming all over the mountains and fields. The bright red clothes looked particularly dazzling. So many years later, Huan Xiaomao would still often think of the cornflowers blooming all over the mountain and his dazzling red clothes when they first met him."
"Herbal medicine seems to have been applied on the chest, which is cool. It seems that medicine dripped into the corner of the mouth. Is someone helping me? He swallowed the medicine hard.
"That man's appearance is more beautiful than Huan Xiaomo has ever seen before. Pale lips, a high bridge of nose, a pair of long closed eyes, and a cinnabar mole on the left eye. Huan Xiaohao thought to himself that if such a beautiful face were born on a woman, it would definitely make the country and the city beautiful, but it happened to be born on a man. It was really a waste. "
"Who was speaking? In the haziness, he seemed to hear a woman's laughter. Is it his mother? No, she couldn't appear next to him. Was that Aunt Xihe? No, she couldn't laugh happily in front of him. Who is she? . "
"He tried desperately to open his eyes, but his eyelids felt as heavy as lead. "
The writing in these parts is quite delicate, and overall the whole text has a tone that I like very much. I like cute pets like Little Ears. They are fluffy and have a tendency to get into trouble wherever there is trouble. Especially the way he complains to Huan Xiaohan, it makes me laugh. The male protagonist is so beautiful that it makes people drool. Is it true? Well, I know that the male protagonist will always belong to the female protagonist.
Anyway, I really like the author's style of writing. Come on, work hard. Of course, updating on time every day is the most important thing.
"It's the season of early summer, and there's still a coolness in the mountains in the early morning. More than hundreds of years have passed since Yi shot down those nine suns from the sky. In the past, there was no grass growing in the Shiri Kingdom. Now, relying on the business of selling mountain spring Biluo tea, the lives of the people are becoming more and more comfortable. Frankly, even the wilderness of Funiu Mountain, which is far away from the Central Plains, has changed from the poverty and poverty it once was under the scorching sun, and has become green and lush. "The content of this first paragraph has an indescribable flavor, which makes people feel bright. I like the author's style of writing very much.
In addition, in the text:
"Little Ear is neither a human nor a god. It was an adult gift given to her by Lord Wu Xian, her master, on her eighteenth birthday. It is a pure white eared rat with high aura. This eared rat has been with Xiao Mao since she was a child. Although it is only as big as a palm, its ability to cause trouble is beyond the reach of the entire San Miao tribe."
"When he first rushed out of the bamboo basket, Little Er was just angry. Now after hearing what Huan Xiaomao said, he looked up and down at Huan Xiaomao's situation. He saw Huan Xiaomao in mid-air, tied with a piece of silk cloth under the jujube tree, with his little paws covering his three-petal mouth, making a snickering expression."
"But she doesn't know who has fulfilled whose fate. But from now on, she will be destined to be entangled with that person for the rest of her life."
"I walked forward for an unknown amount of time in the direction pointed by the little ear. In the middle of the basin, I saw a man in red clothes, lying quietly deep in the flowers, with a sharp arrow stuck in his heart. The green hair on his head spread randomly in the depths of the flowers blooming all over the mountains and fields. The bright red clothes looked particularly dazzling. So many years later, Huan Xiaomao would still often think of the cornflowers blooming all over the mountain and his dazzling red clothes when they first met him."
"Herbal medicine seems to have been applied on the chest, which is cool. It seems that medicine dripped into the corner of the mouth. Is someone helping me? He swallowed the medicine hard.
"That man's appearance is more beautiful than Huan Xiaomo has ever seen before. Pale lips, a high bridge of nose, a pair of long closed eyes, and a cinnabar mole on the left eye. Huan Xiaohao thought to himself that if such a beautiful face were born on a woman, it would definitely make the country and the city beautiful, but it happened to be born on a man. It was really a waste. "
"Who was speaking? In the haziness, he seemed to hear a woman's laughter. Is it his mother? No, she couldn't appear next to him. Was that Aunt Xihe? No, she couldn't laugh happily in front of him. Who is she? . "
"He tried desperately to open his eyes, but his eyelids felt as heavy as lead. "
The writing in these parts is quite delicate, and overall the whole text has a tone that I like very much. I like cute pets like Little Ears. They are fluffy and have a tendency to get into trouble wherever there is trouble. Especially the way he complains to Huan Xiaohan, it makes me laugh. The male protagonist is so beautiful that it makes people drool. Is it true? Well, I know that the male protagonist will always belong to the female protagonist.
