How I Long for You Since We Parted

I saw it in Tieba before, and now I cried again after watching it in Jinjiang. I believe there is a world of ancient swords, and in that world there are such beautiful, strong, kind and stubborn people.

I am moved every time I watch it. I really like this fanfic.

Gentle and brave Fleur

I saw the recommendation on station b and finished reading it in one night. It was so touching. I can't help but feel sorry for the senior brother and junior sister.

This is the best fanfic I have ever seen. From Tieba to Baidu Cloud to Jinjiang, I don't know how many times I have read it, but I still find it memorable again and again. It's really written delicately and touchingly. Maybe this is also the ending they will have in my mind. I have always regarded ancient swords as a real world. Thank you for letting me have a glimpse of that world.

It really made me cry. It was so well written.

I cried while reading it, it was so touching.

Each part of the author's article narrates the experiences and feelings between Lingyue and Fu from a perspective or one person's self-recollection. The first-person narration is mixed with a lot of personal perceptual thoughts, and the whole is biased towards the stream of consciousness. Although only the chapter on Fu Yu has been completed so far, according to the notes when placing the order, the author plans to write from three perspectives: the male perspective, the female perspective, and the bystander's perspective. The story of Ling Yue and Fu Yu will be described from multiple angles, just like painting over and over again. The repeated narration will fill in the content lacking in other perspectives and make the article fuller. This setting is very good. However, there is a big problem with the current article - the plot is too jumpy. The content alternates between the present and the past, one's thoughts and one's reality, and it just snaps away without any transitions in the middle. If you don't have a certain understanding of the original work and can sort out the timeline on your own, readers will definitely be confused after reading it. Without the slightest precaution or concern, the plot just jumped around, breaking things into pieces_(:зゝ∠)_cutting the channel without warning was quite confusing. For a good stream of consciousness, whether the protagonist associates with external objects or freely fantasizes in his mind, like other articles, there needs to be a main line. The main line connects the previous and later to make the article a whole. For example, Fu Rui's memories of Ling Yue can be caused by being trapped in a fantasy, or they can be evoked by looking at objects related to Ling Yue (such as the sword spikes that were given), but don't chop the memories into pieces and throw them out every now and then. If you want to highlight the bond between the two at any time, you can also show it through objective description. Mixing the plot and diary-like memories together is too trivial, so it is better to separate them separately. As a novel, if it is difficult for readers to read it, how can they understand and understand what the author wants to express? For example, many articles will set up funny points and flashpoints to attract readers. Even if the content described in the stream of consciousness will have ups and downs, the lack of plot will make the article uninteresting. This article has two lines, memories of past events and encounters with monsters in reality, but the content is too broad, or the first three chapters are mainly memories that do not form a large scale/continuous plot, resulting in almost no plot in the front... If the full plot of the article is sorted out, there is only one line of reality. First, there are three chapters of preparation activities, learning a chapter of spells, and then one chapter with the ending. The rhythm is very out of control. If you want to create monsters in the first three chapters due to excessive memories of past events, why not release the demon thing first and then add memories evenly. For example, the author should make the dough of reality evenly and then sprinkle the seasonings of memories on top, instead of making a bag of memories to barely stretch out the dough of reality and wrap it up. In addition, there is no boundary between the two. The result is that the memories are too scattered and cannot be connected to the plot, and the reality is mixed in and it is difficult to see the plot. At the end of the story, now that it has come to an end, it is necessary to wrap up both the memory and reality lines. However, the author focused on creating memory kills and played the monster... Even if this is not important, I still at least mention it. To sum it up, it's packed in the beginning, scattered in the end, and jumps back and forth in the middle. It is more difficult to write a short story well than to write a long novel, because it is difficult to see if there are enough gaps to fill in the long story if it is scattered or improperly arranged, and then the length is used to offset it. However, the short story must be compressed into a smaller number of words and still have to present a complete effect. It is recommended that the beginning and end be tighter and the plot should be changed to follow the rhythm.

Come on, I saw the original poster's article in Yue Tu Bar!

Ahhhhhh, I have been looking for it for a long time and finally found it. The capital letters are great. The emotional analysis is really spot on. They are Ling Yue and Fu Yu in my heart. They are the ones who protect all sentient beings and each other together. I am so moved! ! !