You’re Just a Girl

Dear author, have you left Jinjiang? Why did you stop updating for so long?

Why doesn't the author update it?

By the way, it suddenly occurred to me that since this book can't be uploaded to V for the time being, I won't click Finish after I finish it, so as to avoid piracy. Even if I give back to the readers. At that time, everyone can read my ancient articles, and while waiting for the update, you can also take a look at this one (I estimate that it will not be on V for a long, long time, and maybe it will always be a free article). Okay, that's the happy decision.

Li Li is howling in the mud~ Zhi Meng is coming, hug him and rub him! I have read Dada's article carefully, and I also have some thoughts. It's my honor to share it with Dada~ 1. Regarding the title of the book "You're Just a Girl", it sounds fresh and refreshing, but it cannot fully describe the entire article. Moreover, after reading tens of thousands of words, Zhi Meng did not feel that the heroine, as a girl, is a vulnerable group [Spread your hands... 2. Regarding copywriting, there are three categories, and I personally prefer the second and third. It is recommended that the first one be removed, because it has no characteristics and does not summarize the content of the article. Then blend the second and third, and readers should find it refreshing. 3. After reading tens of thousands of words about the overall style and direction of the article, Zhimeng can only say that its positioning is greatly unstable. When placing the order, it was clearly stated that a power supply with workplace experience is required. In fact, the entire article is not complicated and there is no intrigue in the workplace. In Zhimeng's view, although the article has workplace meaning, it is difficult to retain readers without the essence of the workplace. If you look at it from another angle, the main male and female protagonists do not have the spark to impress people. 4. Most of the perspective of the entire article only focuses on the heroine. Although the article is described in the third person, every scene is from the perspective of the heroine, and many of them are the heroine's personal thoughts. Rather than saying it is the heroine, it is better to express my own thoughts. It shows that most of the characters have not yet fully entered the role. Except for the heroine, it is easy to become a Mary Sue when writing like this, and it is difficult to have conflicts between the characters. 5. There are not many ups and downs in the plot. Except that it is more attractive to Zhi Meng at the beginning, it becomes more superficial towards the end. In view of what has been said before, there is a huge lack of intrigue that should be found in workplace literature, allowing the male and female protagonists to find true love in the intrigue. And, at least in the first 30,000, the female protagonist and the male protagonist don't interact much. For example, in Chapter 5, during the meeting, the female protagonist is angry and blames the male protagonist. In fact, more tit-for-tat content can be described to increase the sense of collision of language. In some places, it was too fast and there was no necessary explanation. For example, in Chapter 6, the male protagonist confessed his love directly over the phone. Zhimeng understands that Da Da wants to bury a joke, but this joke is too unnatural and will be very troublesome for readers who don't understand. It is recommended to add some clues beforehand, which will make it easier for readers to look for answers. Zhi Meng read the comments. The 14-year-old boy in white is not the male protagonist. The plot is very deep. I hope it won't be buried too deep, otherwise I will lose all my patience... 6. As for the character design, it can be seen that a lot of effort was put into its construction. But as far as current readers' preferences are concerned, it is not a likable type. But it doesn't matter. As long as the design is clever, characters with complex aspects can still stand out. But there are a lot of shortcomings in this aspect. For example, the age gap between the heroine and the male protagonist is 40 and 27. Although it is not a big deal, when I think about it, it still feels like an old cow eating young grass [please ignore me... The main thing is the shaping of the male protagonist. He is already a 21-year-old young man who has already graduated. If he gives the female protagonist some colorful things, I am afraid it will violate logic... It feels like this is done by a junior high school student... So the male protagonist overall feels childish. Although he has a cynical appearance, it can give Zhimeng an "embroidered pillow" illusion. In fact, you can write a story that is cynical, but it saves a deal, a negotiation, etc. At a critical moment. Even if it is a mistake, it can also save the heroine from being in trouble. Wouldn't it increase the friendship between the heroine and the hero? 7. Finally, there is the language. The language is fluent and has strong plasticity. This is what Zhimeng must learn! Whether it is the appearance of the characters or the psychological activities, the descriptions are very accurate, especially the moment when the male protagonist encounters the female protagonist's silk scarf [heart-shaped... The above are Zhimeng's little suggestions. It is Zhimeng's honor to read Li Li's article. Please forgive me for any shortcomings. I hope that the more I write, the more prosperous I write and gain more happiness! [Yunge Long Commentary by Zhimeng]

The girl has not written reviews for a long time, especially long reviews (actually she has never written one). Because I had to take a long vacation, I almost worked overtime for several days in a row. Then I packed two suitcases for my family and prepared various travel arrangements. The long review I originally planned to write was delayed for another two days. Yesterday I went hiking under the scorching sun. It happened to be the first day of my period, and I had a 40-pound giant baby that I needed to carry at any time. When I returned to the hotel in the evening, I was almost collapsed from the inside out. Then, I hand washed and dried the clothes of three people. Although there is a spouse of the opposite sex accompanying them, they are not pregnant. Lala Zaza wrote such a long paragraph earlier. It seems that she is trying to make up the number of words for a long review (that is, you bite me), but actually she wants to explain that I, myself, am a tomboy! Even when I am writing the review now, I am not allowed to go into the water because I am on my period, so I sent the baby to a opposite-sex spouse to take to the hotel swimming pool. Otherwise, I would definitely take the baby to swim. Of course, before writing my review, I had just finished a conference call and responded to N emails. As a senior female man and a working mother, I deeply understand the heroine. After reading so many novels with Xiao Baihua as the mainstream, I finally became confused: Do women have to be weak and pitiful to become a heroine? As for those female characters who are smart, capable, smart and intelligent, they are either villains, supporting characters, or simply cannon fodder - wow, such a powerful woman will definitely not fight for the male lead with a little white flower, they will just smile indifferently and then leave. Really? Real. Because this man is so stupid, leave it to that stupid man! In this country where straight men are cancerous, there is really no need to break your bones for a man. In the past two days, there has been a lot of news about trafficked women who have become touching figures in China. Many women I follow on Weibo have expressed their extreme disappointment in this country where straight men are cancerous. Yesterday it was said that it is illegal for single women to freeze their eggs. My eggs, my body, I love freezing, what's going on? You don't care about abducting and trafficking women, but you're taking care of my uterus? Therefore, in the vast ocean of online articles, shouldn't I be excited to see a heroine with such a setting, and to see such an article with an abnormally normal outlook on life? Although she is a masculine woman, she still has a heart that needs love based on respect and recognition. At the same time, fresh meat is also a must. In fact, a woman who is eighty years old still loves her eighteen-year-old body. Since the current opposite-sex spouse cannot be updated, let me have fun with this brave young male protagonist! Author, please give me more benefits!

I can't remember the password at the moment. I'll try and see if I can leave a comment. Come on, Li Li.

Persistence is victory! Come on!

The author's writing style is pretty good, keep up the good work

In fact, the heroine reminds me of Hu Lili from Shenzhen Houseshare.

Is that boy in white in the second grade of junior high school Song Chen? Or a second male lead or a guest appearance? By the way, I am also a bad gamer. Super Mario was the one I played most when I was in junior high school (^_^)