You're Not Even My Dream Guy

Congratulations on the completion, spread the flowers ~ we will meet again for the next book!

Oops, I was so wildly imaginative at the end, I felt so excited, hahahaha, there is so much room for reverie, I am looking forward to the extra chapter during this period of disappearance, spreading flowers

Damn, is the heroine's character really good like this?? It would be nice to be more decisive~ People watching feel very unfortunate for Pei Yuanda!!

Okay, I seem to be able to guess what is going to happen. I look forward to it.

The article is great. Can you come and stay in my arms for a while, drink tea, chat, and listen to music? I prefer to make friends through literature, why don't you leave me alone? If you want to die, leave your children and lead them to the house of death. You must come, see you there or not

We have already started to fall in love, and the experienced lover seems to be very innocent

I guess my kissing skills are pretty good, hahaha

Susu is too happy, a little envious and jealous, hehehe

So sweet, mouthwatering

After reading the first ten chapters, I feel that Weiwei is quite talented in writing. The style of the whole article is relaxed, the male and female protagonists are both likable, and the story progresses relatively naturally. There are no obvious logical or technical problems along the way. The characteristics of the male protagonist are very obvious, and it is basically certain that Du Peng is about to suffer a tragedy by the fifth chapter. Although some authors like to create suspense in their articles so that people can't tell the difference between the male protagonist and the second male protagonist, and then let the readers take sides, I personally feel that the male protagonist should have the temperament of the male protagonist. The second male protagonist is someone who makes people pity, yearn for, and take home for comfort, but it is definitely not for the female protagonist. (Speaking of which, I once read a red novel. All the male protagonists in the front were not male protagonists. Only at the end did a person who looked like soy sauce and couldn't remember the name appear and took away the female protagonist. It was like vomiting blood.) Therefore, I firmly support Xiao Pei to take away the heroine and let the quiet and handsome Xiao Du shed tears. Maybe many girls have this contradictory fantasy in their hearts: they want him to be calm but also want him to be passionate. You need to be both naive and smart. You must have a good personality and be handsome. For this standard, Xiao Pei only met half of it, but in terms of this half, he already exceeded most people. And the most exciting thing is that he is quite low-key. Since I have only read the first ten chapters, the following is just my guess. I don't know if it is correct - he was the one who arranged for Su Su to take leave in the name of a work injury. He also bought a big lobster with his own money. Although it is not clear exactly what the reason was (maybe it was Su Su's toughness without anesthesia?) That moved him, but he did not impetuously use his power to overwhelm others, showing off the arrogance and coolness of a domineering president, but accompanied him by making jokes. This alone was good enough. And Su Su is just like us in the past, with a heart of devout love, silently watching her sweetheart from a distance - how innocent it is to miss. Touch your head, good Guliang will definitely have a good life. OK, let's talk about some of my own suggestions. Weiwei laughed with her own eyes. 1. The amount of dialogue is large and somewhat trivial. Whether it's the conversation in the hospital, the conversation between the mother-in-law after she wakes up, or when the male and female protagonists get together, it's almost always a question and an answer, lasting seven or eight lines. In fact, some things that have little to do with the main plot can be covered by narrative. Especially for the scenes between male and female protagonists, in addition to dialogue, you can also add actions, expressions, and appearance. After reading ten chapters, I still don't seem to know what Xiao Pei looks like, I just know that he is a handsome guy. As for Xiaopeng Children's Shoes, he only remembers his slender fingers and "the rays of the sun shining on his knuckles" (Oh, my god! I am so impressed by this sentence, it is so sparkling and adorable O(∩_∩)O~) 2. It is best to check and preview the chapter again after it is completed. Objectively speaking, there are not many typos in this article. I think I spent a lot of time typing it and checking it carefully. I just glanced through it and found two mistakes: the "family affairs" in Chapter 1 is outstanding and should be "family background", and the "rose paste" at the end of Chapter 2 should be "rose cake". However, blocked words may appear in chapters from time to time. It is best to click "Preview" before posting the chapter and replace those words. This will also reduce the time spent being reviewed by the chapter. 3. The plot of Su Su being hit by her own tennis racket has always troubled me. Li even went to Baidu to see under what circumstances his eyebrow bone would be hit, resulting in bleeding and stitches. Because the tennis racket is usually held horizontally in front of the abdomen, even when catching the ball, it is still a certain distance from your face, so you are more likely to be hit by the ball. However, there are exceptions, so let her be unlucky. But then it was said that the heroine's hands were full of blood. This is how hard the blow must be to cause such massive splatter bleeding. Normally, the heroine's forehead would have been smashed, and then she would have had a concussion and passed out. Moreover, with such a big swatter hitting the heroine's face, the colleagues opposite must have seen it, but as if they had discovered a new world, they would only shout: "Su Su, you are bleeding!!" A normal person's reaction should not be: "Ah, Su Su, how are you?" To sum up, it is recommended that Weiwei remove the "blood on one hand", and it is better to wipe it to the eyebrow bone, so that the blood from the cheek flows to the body. But the back meme about half of the face being swollen and covering half of the face is no longer needed. This requires a lot of tricky angles and a lot of powerful internal energy to achieve it (O(∩_∩)O haha, I'm not laughing at you, I was just amused by myself). Hmm... Actually, the above three points were all discovered by me through nitpicking. Weiwei, just listen to it. I wish you write better and better. Mwah.