Anyway, I really like the author's style of writing. Come on, work hard. Of course, updating on time every day is the most important thing.
What about your vocabulary? Just posting it like this makes me want to strangle you to death.
After reading this book for so long, I finally found one worth reading. The author will update it quickly, but he must ensure the quality. Updates are in progress...
Jiayoujiayoujiayou
It's very well written. I look forward to more articles. I'll keep up with the updates every day. Oh well, I won't say anymore. The boss is here. I'll continue reading after get off work... Come on, Yisheng.
In fact, I read this article before it was revised. The writing was unfamiliar at the beginning, and the sentences were not very accurate in portraying the characters and scenery. The writing was not very clear. There was only one result and no reason. When I looked at it, I could only say, "Why is this happening?" Instead of "Oh, so that's how it is." It's just that the middle one is missing. A brief introduction: it is not easy to write this kind of article. It requires a lot of historical knowledge. I also read through books and wrote it virtually based on the situation at that time. However, there is nothing exciting in the writing. I can't close the web page and I can still recall the exciting aspects of the novel I just read. There is no one. A single point can attract people. It may also be because the author is not experienced enough in writing novels and cannot grasp a wonderful point. When describing it, the character characteristics are not clearly described. The novel relies on the author's writing description and then adds the reader's own imagination to create a picture of his own. However, The author's description seems very stiff. It is a character description that is forced into the character's activities. It is not a very rounded description of the character. He can use more scenes to describe the inner dynamics of the character. Even the bulingbuling of the eyes must be vividly written. Now that you have revised and adjusted everything you wrote before, it is indeed very good. The content is much smoother than before, and you have added a lot of outstanding features in the character description. When it comes to describing, it is not abrupt at all. The character description is also very smooth and delicate, allowing readers to feel the psychological dynamics of the male protagonist at that time, and smoothly eliciting an idea from the male protagonist. Regarding the choice of plot, don't you think the progress from meeting to acquaintance is a bit too fast? No matter how good the person is, they will not fall in love too early. Author, you have only written a few articles now, and the seeds of love have already begun to rise (this is just me Personal opinion, I personally feel that this progress is too fast), you have written a lot of things about the two of them who have been ambiguous for a long time, and they have been ambiguous for a long time. If a cauliflower falls down, there will be a person who looks at each other, and the affection is endless, but does not reveal it. Can you, the author, Write something that is innovative, eye-catching, and memorable after reading it. It is best to add something else in the middle. Don't always have scenes that increase the relationship between the two of them. It will be boring to watch too many scenes of ambiguous scenes. For example, it would also be good to write some scenes of the male protagonist's previous life. , Or the female protagonist goes out alone with her friends to live a very ordinary life. The male protagonist should not be too naive. The gods above can still come down to earth to play secretly. The male protagonist is a big man and cannot be a mother. If you are a mother, you will suffer. This is not a BL story. It's better to add more other interesting chapters. Too many rules will make you tired, and you will also get tired of eating the same flavor of food all the time. Add some legendary color. I haven't seen anything legendary or fantasy yet, which will increase my interest in reading. Even the Book of Mountains and Seas has a lot of fantastic ideas, not to mention if you want to add more to this or that, you can add more of your imaginative ideas. You can add some other character descriptions. It would also be good to change the characters. You can still have a second male lead, a third female, etc. Come on, write it. I will continue to support you. Write well. At least it will remind me that there is another novel to be updated every day. I am looking forward to reading it.
"Ahem!" As soon as the arrow was pulled out, the originally quiet man coughed up a mouthful of blood, and the wound at his heart was extremely bloody. He seemed to feel the pain and frowned, but did not wake up. . Is he still alive? Huan Xiaomao hurriedly poured out all the freshly picked herbs from the bamboo basket, looked for a sunken stone next to the man, and picked up a longer pebble from somewhere nearby. . "Little ears, give me the dragon bud grass.". She placed all the dragon bud grass that Little Ear handed over to the sunken area of the stone, holding the pebble she picked up everywhere in her hand and grinding it vigorously. After grinding all the dragon bud grass into grass mud, he used the ivory knife he brought with him to carefully scoop up the grass mud and gently applied it to the man's wound. . "Little Ear, go and find the lily grass." She ordered Little Ear while tearing off the hem of her clothes. After taking the grass, she wrapped the grass in the corner of her skirt and beat it hard with a stone. She pinched the skirt and squeezed out the juice from the herbal medicine, and dripped it into the man's mouth. . After several twists and turns, the man's brows finally smoothed out and his breathing gradually became much calmer. Huan Xiaomao was so tired that he sat down in the flowers. Little Ear also followed her example, sitting down in the flowers and pretending to wipe the sweat on his forehead with his paws. "You." Huan Xiaomao lay on her side next to the man, held her little ears in the air, and let out a laugh like a silver bell. Little Ear also covered her belly and kept laughing. . There was a sharp pain, as if the sun-shooting arrow had been struck. He frowned. . "Little ears". "Little ears, give me the dragon bud grass.". "Little Ear, go and find the grass. Support the author, come on, I write too often, this writing style is no longer impressive. Come on, come on, I hope it will continue to develop, I love you.
Good subject matter and well written
"It's the season of early summer, and there's still a coolness in the mountains in the early morning. More than hundreds of years have passed since Yi shot down those nine suns from the sky. In the past, there was no grass growing in the Shiri Kingdom. Now, relying on the business of selling mountain spring Biluo tea, the lives of the people are becoming more and more comfortable. Frankly, even the wilderness of Funiu Mountain, which is far away from the Central Plains, has changed from the poverty and poverty it once was under the scorching sun, and has become green and lush. "The content of this first paragraph has an indescribable flavor, which makes people feel bright. I like the author's style of writing very much. In addition, in the text: "Little Ear is neither a human nor a god. It was an adult gift given to her by Lord Wu Xian, her master, on her eighteenth birthday. It is a pure white eared rat with high aura. This eared rat has been with Xiao Mao since she was a child. Although it is only as big as a palm, its ability to cause trouble is beyond the reach of the entire San Miao tribe." "When he first rushed out of the bamboo basket, Little Er was just angry. Now after hearing what Huan Xiaomao said, he looked up and down at Huan Xiaomao's situation. He saw Huan Xiaomao in mid-air, tied with a piece of silk cloth under the jujube tree, with his little paws covering his three-petal mouth, making a snickering expression." "But she doesn't know who has fulfilled whose fate. But from now on, she will be destined to be entangled with that person for the rest of her life." "I walked forward for an unknown amount of time in the direction pointed by the little ear. In the middle of the basin, I saw a man in red clothes, lying quietly deep in the flowers, with a sharp arrow stuck in his heart. The green hair on his head spread randomly in the depths of the flowers blooming all over the mountains and fields. The bright red clothes looked particularly dazzling. So many years later, Huan Xiaomao would still often think of the cornflowers blooming all over the mountain and his dazzling red clothes when they first met him." "Herbal medicine seems to have been applied on the chest, which is cool. It seems that medicine dripped into the corner of the mouth. Is someone helping me? He swallowed the medicine hard. "That man's appearance is more beautiful than Huan Xiaomo has ever seen before. Pale lips, a high bridge of nose, a pair of long closed eyes, and a cinnabar mole on the left eye. Huan Xiaohao thought to himself that if such a beautiful face were born on a woman, it would definitely make the country and the city beautiful, but it happened to be born on a man. It was really a waste. " "Who was speaking? In the haziness, he seemed to hear a woman's laughter. Is it his mother? No, she couldn't appear next to him. Was that Aunt Xihe? No, she couldn't laugh happily in front of him. Who is she? . " "He tried desperately to open his eyes, but his eyelids felt as heavy as lead. " The writing in these parts is quite delicate, and overall the whole text has a tone that I like very much. I like cute pets like Little Ears. They are fluffy and have a tendency to get into trouble wherever there is trouble. Especially the way he complains to Huan Xiaohan, it makes me laugh. The male protagonist is so beautiful that it makes people drool. Is it true? Well, I know that the male protagonist will always belong to the female protagonist. Anyway, I really like the author's style of writing. Come on, work hard. Of course, updating on time every day is the most important thing.
"It's the season of early summer, and there's still a coolness in the mountains in the early morning. More than hundreds of years have passed since Yi shot down those nine suns from the sky. In the past, there was no grass growing in the Shiri Kingdom. Now, relying on the business of selling mountain spring Biluo tea, the lives of the people are becoming more and more comfortable. Frankly, even the wilderness of Funiu Mountain, which is far away from the Central Plains, has changed from the poverty and poverty it once was under the scorching sun, and has become green and lush. "The content of this first paragraph has an indescribable flavor, which makes people feel bright. I like the author's style of writing very much. In addition, in the text: "Little Ear is neither a human nor a god. It was an adult gift given to her by Lord Wu Xian, her master, on her eighteenth birthday. It is a pure white eared rat with high aura. This eared rat has been with Xiao Mao since she was a child. Although it is only as big as a palm, its ability to cause trouble is beyond the reach of the entire San Miao tribe." "When he first rushed out of the bamboo basket, Little Er was just angry. Now after hearing what Huan Xiaomao said, he looked up and down at Huan Xiaomao's situation. He saw Huan Xiaomao in mid-air, tied with a piece of silk cloth under the jujube tree, with his little paws covering his three-petal mouth, making a snickering expression." "But she doesn't know who has fulfilled whose fate. But from now on, she will be destined to be entangled with that person for the rest of her life." "I walked forward for an unknown amount of time in the direction pointed by the little ear. In the middle of the basin, I saw a man in red clothes, lying quietly deep in the flowers, with a sharp arrow stuck in his heart. The green hair on his head spread randomly in the depths of the flowers blooming all over the mountains and fields. The bright red clothes looked particularly dazzling. So many years later, Huan Xiaomao would still often think of the cornflowers blooming all over the mountain and his dazzling red clothes when they first met him." "Herbal medicine seems to have been applied on the chest, which is cool. It seems that medicine dripped into the corner of the mouth. Is someone helping me? He swallowed the medicine hard. "That man's appearance is more beautiful than Huan Xiaomo has ever seen before. Pale lips, a high bridge of nose, a pair of long closed eyes, and a cinnabar mole on the left eye. Huan Xiaohao thought to himself that if such a beautiful face were born on a woman, it would definitely make the country and the city beautiful, but it happened to be born on a man. It was really a waste. " "Who was speaking? In the haziness, he seemed to hear a woman's laughter. Is it his mother? No, she couldn't appear next to him. Was that Aunt Xihe? No, she couldn't laugh happily in front of him. Who is she? . " "He tried desperately to open his eyes, but his eyelids felt as heavy as lead. " The writing in these parts is quite delicate, and overall the whole text has a tone that I like very much. I like cute pets like Little Ears. They are fluffy and have a tendency to get into trouble wherever there is trouble. Especially the way he complains to Huan Xiaohan, it makes me laugh. The male protagonist is so beautiful that it makes people drool. Is it true? Well, I know that the male protagonist will always belong to the female protagonist. Anyway, I really like the author's style of writing. Come on, work hard. Of course, updating on time every day is the most important thing.
What about your vocabulary? Just posting it like this makes me want to strangle you to death.
It's my favorite style, very good!